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Paul Markham · 01-27-2006, 05:27 AM

Pull it to shreds but be constructive as well please.

http://www.paulmarkhamcash.com/galle...titted-blonde/

Mr.Right - Banned For Life · 01-27-2006, 05:29 AM

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Mr.Right - Banned For Life · 01-27-2006, 05:32 AM

Working now, looks hot.

xclusive · 01-27-2006, 05:34 AM

looks very good

Paul Markham · 01-27-2006, 05:49 AM

I'm playing around with the text to give it an edge, but I hope the girl will do it. On the paysite she's getting very high marks.

sonofsam · 01-27-2006, 05:52 AM

Tempest · 01-27-2006, 06:17 AM

You need more space at the bottom of the gallery so when they scroll down, the link is easier to get access to.

You've only got 2 links to the site.. the first is hidden in some text at the top. So basically you've only got 1 and it's nothing "exciting".. nothing to really entice them into clicking thru to the site.

The text in the middle is useless since everything else over powers it.. Cut down the verbage, bump up the size, make some "bold" and put a link there with a "call to action".. i.e. "Click Here NOW To Watch Her Big Tits Bounce"

The "free tour" link at the bottom is also "boring" needs to be a call to action. Mention the free tour up top or something but tell the mindless surfers to click and join or something like that. Better yet.. Click Here To Join And Watch Her Big Tits Get Fucked. Too much verbage but you get the idea.. Or right above a link that says "Enter Here To Watch The Video", you put some text "This Sexy Blonde Gets Those Big Tits Fucked On Camera". This sort of text always seems cheesy or to "blatent".. but it works.

The guys are horny and they want more.. You need to find the right words/phrases and pictures to push them over the edge to buy. Keep it very short, to the point, keyed directly to the baser instincts.. Understand?

Overall the gallery looks nice though and the girl is great.

GFX Wiz · 01-27-2006, 06:36 AM

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Originally Posted by Batts

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What he said

2HousePlague · 01-27-2006, 06:39 AM

OMFG!

2hp

andr · 01-27-2006, 06:55 AM

looks not bad ;)

Paul Markham · 01-27-2006, 06:58 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Tempest

You need more space at the bottom of the gallery so when they scroll down, the link is easier to get access to.

You've only got 2 links to the site.. the first is hidden in some text at the top. So basically you've only got 1 and it's nothing "exciting".. nothing to really entice them into clicking thru to the site.

The text in the middle is useless since everything else over powers it.. Cut down the verbage, bump up the size, make some "bold" and put a link there with a "call to action".. i.e. "Click Here NOW To Watch Her Big Tits Bounce"

The "free tour" link at the bottom is also "boring" needs to be a call to action. Mention the free tour up top or something but tell the mindless surfers to click and join or something like that. Better yet.. Click Here To Join And Watch Her Big Tits Get Fucked. Too much verbage but you get the idea.. Or right above a link that says "Enter Here To Watch The Video", you put some text "This Sexy Blonde Gets Those Big Tits Fucked On Camera". This sort of text always seems cheesy or to "blatent".. but it works.

The guys are horny and they want more.. You need to find the right words/phrases and pictures to push them over the edge to buy. Keep it very short, to the point, keyed directly to the baser instincts.. Understand?

Overall the gallery looks nice though and the girl is great.

Thanks for this, will do something about it.

SlamDesigns · 01-27-2006, 07:08 AM

Don't like this pose http://www.paulmarkhamcash.com/galle...blonde_031.jpg but other than that, I don't see a damn thing wrong.

Paul Markham · 01-27-2006, 07:14 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by SlamDesigns

Don't like this pose http://www.paulmarkhamcash.com/galle...blonde_031.jpg but other than that, I don't see a damn thing wrong.

If you're into big tit teens that's a great shot.

ssp · 01-27-2006, 07:19 AM

The header is nice, big and graphic but it serves no real purpose.

I would suggest you make the "click here now to get instant access..." link white with a small black border and make it into a .gif so it jumps out.

Surfers are pretty ignorant they like to be instructed on where to click and what to do. The header as you have it right now does not invite people to do anything else than just to look at it.

My two cents..

sanco_panco · 01-27-2006, 07:24 AM

mm nice girl wish i had one in my bed

seeric · 01-27-2006, 07:26 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Paul Markham

Pull it to shreds but be constructive as well please.

http://www.paulmarkhamcash.com/galle...titted-blonde/

what tempest said and

the font is horrible. other than that i like it. hard to read the marketing text is about all i'd say.

mikeyddddd · 01-27-2006, 07:52 AM

NICE TITS!

Quote:

Originally Posted by SlamDesigns

Don't like this pose http://www.paulmarkhamcash.com/galle...blonde_031.jpg but other than that, I don't see a damn thing wrong.

Nothing wrong with that.

sfera · 01-27-2006, 08:27 AM

great looking gaallery, nothing seems wrong from my end here. nice job

spideriux · 01-27-2006, 08:42 AM

wow this one, looks great

OMG Jim · 01-27-2006, 08:45 AM

Hey Paul, love your work

My first looks always go to the girls photos and I have just a couple of comments. The girl's head is tilted forward in quite a few pictures not showing a good facial expression IMHO leading to I would like to see a few more facial shots that give a more inviting look.

