Critics wanted - GoFuckYourself.com

ivango · 04-15-2004, 05:36 PM

for the new design of my paysite
http://www.gaybdsmclub.com
Please don't be descreet in your sentences

maxdaname · 04-15-2004, 05:52 PM

Pay me and I'll be your critic!

LOVE · 04-15-2004, 05:55 PM

It was pleasant to me, rather interesting site!

Good luck!

sean416 · 04-15-2004, 05:57 PM

Sorry, I dont click on links with "gay" and "bdsm" in the link.

Just joking, the site looks good.

Paul Waters · 04-15-2004, 05:58 PM

Well done!

Anna_O · 04-15-2004, 06:02 PM

Looks damn good

Only problem for me is that it looks like the same two guys all over the tour. Maybe diversify a little...

aiken · 04-15-2004, 06:35 PM

I like the graphic design a lot, but you could use some copy editing.

"Fetish plays" -> "Hot Fetishes" (or something like that; "Fetish plays" definitely doesn't work)

"Today Story" -> "Today's Story"

"Wanna see the lust and voluptuousness at its true sight?" -> ?

"Please visit iBill, our authorized MERCHANT, for accest to GayBDSMClub.com To cancel subscription, please visit"
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"Please visit iBill, our authorized MERCHANT, for access to GayBDSMClub.com. To cancel your subscription, please visit"

"Sign up to get an ultimate access to this astonishing site with lots of high-resolution images and qualitative videos, tons of stories. Constant updates and perfect support service will do its best to give you the maximum of pleasure and conveniences. Become a member of this tremendous extreme GAY-BDSM CLUB site"
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V
"Sign up to get complete access to this astonishing site with lots of high-resolution images, quality videos, and tons of stories. Our constant updates and first-rate customer support make GAY-BDSM CLUB incredibly sexy and easy to use. Become a member of our extreme GAY-BDSM CLUB today!"

...or something like that.

Cheers
-b

LOVE · 04-15-2004, 06:38 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by aiken
I like the graphic design a lot, but you could use some copy editing.

"Fetish plays" -> "Hot Fetishes" (or something like that; "Fetish plays" definitely doesn't work)

"Today Story" -> "Today's Story"
...or something like that.

Cheers
-b

Respect

harvey · 04-15-2004, 06:43 PM

looks... gay

Newton - XXXAmigoz · 04-15-2004, 06:44 PM

Nice Design

webmaster x · 04-15-2004, 10:25 PM

Your has a lot of potential. Good Luck!

$tandaman · 04-16-2004, 06:12 AM

check your css, your html tables are all broken up

ivango · 04-16-2004, 10:37 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by aiken
I like the graphic design a lot, but you could use some copy editing....or something like that.

Cheers
-b

Thank you very much for very useful answer

Lykos · 04-16-2004, 11:02 AM

Looks nice to me

ivango · 04-16-2004, 12:57 PM

Great thanks for your opinions

but up, up...
Critics, please more critic

sumz · 04-16-2004, 12:59 PM

Site looks awesome! That stuff should sell extremely well.

ivango · 04-16-2004, 02:46 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by sumz
Site looks awesome! That stuff should sell extremely well.

Thank you... I sell it good enough, ~1:90 from mixed LL, SE and TGP traffic. But I've not so much traffic. Revsharers needed.

Mefo · 04-16-2004, 02:52 PM

looks nice, should do very well

ivango · 04-17-2004, 02:15 PM

Up! Up!
Site is tuned now, and critique still needed!
http://www.gaybdsmclub.com

rojo · 04-17-2004, 03:29 PM

buttons on the join page are placed too confusing...
the rest looks good

tranza · 04-17-2004, 03:33 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by sean416
Sorry, I dont click on links with "gay" and "bdsm" in the link.

Same thing here....

MayhemX · 04-17-2004, 03:37 PM

Well first off I went to click the image and it isn't linked up. I'd suggest making your front image be COMPLETELY clickable and link through to either your join page (if you're confident that they will want to purchase straight away) or to your tour page so they can get a better feel for what they're going to buy before purchasing.

I would also recommend you feature the tour more prominently on the front page.. "HARDCORE BDSM footage, click here for a free tour"

Your tour pages are good, but they are not interconnected. I clicked tour and was taken to a page, then on that page I also clicked tour and was taken to a different page. This means you have more than one tour page to your tour, yet you're not displaying that information.. perhaps insert some 'More>>>" or 'Continue with Tour>>>" buttons on those pages and then a call to action with a larger 'sign up now'.

The surfer needs to be directed to what to do. You can't just expect them to arrive at your site and do things you want them to. They need prompts to go in the direction you want (to your join page). Remember where the surfer is at...

WHAT'S IN IT FOR ME????

You must give them a reason to buy, so show them your content (which looks like it's good), and then call them to do something. Force the issue.

Anyway, you wanted critical advice, that's what I've got.. soft sell can work on some things, but this is also a BDSM site, and when you're being BDSM you may as well take a dominant selling standpoint for your site. Likelihood is you'll get some takers when you tell them what they need to do.

Good luck.. BDSM rocks!!

ivango · 04-17-2004, 03:49 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by MayhemX
Good luck.. BDSM rocks!!

