What do you think of this AD? - GoFuckYourself.com

Neriah Davis · 01-14-2004, 01:50 PM

Getting ready to launch my 4 tours...finally!
In the meantime, what do you think of my newest FPA ?

Any suggestions?

Gheenz · 01-14-2004, 01:53 PM

its hot!

gregtx · 01-14-2004, 01:55 PM

too big.. too much text IMHO

RATBOY · 01-14-2004, 01:56 PM

Skin tones are a little yello IMHO.

Weppel · 01-14-2004, 01:56 PM

Will you marry me

Shok · 01-14-2004, 01:57 PM

too busy looking

kmanrox · 01-14-2004, 02:00 PM

looks good... i'd choose another main pic though, that's not a very flattering head-on face shot... makes your face look fat...

will you marry me?

Trent Edison · 01-14-2004, 02:00 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by RATBOY
Skin tones are a little yello IMHO.

Yes, and also I'd say not enough body around...

WiredGuy · 01-14-2004, 02:15 PM

I agree with Greg, too much text on the right side. Perhaps you could spread the text of MeetNeriah over the entire right column and get rid of the features and friends section? I like the video content right into the FPA like this though, and the rest looks great.

WG

Neriah Davis · 01-14-2004, 02:22 PM

Thanks you guys...as far as my face looking fat...well maybe it is!
I will bring the gold tones down just a bit and try to minimize the text...thanks for all the advice

RRRED · 01-14-2004, 02:30 PM

1. There's too much of the same font. Two different fonts and two colors. Nothing stands out.

2. Everything is too square and rectangular. You should pick one flattering photo such as the large one to the left or even the one of you on your back and make it 3 diminsional.

3. Make pussycat lounge stand out more as this might be your main selling point when you try to get across how many other girls you feature on your site. If these chicks are on cams all the time, stress how much interaction they will get with you and your friends.

4. "Be a part of my sexy monthly newsletter" There's nothing sexy about a newsletter. Maybe let them know that you will send them previews of exclusive new content and maybe some reader emails replied to by you.

5. Skins too yellow. Looks like we might need to get our liver checked hehe...

6. The fact that you're a Playboy playmate AND a fredricks of hollywood model is huge. That's maybe where you should do some fancy text layering here and there with these brand names. The "Hi I'm Neriah... blah blah" isn't a powerful enough way to present it.

C-Bass · 01-14-2004, 02:32 PM

Looks nice

Shok · 01-14-2004, 02:52 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by RRRED
1. There's too much of the same font. Two different fonts and two colors. Nothing stands out.

2. Everything is too square and rectangular. You should pick one flattering photo such as the large one to the left or even the one of you on your back and make it 3 diminsional.

3. Make pussycat lounge stand out more as this might be your main selling point when you try to get across how many other girls you feature on your site. If these chicks are on cams all the time, stress how much interaction they will get with you and your friends.

4. "Be a part of my sexy monthly newsletter" There's nothing sexy about a newsletter. Maybe let them know that you will send them previews of exclusive new content and maybe some reader emails replied to by you.

5. Skins too yellow. Looks like we might need to get our liver checked hehe...

6. The fact that you're a Playboy playmate AND a fredricks of hollywood model is huge. That's maybe where you should do some fancy text layering here and there with these brand names. The "Hi I'm Neriah... blah blah" isn't a powerful enough way to present it.

this is why all our designers kill themselves

Rorschach · 01-14-2004, 02:56 PM

I don't have anything to add that hasn't already been said, but damn you've got a great rack!

yeviking · 01-14-2004, 03:03 PM

loading slow..

C_U_Next_Tuesday · 01-14-2004, 03:03 PM

I'm not much of a designer so I cant critque work that is better than mine..lol.

I have been trying to remember what issue I seen you in in Playboy and It finally dawned on me..You did a 50's type waitress set that I really loved .

Neriah Davis · 01-14-2004, 03:16 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by C_U_Next_Tuesday
I'm not much of a designer so I cant critque work that is better than mine..lol.

I have been trying to remember what issue I seen you in in Playboy and It finally dawned on me..You did a 50's type waitress set that I really loved .

No, that was Barbara Moore....my set was hippie style and my centerfold was in front of a scooter:

webair · 01-14-2004, 03:24 PM

slow loading

tones are too bright

you have better pics than the ones your using as the main pic

Bulldog-Johnnie · 01-14-2004, 03:30 PM

I'm still liking your second tour that I told you about yesterday.

