How do we make this offer better? - GoFuckYourself.com

Danielle · 09-10-2006, 01:10 AM

Who wants to critique this mainstream offer?

http://www.secretstomakingmoney.com/website-graphics/

Hugs,
Danielle

Danielle · 09-10-2006, 01:45 AM

Let's hear it!

Hugs,
Danielle

GrouchyAdmin · 09-10-2006, 02:02 AM

If you want my best attempt at a non-rude reply:

Your clip art looks like the same damn thing that they've been selling ever since CD-ROMs came out; so does the website.

It's hard on the eyes, and seems to have fallen straight out of 1996.

It's full of text. People don't want to read that much shit - only to find you want $30 for the same damn thing they can check out of the library.

It really, really, really needs a redesign if not an entire content shift; it was a hell of a lot more impressive before scanners, and digital cameras cost $30.

LiveDose · 09-10-2006, 02:33 AM

Yeah, tough sell. Some of those cd's in the store have over 100,000 pieces of clip art on them and they are under 100 bucks. Also as mentioned that website is not very clean and doesn't sell/close at all.

Danielle · 09-12-2006, 12:09 AM

Ok, we have made some major changes. What does everyone think now?

http://www.secretstomakingmoney.com/website-graphics/

Hugs,
Danielle

grumpy · 09-12-2006, 12:40 AM

im still with Toonpornblog.

to little for to much money and the site looks cheap( wich an be a good thing) with to much to read.

King of Queens · 09-12-2006, 02:22 AM

the headline does not catch my attention and make me want to read the first sentence

what ever that is above the headline does nothing for the site either

you provide no proof that graphics/clip art increase conversions

there are no bullets

what's in red in the body is not most important

there are no well known sites as examples that use graphics/clip art

you do not create/stimulate immediate desire for graphics & clip art

your page is not a good example of graphics/clip art in use

I could go on but I dont want you to get the wrong idea

marttali · 09-12-2006, 03:39 AM

You are talking about the importance of graphics when selling. Where are yours ?
To whom are you speaking ? Where is the persuasion ? Examples ?
Learn copywriting first !

Klen · 09-12-2006, 05:18 AM

It doesnt look good.

xcitecash · 09-12-2006, 05:19 AM

ok here goes,...

I used to sell used cars and never saw marketing material as tacky as that

09-10-2006, 01:10 AM	#1
Danielle Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: My Coffin Posts: 1,227	How do we make this offer better? Who wants to critique this mainstream offer? http://www.secretstomakingmoney.com/website-graphics/ Hugs, Danielle

09-10-2006, 02:02 AM	#3
GrouchyAdmin Now choke yourself! Industry Role: Join Date: Apr 2006 Posts: 12,085	If you want my best attempt at a non-rude reply: Your clip art looks like the same damn thing that they've been selling ever since CD-ROMs came out; so does the website. It's hard on the eyes, and seems to have fallen straight out of 1996. It's full of text. People don't want to read that much shit - only to find you want $30 for the same damn thing they can check out of the library. It really, really, really needs a redesign if not an entire content shift; it was a hell of a lot more impressive before scanners, and digital cameras cost $30. __________________ AIM: GrouchyGfy

09-10-2006, 02:33 AM	#4
LiveDose Show Yer Tits! Industry Role: Join Date: Feb 2002 Location: Somewhere Out there... Posts: 25,792	Yeah, tough sell. Some of those cd's in the store have over 100,000 pieces of clip art on them and they are under 100 bucks. Also as mentioned that website is not very clean and doesn't sell/close at all. __________________ Scammer Alert: acer19 acer [email protected] [email protected] Money stolen using PayPal

09-12-2006, 12:40 AM	#6
grumpy Too lazy to set a custom title Join Date: Jan 2002 Location: Holland Posts: 9,870	im still with Toonpornblog. to little for to much money and the site looks cheap( wich an be a good thing) with to much to read. __________________ Don't let greediness blur your vision \| You gotta let some shit slide icq - 441-456-888

09-10-2006, 01:45 AM	#2
Danielle Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: My Coffin Posts: 1,227	Let's hear it! Hugs, Danielle

09-12-2006, 12:09 AM	#5
Danielle Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: My Coffin Posts: 1,227	Ok, we have made some major changes. What does everyone think now? http://www.secretstomakingmoney.com/website-graphics/ Hugs, Danielle

09-12-2006, 02:22 AM	#7
King of Queens Confirmed User Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Atlanta, Georgia ICQ 276-218-214 Posts: 1,288	the headline does not catch my attention and make me want to read the first sentence what ever that is above the headline does nothing for the site either you provide no proof that graphics/clip art increase conversions there are no bullets what's in red in the body is not most important there are no well known sites as examples that use graphics/clip art you do not create/stimulate immediate desire for graphics & clip art your page is not a good example of graphics/clip art in use I could go on but I dont want you to get the wrong idea

09-12-2006, 03:39 AM	#8
marttali Confirmed User Join Date: May 2003 Posts: 265	You are talking about the importance of graphics when selling. Where are yours ? To whom are you speaking ? Where is the persuasion ? Examples ? Learn copywriting first !

09-12-2006, 05:18 AM	#9
Klen Industry Role: Join Date: Aug 2006 Location: Little Vienna Posts: 32,235	It doesnt look good.

09-12-2006, 05:19 AM	#10
xcitecash Confirmed User Join Date: Nov 2005 Location: Cambridge UK Posts: 801	ok here goes,... I used to sell used cars and never saw marketing material as tacky as that