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The image of neriah you've used isn't that great compared to the others.
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And your reason is?
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the position of the bently is frustrating, the visual weight of the page is lopsided and it's showing enough to distract from the rest of the design, but not enough of itself to be of gratification.
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Frustrated how? So this provokes you? If you are frustrated, that might be a good thing to make sales.
Maybe you don't like my design because it's just that good -- you feel inferior to all my bling bling abilities. :pimp
How is the weight lopsided? Because the sky is empty? You're not taking into consideration the surrounding HTML/text either... if you took the horizon lines into the HTML all the way to the edge and did the whole background of the screen the same colors the balance would be pretty badass I think...
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Given the \/\ line used to balance and direct the eye goes as much to the bentley as it does to the start button this is innapropriate.
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I think most people read from left to right... Why is that inappropriate to see the "ENTER" link as the last thing in the visual flow?
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And is shown by the size, contrast and bolding that the "start" area has had to endure to help compensate it. Although the effort to do so is well noted.
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Yeah the black/white pulls you along there, among other things...
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The bentley bleeds to the bottom of the page without as much care as it needed - just truncated in the middle of a black front bumper - though effort has been made to line the highlights from the top of the bumper up with the bottom of the screen it's out of proportion with the black space left by the same element on the left and doesn't give the proper form of the car.
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I admit the car there is pretty distracting, but I was very careful how I put it there -- I even distorted the car a little so that I could hit the horizon the way I wanted to and still hit the bottom edge without showing the messy details like the license plate, etc... In reality, I think we are talking about some pretty edgy stuff... and I don't take this design THAT seriously to be honest -- although this is all very fun -- BUT that said, since this is a collage -- the car really makes you aware that it is a collage, and even the perspective of the laptop of off and the slight wierdness of scale and position I was hoping would throw off the viewer... I think it is a good idea to take a person's notion of reality -- and fuck with it A LITTLE BIT -- but not too much -- so they wonder why I fucked with them just THIS MUCH and not a WHOLE BUNCH... Cezanne does this with his lines -- if you notice he will have an object in front of a straight line but the line is not really straight -- but it's just OFF a little bit, and the intent is clear -- it's just enough to fuck with your head... and that's what I think intelligent design does -- it throws you off balance a little bit so you have to scratch your chin a little bit and say, "Hmmm..." Hence my "mental institution" style of GFY posting...
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The playboy logo SHOULD have been used. Never overestimate the surfer. Without it she could just be eyecandy for a rich boy's toy's expo.
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Maybe, but I'm pretty sure I heard Lensman say in a D-Money interview about Playboy was real picky about this... I could be wrong though... Anyway, I suppose I'm learning that the designer in many cases in this biz is also responsible for the wording of marketing text -- which is pretty sad I think... but that's always good to know -- I'm learning... The whole Playboy thing -- that's for Neriah to figure out with Playboy... and I'm sure she is thinking about her strategy with Playboy as the marketplace changes... if she really wants to be a Playmate, why not just put some ears on her damn head... Hehe... anyway you could look at it from different angles -- maybe guys will think -- "Why join this site when I could join Playboy.com and get the same pics + all the other Playmates?" If I was her I think I would present the Playboy issue as receiving an award -- show the date -- and show is more as an accolade and less as being under somebody's umbrella of power... because I'm sure there is that stigma to some extent... clinging on too hard to the Playboy logo could be seen as weakness, especially considering that Playboy is nothing without these models and the fact that she is a name to remember gives her some well-deserved superiority... and no I'm not kissing ass -- because I rarely have nice things to say about models... all you have to do is look at her pics...
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I am in two minds of the "bling" aspect. It's not contemporary and fairly muted which can either be good or bad depending on the tastes of the surfers.
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Me too... I suppose it comes down to trying it to see if it will convert...
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Many problems with this design could be resolved by increasing the canvas area to that of the other designs and focussing a lot more on imagery of neriah, so that the playboy toys are still integrated, but the surfer doesn't feel like he's busting a nut over a yacht instead of a girl implied on a yacht.
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I designed it at a much higher resolution so I could render it at any size... Generally for the first page of a tour I don't think you need a HUGE image -- and like I said I would incorporate the design into the HTML layout... I can seriously see your point, and I suggested that to Neriah when I first started talking to her about this before the design contest -- but I got carried away with the horizontal theme since that's how I do many of my drawings and paintings -- so that's sortof my trademark style... so yeah I'm guilty of the emphasis on the horizon and the long format with the wierd left-to-right composition... It's unique to me and interesting and that's why I like it.
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The design isn't technically bad at all, but it also lacks the finishing and refinement that could have been used instead of just relying on the imagery of rich things to convey it. [/B]
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I agree to some extent. I'm not really taking advantage of the "digital" aspect of the image -- I'm not using filters or fancy fonts... because at least in my circle -- those things are seen as tacky and unoriginal... but looking at the reaction that Hamlet got with with his shiny blue emboss-like effect -- people go for shit that shines -- and that's exactly why comic books and cartoons go WAY overboard on shiny swords and chrome robots... I suppose that's just part of popular culture now and I need to get with the times -- just go with it instead of trying to fight it...
Anyway, I've been acting like an ass in this thread but it's all in good fun -- and I'm glad this thread has been so popular and I'm sure Neriah will get lots of webmasters interested in her product because of this thread... My tactics are very controversial but you can all go fuck yourselfs...
I appreciate these comments -- especially from very talented graphic designers... I really don't take this contest that seriously -- and I think anyone with a little wit can see that just be reading my posts with a grain of salt...
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