Neriah Davis · 01-14-2004, 03:33 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Bulldog-Johnnie
I'm still liking your second tour that I told you about yesterday.

Which one Bulldog? The tour or the ad?

Bulldog-Johnnie · 01-14-2004, 03:38 PM

Sorry I meant the ad-
Simple, Elegant, Hot

Basher · 01-14-2004, 03:39 PM

i LOVE YOU

Neriah Davis · 01-14-2004, 03:40 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Bulldog-Johnnie
Sorry I meant the ad-
Simple, Elegant, Hot

Well link it up baby! Whatcha waiting for?

RAM · 01-14-2004, 03:44 PM

Looks great keep up the good work.

C_U_Next_Tuesday · 01-14-2004, 03:48 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Neriah Davis

No, that was Barbara Moore....my set was hippie style and my centerfold was in front of a scooter:

oops , my bad. you too look very similar. I don't have my old playboys to reference from..dammit, I should have never gave those back to the EX..

Do I get a spanking

TaylorM · 01-14-2004, 03:52 PM

You are so beautiful!!!

Neriah Davis · 01-14-2004, 04:04 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by TaylorM
You are so beautiful!!!

No YOU are!
I have never seen such gorgeous eyes in my lifetime

just a punk · 01-14-2004, 04:46 PM

Raf1 · 01-14-2004, 04:56 PM

I like it. You look very hot

Neriah Davis · 01-14-2004, 09:38 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by webair
slow loading

tones are too bright

you have better pics than the ones your using as the main pic

Refresh it...I toned down the gold and added sample pics

01-14-2004, 09:40 PM

you look great babes, I hope your site is rocking for you

schiz · 01-14-2004, 09:43 PM

Looks nice, but its really slow loading. Probably take a minute and a half on a 56k modem

Kimmykim · 01-14-2004, 09:47 PM

The marketing text is boring, you have to make the surfer want to click before you get him to buy.

You're a really pretty girl and surfers should adore you, give them a little impetus to adore you with their credit cards.

On another note, where'd you get those zip up panties you're wearing on the scooter? I think those ROCK!

crockett · 01-14-2004, 09:51 PM

first I think your Hot

and second I kinda like the FPA it's not the same ole simple FPA kinda looks like a tour page of some sort

- Jesus Christ - · 01-14-2004, 10:45 PM

Too many images; slow loading.
Ignore the suck ups.

have it fixed.

maybe combin some of those small images in the row into sets of 2 or 3. Possibly use a higher compression level on all the images.

MadCap · 01-14-2004, 10:47 PM

I think it has a good npsi ratio so it should do well

loaded ok for me

valley hina · 01-14-2004, 10:50 PM

the site looks good

Roger · 01-14-2004, 10:51 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Neriah Davis
Getting ready to launch my 4 tours...finally!
In the meantime, what do you think of my newest FPA ?

Any suggestions?

Is it possible to replace that big pic in your FPA? Your hair looks a little funny in that one. Beautiful pic but not sexy.

Ic3m4nZ · 01-14-2004, 10:56 PM

Good design

Vitasoy · 01-14-2004, 11:05 PM

Very slick and sexy

gideongallery · 01-14-2004, 11:16 PM

you might want to create a no nudity one for teaser sites (non nude)
i find you sell more if you tease and upsell the nudity on your site.

Abyss_Vee · 01-14-2004, 11:22 PM

kinda blury and busy

Mutt · 01-14-2004, 11:32 PM

it looks like a throwback to your old design - would work best if the FPA had the look and feel of your paysite tour.

bhutocracy · 01-14-2004, 11:58 PM

the main pic makes you look older than you are. Fairly big and heavy for an FPA too depends what you want out of it i guess. it's basically a tour page. you could almost just pop the site itself and be one click closer to the money. just an untested initial thought.. it's a still a good looking fpa.

Neriah Davis · 01-15-2004, 09:09 PM

Is this one better for the main pic? I am not sure if maybe it should be more of a body shot? And this one's almost non-nude...I could just clone some hair over the nip...

Neriah Davis · 01-15-2004, 09:18 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Kimmykim
The marketing text is boring, you have to make the surfer want to click before you get him to buy. You're a really pretty girl and surfers should adore you, give them a little impetus to adore you with their credit cards.

On another note, where'd you get those zip up panties you're wearing on the scooter? I think those ROCK!

Thanks KimmyKim, I will work on the text...as far as the panties...those were from Trashy Lingerie baby! Awesome quality lingerie.
Did you get my ICQ?

