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czarina · 07-02-2006, 02:16 PM

http://mixofeverything.com/banner-quarter-page.jpg

your input is appreciated. thanx!

CaptainHowdy · 07-02-2006, 02:22 PM

Looks nice and ready to be posted as comment on MySpace

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2HousePlague · 07-02-2006, 02:23 PM

what is the background image? looks like a fun place.

2hp

kaktuz · 07-02-2006, 02:24 PM

pure skillz

DutchTeenCash · 07-02-2006, 02:25 PM

pretty amazing

Cyber Fucker · 07-02-2006, 02:27 PM

not bad

fr0gman · 07-02-2006, 02:44 PM

It is a little too busy. The background takes away from the wording. I would tone it down by at leat 25% and see how it looks then.

Pete-KT · 07-02-2006, 02:54 PM

Dim the background a lil, it will look better

czarina · 07-02-2006, 07:32 PM

thank you guys.
It is for a nightclub in Rosarito Beach, Baja (Mexico) named Tequilas Club. It's indeed a fun place to go and they have these cool best booty contests on weekends that are awesome

DBS.US · 07-02-2006, 07:51 PM

I would think it shoud say something about its a nightclub in Rosarito Beach? I get things like that on my car every weekend when I go out to party in downtown LA. Small fonted busy DJ this in that cards and just get thrown away because I can't tell what there trying to say.

Spunky · 07-02-2006, 07:55 PM

Looks pretty good..nice job

sharp · 07-02-2006, 07:56 PM

looks pretty good, but a little too busy, IMO.

lazycash · 07-02-2006, 08:08 PM

Nice effects, but I agree with some of the others that the background tends to make some of the text hard to read, tone it down. Also, I'd make Club Tequilas bigger and separate the wording some.

E$_manager · 07-02-2006, 08:18 PM

perfect, no more comments

BLish · 07-02-2006, 08:19 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by fr0gman

It is a little too busy. The background takes away from the wording. I would tone it down by at leat 25% and see how it looks then.

exactly what they said! way too busy... use that theory KISS (keep it simple silly!)

GrouchyAdmin · 07-02-2006, 11:35 PM

Where's the mod file and the copper effects? (It really looks like a technical demonstration on an old computer. Very similar effects in fonts and such.) A bit busy; unless I had the time to stare at it, I'd probably not even notice anything but 'dance'.

Sydney_AWP · 07-02-2006, 11:42 PM

Not too bad and honestly i want to join the party

CamsLord · 07-02-2006, 11:43 PM

lots of things going on, great though

XOS_Andrei_G · 07-03-2006, 12:49 AM

I'll be harsh. It looks like pretty average. You need to read up on a few things:

1) Layout
2) Spacing
3) Separation

Good luck though.

MaddCaz · 07-03-2006, 12:49 AM

its decent man

Doctor Dre · 07-03-2006, 12:56 AM

Not to diss your work but it kinda sucks ... It wouldn't get the attention of people ... Maybe if you do a high school party, but not in a competitive club scene.

It's hard to read, there is no focus on anything and the effects are taking too much of the attention.

Here are some of our work if you need ideas

http://www.barbuzz.net/desing a lot more of clean designs there too.

flashbang · 07-03-2006, 01:02 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by fr0gman

It is a little too busy. The background takes away from the wording. I would tone it down by at leat 25% and see how it looks then.

actually what i was gonna say, that background should be bleached a bit then it cool!

spunkforum · 07-03-2006, 01:03 AM

it's not bad, the text doesn't really stand out much at all though, perhaps try a color other than white, and dance blends in with the background colors too much

Bro Media - BANNED FOR LIFE · 07-03-2006, 01:14 AM

i'd re-arrange the logo a bit... the club above tequilas makes someone not from the area think "club tequilas" instead of "tequilas club" and then probably cause them to spend alot of time trying to find "club tequilas" instead of "tequilas club"

gooddomains · 07-03-2006, 01:41 AM

It's great work

Thomas1007 · 07-03-2006, 01:46 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Doctor Dre

Not to diss your work but it kinda sucks ... It wouldn't get the attention of people ... Maybe if you do a high school party, but not in a competitive club scene.

