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gypsi · 10-23-2002, 05:59 PM

can anyone shoot me some feed back on my site..

http://www.webcam-pleasures.com/

thanks

jscott · 10-23-2002, 06:10 PM

nice & simple

Pornkings · 10-23-2002, 06:15 PM

Looks good but I think your first page should be more clear and have more photos that get you hard if you know what I mean. Its a little to soft.
you don't want to loose them on the first page

gypsi · 10-23-2002, 06:22 PM

photos yep agree 100% more clear? not sure what you mean

KingK7 · 10-23-2002, 06:43 PM

Looks good, but u might want to make the text on
http://www.webcam-pleasures.com/hot3/
a bit easier to read. Not Like This, It Makes it very Hard To read.

Vary the text sizes a bit, try colors on some words you want to emphasize etc, it might sell better.

gypsi · 10-23-2002, 08:11 PM

thanks made some changes

gypsi · 10-25-2002, 07:41 PM

ok over 100 people read this but very few feedbacks
i need your input here people
thanks
http://www.webcam-pleasures.com

neewwman · 10-25-2002, 08:53 PM

Your text is full of misspellings, ungrammatical English, sentence fragments, run-on sentences and improper capitalization. The sentences should have two spaces after them, not one. All of this is distracting and some of it is not even comprehensible. For example, the sentence that says "Well Hun!" At first I thought it was a misspelling of "Well Hung." Then I realized you probably meant "Well, Hon!" Here's a rewrite of your main selling text:

"Tired of looking for a true 100% amateur site? Disappointed after clicking banner after banner? Are you ready for something new? Something different? Well then, you're in the right place! My website and cam are definitely different and exciting. I feature all my own content. You won't see these pictures or videos anywhere else but right here! I'm a true slutty amateur housewife! This site gives you the woman next door you wish you could fuck until her husband comes home. This is not one of those so-called amateur sites that's run by some Big Cyber Sex Company and features a model who has absolutely no involvement with the site. This is a totally interactive amateur site which I run myself. So sit and take a look around. I'm sure you'll love what I have to offer."

Hope that's helpful. The rest of the site needs a thorough proofreading by a native speaker of English. There are many, many other mistakes and hard-to-understand passages.

gypsi · 10-25-2002, 09:08 PM

thanks i see what you mean..
LOL if you have any time on your hands mind doing any other pages

neewwman · 10-25-2002, 09:36 PM

Sorry, I'd need some money. Reading through the whole site would make my eyes bug out.

Va2k · 10-25-2002, 09:41 PM

Where you from? Oh your site looks nice.. Do you have an webmasters program? also are you paying the Fee's and if so great hook up a webmaster program and I will throw you some exit traffic

TOM

gypsi · 10-26-2002, 06:46 PM

nope sorry never tried a webmaster program
is it worth looking into?

foe · 10-26-2002, 06:50 PM

Deb · 10-27-2002, 02:50 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by neewwman
Your text is full of misspellings, ungrammatical English, sentence fragments, run-on sentences and improper capitalization. The sentences should have two spaces after them, not one. All of this is distracting and some of it is not even comprehensible.
Hope that's helpful. The rest of the site needs a thorough proofreading by a native speaker of English. There are many, many other mistakes and hard-to-understand passages.

I'd have to agree with this comment. It was so hard to read through it all that I wound up closing it out before I even finished your tour. That's not good. You definately don't want your surfers to react that way. Getting this corrected should be your FIRST PRIORITY. The rest of the site isn't bad at all, but this is a real bite in the ass.

gypsi · 10-27-2002, 11:26 AM

thanks made some changes and cut the wording down a lot.
did anyone look at my join page to see what you think of that
thanks again for the input
http://www.webcam-pleasures.com/hot3/

http://www.webcam-pleasures.com/hot3/get.html

fear · 10-27-2002, 11:33 AM

I didn`t like it.... sorry

Funkito · 10-27-2002, 11:41 AM

I closed it pretty quick. Didn't stand out. Too much going on. Simplify.

Deb · 10-28-2002, 03:09 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by gypsi
thanks made some changes and cut the wording down a lot.

