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  • Danielle
    Confirmed User
    • Jun 2002
    • 1227
    #1

    How do we make this offer better?

    Who wants to critique this mainstream offer?

    http://www.secretstomakingmoney.com/website-graphics/

    Hugs,
    Danielle
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    • Danielle
      Confirmed User
      • Jun 2002
      • 1227
      #2
      Let's hear it!

      Hugs,
      Danielle

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        • GrouchyAdmin
          Now choke yourself!
          • Apr 2006
          • 12085
          #3
          If you want my best attempt at a non-rude reply:

          Your clip art looks like the same damn thing that they've been selling ever since CD-ROMs came out; so does the website.

          It's hard on the eyes, and seems to have fallen straight out of 1996.

          It's full of text. People don't want to read that much shit - only to find you want $30 for the same damn thing they can check out of the library.

          It really, really, really needs a redesign if not an entire content shift; it was a hell of a lot more impressive before scanners, and digital cameras cost $30.

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            • LiveDose
              Show Yer Tits!
              • Feb 2002
              • 25792
              #4
              Yeah, tough sell. Some of those cd's in the store have over 100,000 pieces of clip art on them and they are under 100 bucks. Also as mentioned that website is not very clean and doesn't sell/close at all.

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                • Danielle
                  Confirmed User
                  • Jun 2002
                  • 1227
                  #5
                  Ok, we have made some major changes. What does everyone think now?

                  http://www.secretstomakingmoney.com/website-graphics/

                  Hugs,
                  Danielle

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                    • grumpy
                      Too lazy to set a custom title
                      • Jan 2002
                      • 9870
                      #6
                      im still with Toonpornblog.

                      to little for to much money and the site looks cheap( wich an be a good thing) with to much to read.
                      Don't let greediness blur your vision | You gotta let some shit slide
                      icq - 441-456-888

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                        • King of Queens
                          Confirmed User
                          • Aug 2006
                          • 1288
                          #7
                          the headline does not catch my attention and make me want to read the first sentence

                          what ever that is above the headline does nothing for the site either

                          you provide no proof that graphics/clip art increase conversions

                          there are no bullets

                          what's in red in the body is not most important

                          there are no well known sites as examples that use graphics/clip art

                          you do not create/stimulate immediate desire for graphics & clip art

                          your page is not a good example of graphics/clip art in use

                          I could go on but I dont want you to get the wrong idea
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                            • marttali
                              Confirmed User
                              • May 2003
                              • 265
                              #8
                              You are talking about the importance of graphics when selling. Where are yours ?
                              To whom are you speaking ? Where is the persuasion ? Examples ?
                              Learn copywriting first !

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                                • Klen
                                  • Aug 2006
                                  • 32234
                                  #9
                                  It doesnt look good.

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                                    • xcitecash
                                      Confirmed User
                                      • Nov 2005
                                      • 801
                                      #10
                                      ok here goes,...

                                      I used to sell used cars and never saw marketing material as tacky as that

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