It's hard to read, there is no focus on anything and the effects are taking too much of the attention.

Here are some of our work if you need ideas

http://www.barbuzz.net/desing a lot more of clean designs there too.

wow those are seriously nice.

ClearHead · 07-03-2006, 02:50 AM

the type of "Club Tequilas" too illegible, imo.
but on the whole - not bad.

FelixFlow · 07-03-2006, 02:52 AM

too busy

Mr.Right - Banned For Life · 07-03-2006, 02:58 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Doctor Dre

Not to diss your work but it kinda sucks ... It wouldn't get the attention of people ... Maybe if you do a high school party, but not in a competitive club scene.

It's hard to read, there is no focus on anything and the effects are taking too much of the attention.

Here are some of our work if you need ideas

http://www.barbuzz.net/desing a lot more of clean designs there too.

Now they look hot. Much better than the original ones.

soulbleed · 07-03-2006, 03:38 AM

honestly, i dont think its anywhere near the misguided comments such as 'Perfect' , 'amazing' and 'pure skillz'

a lot of it is hard to read. take note of Doctor Dre's images.

The Ghost · 07-03-2006, 04:07 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Doctor Dre

Not to diss your work but it kinda sucks ... It wouldn't get the attention of people ... Maybe if you do a high school party, but not in a competitive club scene.

It's hard to read, there is no focus on anything and the effects are taking too much of the attention.

Here are some of our work if you need ideas

http://www.barbuzz.net/desing a lot more of clean designs there too.

Nice stuff Dre

aico · 07-03-2006, 04:24 AM

The whole thing is too constrained. First thing I'd to is make the club name much bigger, don't be afraid to overlap shit.

I'd get rid of the type around the border and make the border thinner, unless you are using a really good (expensive) printing company, they will more than likely not crop it how you like and that will look all fucked up, plus it's too busy.

We don't need a photo of the Earth to understand what World Famous means. The image is like a sore spot on your design.

Since you put all the colors in the world and the Tequila name,I am guessing it's a full color print job, might want to use a different color on your text "Dance" to make is stand out from the background a more.

Seems to me that Go Go Cages would be a bigger selling point then the fact that it's under new management.

Get rid of the lightning and knock the background down about 15%.

XOS_Andrei_G · 07-05-2006, 02:05 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Doctor Dre

Not to diss your work but it kinda sucks ... It wouldn't get the attention of people ... Maybe if you do a high school party, but not in a competitive club scene.

It's hard to read, there is no focus on anything and the effects are taking too much of the attention.

Here are some of our work if you need ideas

http://www.barbuzz.net/desing a lot more of clean designs there too.

Somebody got owned.

madawgz · 07-05-2006, 02:21 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Doctor Dre

Not to diss your work but it kinda sucks ... It wouldn't get the attention of people ... Maybe if you do a high school party, but not in a competitive club scene.

It's hard to read, there is no focus on anything and the effects are taking too much of the attention.

Here are some of our work if you need ideas

http://www.barbuzz.net/desing a lot more of clean designs there too.

i know what you mean man, those are awesome!

basschick · 07-05-2006, 02:29 AM

it looks like you haven't been doing stuff like this for very long. not only is the club name hard to read - and let's face it, you only have 1 second before people stop trying - but it just doesn't say "party" to me.

i think dr dre had some useful things to say and hopefully you'll really focus on them even if it does hurt to have someone criticize your work. his examples are great party/club flyers that are easy to read, have plenty of breathing space, and use the effects to enhance the overall message rather than just putting words on a background.

Ace_luffy · 07-05-2006, 03:12 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Doctor Dre

Not to diss your work but it kinda sucks ... It wouldn't get the attention of people ... Maybe if you do a high school party, but not in a competitive club scene.