Thank you. Seems your post is very useful

04-15-2004, 05:36 PM	#1
ivango Registered User Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Dreamland Posts: 55	Critics wanted for the new design of my paysite http://www.gaybdsmclub.com Please don't be descreet in your sentences

04-15-2004, 05:57 PM	#4
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04-15-2004, 05:58 PM	#5
Paul Waters Confirmed User Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: Toronto, Ontario Posts: 4,402	Well done! __________________ Paul

04-15-2004, 06:02 PM	#6
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04-15-2004, 06:35 PM	#7
aiken Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Kona, HI Posts: 204	I like the graphic design a lot, but you could use some copy editing. "Fetish plays" -> "Hot Fetishes" (or something like that; "Fetish plays" definitely doesn't work) "Today Story" -> "Today's Story" "Wanna see the lust and voluptuousness at its true sight?" -> ? "Please visit iBill, our authorized MERCHANT, for accest to GayBDSMClub.com To cancel subscription, please visit" \| V "Please visit iBill, our authorized MERCHANT, for access to GayBDSMClub.com. To cancel your subscription, please visit" "Sign up to get an ultimate access to this astonishing site with lots of high-resolution images and qualitative videos, tons of stories. Constant updates and perfect support service will do its best to give you the maximum of pleasure and conveniences. Become a member of this tremendous extreme GAY-BDSM CLUB site" \| V "Sign up to get complete access to this astonishing site with lots of high-resolution images, quality videos, and tons of stories. Our constant updates and first-rate customer support make GAY-BDSM CLUB incredibly sexy and easy to use. Become a member of our extreme GAY-BDSM CLUB today!" ...or something like that. Cheers -b __________________ ICQ: 12005327

04-15-2004, 05:52 PM	#2
maxdaname Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2003 Posts: 5,193	Pay me and I'll be your critic!

04-15-2004, 05:55 PM	#3
LOVE Confirmed User Join Date: Sep 2002 Posts: 322	It was pleasant to me, rather interesting site! Good luck!

04-15-2004, 06:43 PM	#9
harvey Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: 127.0.0.1 Posts: 9,266	looks... gay __________________ This post is endorsed by CIA, KGB, MI6, the Mafia, Illuminati, Kim Jong Il, Worldwide Ninjas Association, Klingon Empire and lolcats. Don't mess around with it, just accept it and embrace the truth

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Newton - XXXAmigoz Confirmed User Join Date: Feb 2004 Posts: 1,026	Nice Design __________________ SIG TOO BIG! Maximum 120x60 button and no more than 3 text lines of DEFAULT SIZE and COLOR. Unless your sig is for a GFY top banner sponsor, then you may use a 624x80 instead of a 120x60.

04-15-2004, 10:25 PM	#11
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$tandaman Pimping 8EZ Industry Role: Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: New Jersey Posts: 3,530	check your css, your html tables are all broken up __________________ CentroProfits.com - Make money with 3000+ Models! ModelCentro.com - Multiple award winning hosted CMS designed to run solo model sites, with affiliate program built in. Launch your model site in 24 hrs or less! FanCentro.com - Premium social network for SWs & Fans!

04-16-2004, 11:02 AM	#14
Lykos Too lazy to set a custom title Industry Role: Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: World Posts: 31,030	Looks nice to me __________________

04-16-2004, 12:57 PM	#15
ivango Registered User Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Dreamland Posts: 55	Great thanks for your opinions but up, up... Critics, please more critic

04-16-2004, 12:59 PM	#16
sumz Confirmed User Join Date: Mar 2004 Posts: 812	Site looks awesome! That stuff should sell extremely well.

04-16-2004, 02:52 PM	#18
Mefo Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: Amsterdam Posts: 6,169	looks nice, should do very well __________________

04-17-2004, 02:15 PM	#19
ivango Registered User Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Dreamland Posts: 55	Up! Up! Site is tuned now, and critique still needed! http://www.gaybdsmclub.com

04-17-2004, 03:29 PM	#20
rojo Registered User Join Date: Mar 2003 Posts: 3	buttons on the join page are placed too confusing... the rest looks good __________________ <a href="http://hit.sunnydollars.net/ref.php?q=1717,0,0,http://www.sunnydollars.com/"><img src="http://www.sexvalley.net/im/sunny_150x75_06.gif" width=160 height=75 border=0></a>

04-17-2004, 03:37 PM	#22
MayhemX Registered User Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Canada Posts: 55	Well first off I went to click the image and it isn't linked up. I'd suggest making your front image be COMPLETELY clickable and link through to either your join page (if you're confident that they will want to purchase straight away) or to your tour page so they can get a better feel for what they're going to buy before purchasing. I would also recommend you feature the tour more prominently on the front page.. "HARDCORE BDSM footage, click here for a free tour" Your tour pages are good, but they are not interconnected. I clicked tour and was taken to a page, then on that page I also clicked tour and was taken to a different page. This means you have more than one tour page to your tour, yet you're not displaying that information.. perhaps insert some 'More>>>" or 'Continue with Tour>>>" buttons on those pages and then a call to action with a larger 'sign up now'. The surfer needs to be directed to what to do. You can't just expect them to arrive at your site and do things you want them to. They need prompts to go in the direction you want (to your join page). Remember where the surfer is at... WHAT'S IN IT FOR ME???? You must give them a reason to buy, so show them your content (which looks like it's good), and then call them to do something. Force the issue. Anyway, you wanted critical advice, that's what I've got.. soft sell can work on some things, but this is also a BDSM site, and when you're being BDSM you may as well take a dominant selling standpoint for your site. Likelihood is you'll get some takers when you tell them what they need to do. Good luck.. BDSM rocks!! __________________ Long Live Legion! "Anything is Possible..."