So WTF is wrong with this?
 

Pull it to shreds but be constructive as well please.

http://www.paulmarkhamcash.com/galle...titted-blonde/

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Working now, looks hot.

looks very good

I'm playing around with the text to give it an edge, but I hope the girl will do it. On the paysite she's getting very high marks.

http://www.paulmarkhamcash.com/galle...blonde_031.jpg

http://www-analytik.chemie.uni-regen...beis/tw/et.jpg

You need more space at the bottom of the gallery so when they scroll down, the link is easier to get access to.

You've only got 2 links to the site.. the first is hidden in some text at the top. So basically you've only got 1 and it's nothing "exciting".. nothing to really entice them into clicking thru to the site.

The text in the middle is useless since everything else over powers it.. Cut down the verbage, bump up the size, make some "bold" and put a link there with a "call to action".. i.e. "Click Here NOW To Watch Her Big Tits Bounce"

The "free tour" link at the bottom is also "boring" needs to be a call to action. Mention the free tour up top or something but tell the mindless surfers to click and join or something like that. Better yet.. Click Here To Join And Watch Her Big Tits Get Fucked. Too much verbage but you get the idea.. Or right above a link that says "Enter Here To Watch The Video", you put some text "This Sexy Blonde Gets Those Big Tits Fucked On Camera". This sort of text always seems cheesy or to "blatent".. but it works.

The guys are horny and they want more.. You need to find the right words/phrases and pictures to push them over the edge to buy. Keep it very short, to the point, keyed directly to the baser instincts.. Understand?

Overall the gallery looks nice though and the girl is great.

What he said

OMFG!

http://www.paulmarkhamcash.com/galle...blonde_031.jpg






2hp

looks not bad ;)

Thanks for this, will do something about it.

Don't like this pose http://www.paulmarkhamcash.com/galle...blonde_031.jpg but other than that, I don't see a damn thing wrong.

If you're into big tit teens that's a great shot. :winkwink:

The header is nice, big and graphic but it serves no real purpose.

I would suggest you make the "click here now to get instant access..." link white with a small black border and make it into a .gif so it jumps out.

Surfers are pretty ignorant they like to be instructed on where to click and what to do. The header as you have it right now does not invite people to do anything else than just to look at it.

My two cents..

mm nice girl wish i had one in my bed :)

what tempest said and

the font is horrible. other than that i like it. hard to read the marketing text is about all i'd say.

NICE TITS!

Nothing wrong with that.

great looking gaallery, nothing seems wrong from my end here. nice job

wow this one, looks great

Hey Paul, love your work :thumbsup

My first looks always go to the girls photos and I have just a couple of comments. The girl's head is tilted forward in quite a few pictures not showing a good facial expression IMHO leading to I would like to see a few more facial shots that give a more inviting look.

That's my :2 cents: worth!

Interesting points and good ones.