Critique my design (mainstream) - GoFuckYourself.com

galleryseek · 11-24-2004, 03:39 PM

The current design is: www.healthygo.com

The new design is: www.healthygo.com/new.htm

What do you think about the new design, does it let you know exactly what the service is easily? Is it too wordy? What are your opinions / suggestions.

I'm trying to make it as appealing, user-friendly and understandable as possible.

One thing I do know I need to improve is the pictures, but those before & after pictures seem to be impossible to find, as this is a new service and don't have my own yet.

Thanks!

Platinumpimp · 11-24-2004, 03:42 PM

2nd one is better and more easy on the eyes. I like your mainstream site, comparable to mine. Good job

Theo · 11-24-2004, 03:44 PM

Gary is very talented web designer.

galleryseek · 11-24-2004, 03:51 PM

thanks platinum.

soul rebel: apparently not good enough lol, the current design ISN'T converting as we both know

Babagirls · 11-24-2004, 03:52 PM

2nd design is better (both are good though!)

very nice!

Rob · 11-24-2004, 03:55 PM

Very nice designs!

I sort of like the first one better but not by much. Both are outstanding designs and it's hard to pick. If you could somehow fuse the two together (the red really jumps out) it would be spectacular.

They both look professional and clean.

Sarma · 11-24-2004, 03:55 PM

2nd one

Great work there...as allways

Red Ezra · 11-24-2004, 04:04 PM

looks nice

galleryseek · 11-24-2004, 04:09 PM

thanks for the comments. it's a lot more than the "appearence". making shit convert in mainstream as i've come to learn is a pretty specific process. you really need to situate the layout in a logical manner, and the way in which you choose to present the service is something that is difficult to get right on the first try.

i'm learning though

Rob · 11-24-2004, 04:15 PM

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Originally posted by galleryseek
thanks for the comments. it's a lot more than the "appearence". making shit convert in mainstream as i've come to learn is a pretty specific process. you really need to situate the layout in a logical manner, and the way in which you choose to present the service is something that is difficult to get right on the first try.

i'm learning though

You don't know how true that is! Not only do you have to lead a horse to water but you have to force that mofo to drink! It's all about logical progression when it comes to selling any product online. Give a sample, lead them on with a brief description and why they need it, and then put in a :BUY NOW: button. If they choose not to purchase the product then we are forced to make them feel bad and remind them as to why they need it.

Damn, I've been in mainstream wayyyyy too long!

galleryseek · 11-24-2004, 04:17 PM

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Originally posted by HighOnAcid
You don't know how true that is! Not only do you have to lead a horse to water but you have to force that mofo to drink! It's all about logical progression when it comes to selling any product online. Give a sample, lead them on with a brief description and why they need it, and then put in a :BUY NOW: button. If they choose not to purchase the product then we are forced to make them feel bad and remind them as to why they need it.

Damn, I've been in mainstream wayyyyy too long!

my main approach concerning that, is the free physical exam. since most of the visitors are probably "out of shape" it will give them their BMI/BMR/BF% and tell them that they're at high risk for serious medical conditions. then lead 'em to a tour/signup page.

moneymaker_ro · 11-24-2004, 04:20 PM

Nice quality.

Rob · 11-24-2004, 04:24 PM

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Originally posted by galleryseek
my main approach concerning that, is the free physical exam. since most of the visitors are probably "out of shape" it will give them their BMI/BMR/BF% and tell them that they're at high risk for serious medical conditions. then lead 'em to a tour/signup page.

You are no stranger to suggestive selling and generating strong leads. You'll do fine and your site will rock regardless of the design!

I wish you nothing but the best.

Vitasoy · 11-24-2004, 04:25 PM

The second one is very slick.

Rob · 11-24-2004, 04:27 PM

By the way, I'm quite the workout enthusiast myself and was a personal trainer for many years in Miami (got me through college, God bless it). I have written articles in the past on the do's and dont's of working out and dieting.

If you need some articles for your site then I'm sure I can dig them up. Email me at rob AT acidflyers DOT com and I'd be more than happy to send them over.

galleryseek · 11-24-2004, 04:31 PM

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Originally posted by HighOnAcid
You are no stranger to suggestive selling and generating strong leads.

I'm not? Do you have me mixed up with someone else?

Thanks though! I'll take you up on that offer soon, too.

chupachups · 11-24-2004, 05:50 PM

Very nice, very clean both of them. I´d try to mix the tab-design of number 2 with number one...

Matt 26z · 11-24-2004, 06:04 PM

Both versions are a trainwreck, but I like the potential of the first one. It needs work, but I'd stick with it.