NedFLanders · 01-15-2004, 09:29 PM

Well I kinda like it. Good luck

01-14-2004, 01:50 PM	#1
Neriah Davis Confirmed User Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Westsiiiiiiiide! Posts: 578	What do you think of this AD? Getting ready to launch my 4 tours...finally! In the meantime, what do you think of my newest FPA ? Any suggestions? __________________ First Class Playmate Content! Watch my Video!

01-14-2004, 01:55 PM	#3
gregtx Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Dallas, TX Posts: 1,929	too big.. too much text IMHO __________________ Processing Partners http://www.processingpartners.com

01-14-2004, 02:00 PM	#7
kmanrox aka K-Man Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: The Gutter Posts: 29,292	looks good... i'd choose another main pic though, that's not a very flattering head-on face shot... makes your face look fat... will you marry me? __________________ Crypto HODLr Crypto mining Angel investor

01-14-2004, 02:15 PM	#9
WiredGuy Pounding Googlebot Industry Role: Join Date: Aug 2002 Location: Canada Posts: 34,482	I agree with Greg, too much text on the right side. Perhaps you could spread the text of MeetNeriah over the entire right column and get rid of the features and friends section? I like the video content right into the FPA like this though, and the rest looks great. WG __________________ I play with Google.

01-14-2004, 02:22 PM	#10
Neriah Davis Confirmed User Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Westsiiiiiiiide! Posts: 578	Thanks you guys...as far as my face looking fat...well maybe it is! I will bring the gold tones down just a bit and try to minimize the text...thanks for all the advice __________________ First Class Playmate Content! Watch my Video!

01-14-2004, 01:53 PM	#2
Gheenz Here's Your Sign Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: MT, USA Posts: 2,410	its hot!

01-14-2004, 01:56 PM	#4
RATBOY Confirmed User Join Date: May 2002 Location: Seattle, WA Posts: 1,592	Skin tones are a little yello IMHO.

01-14-2004, 01:56 PM	#5
Weppel Confirmed User Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Netherlands Posts: 2,190	Will you marry me

01-14-2004, 01:57 PM	#6
Shok Confirmed User Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: LIVE EVIL Posts: 5,611	too busy looking

01-14-2004, 02:30 PM	#11
RRRED Confirmed User Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: WA Posts: 6,754	1. There's too much of the same font. Two different fonts and two colors. Nothing stands out. 2. Everything is too square and rectangular. You should pick one flattering photo such as the large one to the left or even the one of you on your back and make it 3 diminsional. 3. Make pussycat lounge stand out more as this might be your main selling point when you try to get across how many other girls you feature on your site. If these chicks are on cams all the time, stress how much interaction they will get with you and your friends. 4. "Be a part of my sexy monthly newsletter" There's nothing sexy about a newsletter. Maybe let them know that you will send them previews of exclusive new content and maybe some reader emails replied to by you. 5. Skins too yellow. Looks like we might need to get our liver checked hehe... 6. The fact that you're a Playboy playmate AND a fredricks of hollywood model is huge. That's maybe where you should do some fancy text layering here and there with these brand names. The "Hi I'm Neriah... blah blah" isn't a powerful enough way to present it.

01-14-2004, 02:32 PM	#12
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01-14-2004, 02:56 PM	#14
Rorschach So Fucking Banned Join Date: Aug 2002 Posts: 5,579	I don't have anything to add that hasn't already been said, but damn you've got a great rack!

01-14-2004, 03:03 PM	#15
yeviking Confirmed User Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Usa Posts: 589	loading slow..

01-14-2004, 03:03 PM	#16
C_U_Next_Tuesday WW4L Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: over the river and through the woods Posts: 10,581	I'm not much of a designer so I cant critque work that is better than mine..lol. I have been trying to remember what issue I seen you in in Playboy and It finally dawned on me..You did a 50's type waitress set that I really loved .

01-14-2004, 03:24 PM	#18
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01-14-2004, 03:30 PM	#19
Bulldog-Johnnie Confirmed User Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: Tampa, FL Posts: 662	I'm still liking your second tour that I told you about yesterday. __________________ [email protected] ICQ-76720120

01-14-2004, 03:38 PM	#21
Bulldog-Johnnie Confirmed User Join Date: Jan 2003 Location: Tampa, FL Posts: 662	Sorry I meant the ad- Simple, Elegant, Hot __________________ [email protected] ICQ-76720120

01-14-2004, 03:39 PM	#22
Basher Confirmed User Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: Uk_dude Posts: 1,168	i LOVE YOU __________________ my bum itches

