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1. There's too much of the same font. Two different fonts and two colors. Nothing stands out.
2. Everything is too square and rectangular. You should pick one flattering photo such as the large one to the left or even the one of you on your back and make it 3 diminsional.
3. Make pussycat lounge stand out more as this might be your main selling point when you try to get across how many other girls you feature on your site. If these chicks are on cams all the time, stress how much interaction they will get with you and your friends.
4. "Be a part of my sexy monthly newsletter" There's nothing sexy about a newsletter. Maybe let them know that you will send them previews of exclusive new content and maybe some reader emails replied to by you.
5. Skins too yellow. Looks like we might need to get our liver checked hehe...
6. The fact that you're a Playboy playmate AND a fredricks of hollywood model is huge. That's maybe where you should do some fancy text layering here and there with these brand names. The "Hi I'm Neriah... blah blah" isn't a powerful enough way to present it.
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