A very big problem is that both versions fail to get across fast enough exactly what the site is. You don't have long before someone glances at the page and then leaves if the concept doesn't catch their eye.

Right at the top in clear letters you need to have something like "Talk to certified fitness trainers online." That would establish exactly what's going on 2 seconds after the page loads.

Also...

- Your use of the Healthy Go term is minimal, and the logo is even tiny (135x36) at the top. If your goal is impulse buyers, fine. If you want them to come back, they need to remember where they were. Increase the size of the logo a great deal, and use the term more often.

- Filling out the "free physical analysis" appears to be required before surfers are even presented with the entire sales pitch (best one being on the signup page). Bad, bad move. Every fitness site has one of these body mass index type things, and you need to take into account that the surfer simply may not want to fill another one out. This just adds to the mental cost of the site.

- The screen shots are worthless since they are so tiny and nothing can be seen in them.

- You ask for routing number and account number for check payments without the check graphic that every other site uses since some people don't exactly know where these numbers are located.

There's other things too, but overall the actual concept is good. Just keep at it. It'll work eventually....

galleryseek · 11-24-2004, 10:09 PM

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Originally posted by Matt 26z
Both versions are a trainwreck, but I like the potential of the first one. It needs work, but I'd stick with it.

A very big problem is that both versions fail to get across fast enough exactly what the site is. You don't have long before someone glances at the page and then leaves if the concept doesn't catch their eye.

Right at the top in clear letters you need to have something like "Talk to certified fitness trainers online." That would establish exactly what's going on 2 seconds after the page loads.

Also...

- Your use of the Healthy Go term is minimal, and the logo is even tiny (135x36) at the top. If your goal is impulse buyers, fine. If you want them to come back, they need to remember where they were. Increase the size of the logo a great deal, and use the term more often.

- Filling out the "free physical analysis" appears to be required before surfers are even presented with the entire sales pitch (best one being on the signup page). Bad, bad move. Every fitness site has one of these body mass index type things, and you need to take into account that the surfer simply may not want to fill another one out. This just adds to the mental cost of the site.

- The screen shots are worthless since they are so tiny and nothing can be seen in them.

- You ask for routing number and account number for check payments without the check graphic that every other site uses since some people don't exactly know where these numbers are located.

There's other things too, but overall the actual concept is good. Just keep at it. It'll work eventually....

thanks for the comments.

why exactly though do you like the first one better? is it purely on account of the wording?

i think the new design is clearly better as far as appearence is concerned, and i can easily modify the wording/approach.

and yeah as far as that old design is concerned with the join page n' all, i'm trashing that.

Warden · 11-24-2004, 10:35 PM

Great design.

Is this your site or just a clients?

Either way they should considering doing business with this company

www.hopsports.com

yeah, I used to work there but they are solid and an up and coming company!

xclusive · 11-24-2004, 10:39 PM

I like the 2nd one much better and tweaking of the words and you have yourself a winner...

jwerd · 11-24-2004, 10:55 PM

Very nice, very nice

digifan · 11-24-2004, 11:06 PM

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Originally posted by lamerhooD
Very nice, very nice

Matt 26z · 11-25-2004, 12:32 AM

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Originally posted by galleryseek
why exactly though do you like the first one better? is it purely on account of the wording?

i think the new design is clearly better as far as appearence is concerned, and i can easily modify the wording/approach.

My problem with the second one is that there's so much regular text crammed together. Whereas the first one makes better use of colors, varying text sizes, spacing, etc...

The content is better on the second one, but I personally don't like how it's being presented visually.

Combining aspects of the two is another idea.

11-24-2004, 03:39 PM	#1
galleryseek Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Mar 2002 Posts: 8,234	Critique my design (mainstream) The current design is: www.healthygo.com The new design is: www.healthygo.com/new.htm What do you think about the new design, does it let you know exactly what the service is easily? Is it too wordy? What are your opinions / suggestions. I'm trying to make it as appealing, user-friendly and understandable as possible. One thing I do know I need to improve is the pictures, but those before & after pictures seem to be impossible to find, as this is a new service and don't have my own yet. Thanks!

11-24-2004, 03:42 PM	#2
Platinumpimp Logos and such. Industry Role: Join Date: Jan 2004 Location: Kingdom of the Netherlands Posts: 10,214	2nd one is better and more easy on the eyes. I like your mainstream site, comparable to mine. Good job __________________ I design logo's.