You've still got the same misspellings, ungrammatical English, sentence fragments, run-on sentences and improper capitalization going on. Since you're obviously not capable of handling this yourself, spend the money and hire someone to take care of that for you. It will be money well spent.

gypsi · 10-28-2002, 06:12 AM

ok so what i got is layout is ok but the spelling sucks
is this correct.
thanks

Deb · 10-28-2002, 09:58 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by gypsi
ok so what i got is layout is ok but the spelling sucks
is this correct.
thanks

I take it that you didn't actually READ my last post, as it mentions MORE THAN SPELLING ERRORS. Perhaps you should re-read it.

10-23-2002, 05:59 PM	#1
gypsi Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 234	can i have feedback on my site can anyone shoot me some feed back on my site.. http://www.webcam-pleasures.com/ thanks

10-23-2002, 06:15 PM	#3
Pornkings Confirmed User Join Date: Oct 2002 Location: Roger V Posts: 5,334	Looks good but I think your first page should be more clear and have more photos that get you hard if you know what I mean. Its a little to soft. you don't want to loose them on the first page __________________ Pornkings.com

10-25-2002, 08:53 PM	#8
neewwman Confirmed User Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Los Angeles, CA, USA Posts: 1,737	Your text is full of misspellings, ungrammatical English, sentence fragments, run-on sentences and improper capitalization. The sentences should have two spaces after them, not one. All of this is distracting and some of it is not even comprehensible. For example, the sentence that says "Well Hun!" At first I thought it was a misspelling of "Well Hung." Then I realized you probably meant "Well, Hon!" Here's a rewrite of your main selling text: "Tired of looking for a true 100% amateur site? Disappointed after clicking banner after banner? Are you ready for something new? Something different? Well then, you're in the right place! My website and cam are definitely different and exciting. I feature all my own content. You won't see these pictures or videos anywhere else but right here! I'm a true slutty amateur housewife! This site gives you the woman next door you wish you could fuck until her husband comes home. This is not one of those so-called amateur sites that's run by some Big Cyber Sex Company and features a model who has absolutely no involvement with the site. This is a totally interactive amateur site which I run myself. So sit and take a look around. I'm sure you'll love what I have to offer." Hope that's helpful. The rest of the site needs a thorough proofreading by a native speaker of English. There are many, many other mistakes and hard-to-understand passages. __________________ Porn Wealth Everything the newbie adult webmaster needs to know. Buy it, or sell it through our 50% affiliate program! Last edited by neewwman; 10-25-2002 at 08:56 PM..

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10-25-2002, 09:41 PM	#11
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10-23-2002, 06:10 PM	#2
jscott So Fucking Banned Industry Role: Join Date: Feb 2001 Location: Taipei Posts: 25,198	nice & simple

10-23-2002, 06:22 PM	#4
gypsi Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 234	photos yep agree 100% more clear? not sure what you mean

10-23-2002, 06:43 PM	#5
KingK7 Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2002 Posts: 6,372	Looks good, but u might want to make the text on http://www.webcam-pleasures.com/hot3/ a bit easier to read. Not Like This, It Makes it very Hard To read. Vary the text sizes a bit, try colors on some words you want to emphasize etc, it might sell better.

10-23-2002, 08:11 PM	#6
gypsi Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 234	thanks made some changes

10-25-2002, 07:41 PM	#7
gypsi Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 234	ok over 100 people read this but very few feedbacks i need your input here people thanks http://www.webcam-pleasures.com

10-25-2002, 09:08 PM	#9
gypsi Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 234	thanks i see what you mean.. LOL if you have any time on your hands mind doing any other pages

10-26-2002, 06:46 PM	#12
gypsi Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 234	nope sorry never tried a webmaster program is it worth looking into?

10-26-2002, 06:50 PM	#13
foe Confirmed User Join Date: May 2002 Location: CT Posts: 5,246	no

10-27-2002, 11:26 AM	#15
gypsi Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 234	thanks made some changes and cut the wording down a lot. did anyone look at my join page to see what you think of that thanks again for the input http://www.webcam-pleasures.com/hot3/ http://www.webcam-pleasures.com/hot3/get.html

10-27-2002, 11:33 AM	#16
fear Confirmed User Join Date: May 2002 Location: Scandinavia Posts: 379	I didn`t like it.... sorry

10-27-2002, 11:41 AM	#17
Funkito Registered User Join Date: Oct 2002 Posts: 92	I closed it pretty quick. Didn't stand out. Too much going on. Simplify.

10-28-2002, 06:12 AM	#19
gypsi Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2001 Posts: 234	ok so what i got is layout is ok but the spelling sucks is this correct. thanks