01-14-2004, 03:44 PM	#24
RAM They're all hookers, but mom! Industry Role: Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: Right now Shelby Twp MI Posts: 7,047	Looks great keep up the good work. __________________ RAM Fucking Machines are like CASH MACHINES See RAM on these quality sites!! Rightofftheboat.com EuroBrideTryouts.com

01-14-2004, 03:52 PM	#26
TaylorM Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: NorCal Posts: 947	You are so beautiful!!! __________________ Taylor - One of Your TopBabes TopBucks * TopCash ICQ 204139253 / [email protected]

01-14-2004, 04:46 PM	#28
just a punk So fuckin' bored Industry Role: Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 32,386	nice __________________ Obey the Cowgod

01-14-2004, 04:56 PM	#29
Raf1 Too lazy to set a custom title Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Writer for hire :) Gallery descriptions, articles, blog posts etc. ICQ: 209 356 106 Posts: 12,117	I like it. You look very hot

01-14-2004, 09:40 PM	#31
buddyjuf Guest Posts: n/a	you look great babes, I hope your site is rocking for you

01-14-2004, 09:43 PM	#32
schiz Confirmed User Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: Middle of a cornfield Posts: 1,103	Looks nice, but its really slow loading. Probably take a minute and a half on a 56k modem

01-14-2004, 09:47 PM	#33
Kimmykim bitchslapping zebras!!!!! Industry Role: Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: In a shack by the beach Posts: 16,015	The marketing text is boring, you have to make the surfer want to click before you get him to buy. You're a really pretty girl and surfers should adore you, give them a little impetus to adore you with their credit cards. On another note, where'd you get those zip up panties you're wearing on the scooter? I think those ROCK!

01-14-2004, 09:51 PM	#34
crockett in a van by the river Industry Role: Join Date: May 2003 Posts: 76,806	first I think your Hot and second I kinda like the FPA it's not the same ole simple FPA kinda looks like a tour page of some sort __________________ In November, you can vote for America's next president or its first dictator.

01-14-2004, 10:45 PM	#35
- Jesus Christ - Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: ::::::::::::: :::::::::::\|\|::::::::::: :::::::::::\|\|::::::::::: :::::::::::\|\|::::::::::: :::::::::::\|\|::::::::::: :::::::::::\|\|::::::::::: ::::::\|\|\|\|\|\|\|\|\|\|\|\|:::::: :::::::::::\|\|::::::::::: :::::::::::\|\|::::::::::: :::::::::::::::::::::::: Posts: 7,197	Too many images; slow loading. Ignore the suck ups. have it fixed. maybe combin some of those small images in the row into sets of 2 or 3. Possibly use a higher compression level on all the images. __________________ Amen

01-14-2004, 10:47 PM	#36
MadCap Confirmed User Join Date: Aug 2002 Location: 137771650 Minneapolis MN Posts: 2,357	I think it has a good npsi ratio so it should do well loaded ok for me

01-14-2004, 10:50 PM	#37
valley hina Confirmed User Join Date: May 2003 Posts: 1,170	the site looks good

01-14-2004, 10:56 PM	#39
Ic3m4nZ Confirmed User Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: Montreal! Posts: 6,285	Good design

01-14-2004, 11:05 PM	#40
Vitasoy GFY HALL OF FAME DAMMIT!!! Join Date: Oct 2003 Posts: 58,202	Very slick and sexy __________________ [email protected]

01-14-2004, 11:16 PM	#41
gideongallery Confirmed User Join Date: Aug 2003 Posts: 7,082	you might want to create a no nudity one for teaser sites (non nude) i find you sell more if you tease and upsell the nudity on your site.

01-14-2004, 11:22 PM	#42
Abyss_Vee Confirmed User Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Los Angeles Posts: 5,208	kinda blury and busy

01-14-2004, 11:32 PM	#43
Mutt Too lazy to set a custom title Industry Role: Join Date: Sep 2002 Posts: 34,431	it looks like a throwback to your old design - would work best if the FPA had the look and feel of your paysite tour. __________________ I moved my sites to Vacares Hosting. I've saved money, my hair is thicker, lost some weight too! Thanks Sly!

01-14-2004, 11:58 PM	#44
bhutocracy Not making A Comeback Industry Role: Join Date: Dec 2001 Posts: 10,218	the main pic makes you look older than you are. Fairly big and heavy for an FPA too depends what you want out of it i guess. it's basically a tour page. you could almost just pop the site itself and be one click closer to the money. just an untested initial thought.. it's a still a good looking fpa.