11-24-2004, 03:52 PM	#5
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11-24-2004, 03:55 PM	#6
Rob I'm a great bowler. Industry Role: Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Right Outside of Normal. Posts: 13,309	Very nice designs! I sort of like the first one better but not by much. Both are outstanding designs and it's hard to pick. If you could somehow fuse the two together (the red really jumps out) it would be spectacular. They both look professional and clean. __________________

11-24-2004, 03:55 PM	#7
Sarma Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2004 Location: Europe Posts: 715	2nd one Great work there...as allways __________________ I make up to $175 per sale, how about you? -> MoreNiche.com

11-24-2004, 03:44 PM	#3
Theo HAL 9000 Industry Role: Join Date: May 2001 Posts: 34,515	Gary is very talented web designer.

11-24-2004, 03:51 PM	#4
galleryseek Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Mar 2002 Posts: 8,234	thanks platinum. soul rebel: apparently not good enough lol, the current design ISN'T converting as we both know

11-24-2004, 04:04 PM	#8
Red Ezra redezra.com Industry Role: Join Date: May 2004 Location: Vegas Baby! Posts: 4,680	looks nice

11-24-2004, 04:09 PM	#9
galleryseek Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Mar 2002 Posts: 8,234	thanks for the comments. it's a lot more than the "appearence". making shit convert in mainstream as i've come to learn is a pretty specific process. you really need to situate the layout in a logical manner, and the way in which you choose to present the service is something that is difficult to get right on the first try. i'm learning though

11-24-2004, 04:20 PM	#12
moneymaker_ro Confirmed User Join Date: Nov 2004 Location: Romania Posts: 640	Nice quality.

11-24-2004, 04:25 PM	#14
Vitasoy GFY HALL OF FAME DAMMIT!!! Join Date: Oct 2003 Posts: 58,202	The second one is very slick. __________________ [email protected]

11-24-2004, 04:27 PM	#15
Rob I'm a great bowler. Industry Role: Join Date: Nov 2003 Location: Right Outside of Normal. Posts: 13,309	By the way, I'm quite the workout enthusiast myself and was a personal trainer for many years in Miami (got me through college, God bless it). I have written articles in the past on the do's and dont's of working out and dieting. If you need some articles for your site then I'm sure I can dig them up. Email me at rob AT acidflyers DOT com and I'd be more than happy to send them over. __________________

11-24-2004, 05:50 PM	#17
chupachups Confirmed User Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Sweden/Spain you sum bitch! Posts: 6,576	Very nice, very clean both of them. I´d try to mix the tab-design of number 2 with number one... __________________

11-24-2004, 06:04 PM	#18
Matt 26z So Fucking Banned Industry Role: Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: ¤ª"˜¨๑۩۞۩๑¨˜"ª¤ Posts: 18,481	Both versions are a trainwreck, but I like the potential of the first one. It needs work, but I'd stick with it. A very big problem is that both versions fail to get across fast enough exactly what the site is. You don't have long before someone glances at the page and then leaves if the concept doesn't catch their eye. Right at the top in clear letters you need to have something like "Talk to certified fitness trainers online." That would establish exactly what's going on 2 seconds after the page loads. Also... - Your use of the Healthy Go term is minimal, and the logo is even tiny (135x36) at the top. If your goal is impulse buyers, fine. If you want them to come back, they need to remember where they were. Increase the size of the logo a great deal, and use the term more often. - Filling out the "free physical analysis" appears to be required before surfers are even presented with the entire sales pitch (best one being on the signup page). Bad, bad move. Every fitness site has one of these body mass index type things, and you need to take into account that the surfer simply may not want to fill another one out. This just adds to the mental cost of the site. - The screen shots are worthless since they are so tiny and nothing can be seen in them. - You ask for routing number and account number for check payments without the check graphic that every other site uses since some people don't exactly know where these numbers are located. There's other things too, but overall the actual concept is good. Just keep at it. It'll work eventually....

11-24-2004, 10:35 PM	#20
Warden Confirmed User Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: Valencia, CA Posts: 2,906	Great design. Is this your site or just a clients? Either way they should considering doing business with this company www.hopsports.com yeah, I used to work there but they are solid and an up and coming company! __________________ AIM: ZeeRiddler ICQ: 128160005 Warden's MS

11-24-2004, 10:39 PM	#21
xclusive Too lazy to set a custom title Join Date: Apr 2004 Location: Buffalo, NY Posts: 35,218	I like the 2nd one much better and tweaking of the words and you have yourself a winner... __________________ I support MediumPimpin.com / Shemp's Outlawtgp.com /

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jwerd Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Costa Rica Posts: 1,953	Very nice, very nice __________________ Yii Framework Guru - Seasoned PHP vet - Partner @ XXXCoupon.com