It's hard to read, there is no focus on anything and the effects are taking too much of the attention.

Here are some of our work if you need ideas

http://www.barbuzz.net/desing a lot more of clean designs there too.

lucas131 · 07-05-2006, 04:49 AM

Pretty mess banner

07-02-2006, 02:16 PM	#1
czarina Webmaster Extraordinaire Industry Role: Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: A beautiful beach... Posts: 10,748	I just made this banner for a client, please critique http://mixofeverything.com/banner-quarter-page.jpg your input is appreciated. thanx!

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07-02-2006, 07:32 PM	#9
czarina Webmaster Extraordinaire Industry Role: Join Date: Jul 2002 Location: A beautiful beach... Posts: 10,748	thank you guys. It is for a nightclub in Rosarito Beach, Baja (Mexico) named Tequilas Club. It's indeed a fun place to go and they have these cool best booty contests on weekends that are awesome

07-02-2006, 07:51 PM	#10
DBS.US Geo Cities Industry Role: Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: North Captiva Island, Florida USA Posts: 11,835	I would think it shoud say something about its a nightclub in Rosarito Beach? I get things like that on my car every weekend when I go out to party in downtown LA. Small fonted busy DJ this in that cards and just get thrown away because I can't tell what there trying to say. __________________ Make a Free Chaturbate White Label site in 34 minutes and be making money tonight

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07-02-2006, 07:56 PM	#12
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07-02-2006, 11:35 PM	#16
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07-03-2006, 01:03 AM	#23
spunkforum Registered User Join Date: Jun 2006 Posts: 89	it's not bad, the text doesn't really stand out much at all though, perhaps try a color other than white, and dance blends in with the background colors too much

07-03-2006, 01:14 AM	#24
Bro Media - BANNED FOR LIFE MOBILE PORN: IMOBILEPORN Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Tinseltown NL Posts: 16,502	i'd re-arrange the logo a bit... the club above tequilas makes someone not from the area think "club tequilas" instead of "tequilas club" and then probably cause them to spend alot of time trying to find "club tequilas" instead of "tequilas club"

07-03-2006, 01:41 AM	#25
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07-03-2006, 02:50 AM	#27
ClearHead Registered User Join Date: May 2006 Location: Europe Posts: 49	the type of "Club Tequilas" too illegible, imo. but on the whole - not bad. __________________ It is better to live rich than to die rich.

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soulbleed Confirmed User Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: Australia Posts: 2,606	honestly, i dont think its anywhere near the misguided comments such as 'Perfect' , 'amazing' and 'pure skillz' a lot of it is hard to read. take note of Doctor Dre's images.

07-03-2006, 04:24 AM	#32
aico Moo Moo Cow Join Date: Mar 2004 Location: Washington State Posts: 14,748	The whole thing is too constrained. First thing I'd to is make the club name much bigger, don't be afraid to overlap shit. I'd get rid of the type around the border and make the border thinner, unless you are using a really good (expensive) printing company, they will more than likely not crop it how you like and that will look all fucked up, plus it's too busy. We don't need a photo of the Earth to understand what World Famous means. The image is like a sore spot on your design. Since you put all the colors in the world and the Tequila name,I am guessing it's a full color print job, might want to use a different color on your text "Dance" to make is stand out from the background a more. Seems to me that Go Go Cages would be a bigger selling point then the fact that it's under new management. Get rid of the lightning and knock the background down about 15%.

07-05-2006, 02:29 AM	#35
basschick Confirmed User Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: el lay, ca usa Posts: 2,540	it looks like you haven't been doing stuff like this for very long. not only is the club name hard to read - and let's face it, you only have 1 second before people stop trying - but it just doesn't say "party" to me. i think dr dre had some useful things to say and hopefully you'll really focus on them even if it does hurt to have someone criticize your work. his examples are great party/club flyers that are easy to read, have plenty of breathing space, and use the effects to enhance the overall message rather than just putting words on a background. __________________ Got Gay and For Women Traffic?

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