That's my

worth!

Paul Markham · 01-28-2006, 01:24 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by AlmightyJim

Hey Paul, love your work

My first looks always go to the girls photos and I have just a couple of comments. The girl's head is tilted forward in quite a few pictures not showing a good facial expression IMHO leading to I would like to see a few more facial shots that give a more inviting look.

That's my

worth!

Interesting points and good ones.

01-27-2006, 05:27 AM	#1
Paul Markham Too old to care Industry Role: Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: On the sofa, watching TV or doing my jigsaws. Posts: 52,943	So WTF is wrong with this? Pull it to shreds but be constructive as well please. http://www.paulmarkhamcash.com/galle...titted-blonde/ __________________ Blowout deal. 880 videos, 2,400 image sets, plus many RAW videos. $500. PM me for a deal. Skype Paulmarkham70

01-27-2006, 05:34 AM	#4
xclusive Too lazy to set a custom title Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Buffalo, NY Posts: 35,218	looks very good __________________ I support MediumPimpin.com / Shemp's Outlawtgp.com /

01-27-2006, 05:49 AM	#5
Paul Markham Too old to care Industry Role: Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: On the sofa, watching TV or doing my jigsaws. Posts: 52,943	I'm playing around with the text to give it an edge, but I hope the girl will do it. On the paysite she's getting very high marks. __________________ Blowout deal. 880 videos, 2,400 image sets, plus many RAW videos. $500. PM me for a deal. Skype Paulmarkham70

01-27-2006, 05:52 AM	#6
sonofsam Too lazy to set a custom title Join Date: Dec 2004 Location: Vancouver Posts: 18,638	__________________ I like turtles.

01-27-2006, 06:39 AM	#9
2HousePlague CURATOR Join Date: Jul 2004 Location: the attic Posts: 14,572	OMFG! 2hp __________________ tada!

01-27-2006, 05:29 AM	#2
Mr.Right - Banned For Life I guarantee it Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 18,314	Server not found.

01-27-2006, 05:32 AM	#3
Mr.Right - Banned For Life I guarantee it Join Date: May 2005 Posts: 18,314	Working now, looks hot.

01-27-2006, 06:17 AM	#7
Tempest Too lazy to set a custom title Industry Role: Join Date: May 2004 Location: West Coast, Canada. Posts: 10,217	You need more space at the bottom of the gallery so when they scroll down, the link is easier to get access to. You've only got 2 links to the site.. the first is hidden in some text at the top. So basically you've only got 1 and it's nothing "exciting".. nothing to really entice them into clicking thru to the site. The text in the middle is useless since everything else over powers it.. Cut down the verbage, bump up the size, make some "bold" and put a link there with a "call to action".. i.e. "Click Here NOW To Watch Her Big Tits Bounce" The "free tour" link at the bottom is also "boring" needs to be a call to action. Mention the free tour up top or something but tell the mindless surfers to click and join or something like that. Better yet.. Click Here To Join And Watch Her Big Tits Get Fucked. Too much verbage but you get the idea.. Or right above a link that says "Enter Here To Watch The Video", you put some text "This Sexy Blonde Gets Those Big Tits Fucked On Camera". This sort of text always seems cheesy or to "blatent".. but it works. The guys are horny and they want more.. You need to find the right words/phrases and pictures to push them over the edge to buy. Keep it very short, to the point, keyed directly to the baser instincts.. Understand? Overall the gallery looks nice though and the girl is great.

01-27-2006, 06:55 AM	#10
andr So Fucking Banned Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: COCK smoker Posts: 175	looks not bad ;)

01-27-2006, 07:08 AM	#12
SlamDesigns Confirmed User Join Date: Jul 2005 Posts: 2,339	Don't like this pose http://www.paulmarkhamcash.com/galle...blonde_031.jpg but other than that, I don't see a damn thing wrong.

01-27-2006, 07:19 AM	#14
ssp Confirmed User Join Date: Jan 2005 Location: United Kingdom Posts: 7,990	The header is nice, big and graphic but it serves no real purpose. I would suggest you make the "click here now to get instant access..." link white with a small black border and make it into a .gif so it jumps out. Surfers are pretty ignorant they like to be instructed on where to click and what to do. The header as you have it right now does not invite people to do anything else than just to look at it. My two cents..

01-27-2006, 07:24 AM	#15
sanco_panco I just wandered in here Join Date: Jan 2006 Posts: 13	mm nice girl wish i had one in my bed

01-27-2006, 08:27 AM	#18
sfera Confirmed User Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: ICQ: 248877409 Posts: 8,597	great looking gaallery, nothing seems wrong from my end here. nice job

01-27-2006, 08:42 AM	#19
spideriux Registered User Industry Role: Join Date: Feb 2005 Posts: 17,227	wow this one, looks great __________________ FreeOnes

01-27-2006, 08:45 AM	#20
OMG Jim Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Atlanta Posts: 3,153	Hey Paul, love your work My first looks always go to the girls photos and I have just a couple of comments. The girl's head is tilted forward in quite a few pictures not showing a good facial expression IMHO leading to I would like to see a few more facial shots that give a more inviting look. That's my worth! __________________ ICQ: 254 914 537 - Skype: AlmightyJim