Thread: Critics wanted
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Old 04-15-2004, 06:38 PM  
LOVE
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Quote:
Originally posted by aiken
I like the graphic design a lot, but you could use some copy editing.

"Fetish plays" -> "Hot Fetishes" (or something like that; "Fetish plays" definitely doesn't work)

"Today Story" -> "Today's Story"
...or something like that.

Cheers
-b
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