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sheldonjuan · 01-08-2004, 09:15 PM

women have holes and they getfilled
women have holes and we want to fill them
If women had no holes we would want to dig them
we still try

women drool out of their holes
sometimes its runny sometimes its thick
sometimes its red
so they go to walmart to buy a new pair
of underwear

Some women get fucked in the ass
they get paid money to do it
guys like it
because its degrading
these women do it because they like enemas filled with cash
and the cocaine

In japan they like to be shit on
in russia the pony cock is fine
in germany there is piss and fists
but all over the world
there are rumours
of the snuff

filmed with 8mm film
some rich American pays the satanist
promises are made to an innercity youth
rape
her face is hooded
and her neck is cut

This is said to happen in L.A
yet no one has ever really seen the tapes

xxxoutsourcing · 01-08-2004, 09:18 PM

Talented

digifan · 01-08-2004, 09:20 PM

Far from Shakespeare tho...

The Truth Hurts · 01-08-2004, 09:23 PM

you are disturbed.
seek help.

MrIzzz · 01-08-2004, 09:23 PM

keats has nothing compared to you

Rorschach · 01-08-2004, 09:24 PM

Wow that changed my life.

For the worse.

digifan · 01-08-2004, 09:25 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Rorschach
Wow that changed my life.

For the worse.

sickkittens · 01-08-2004, 09:25 PM

There once was a man from Nantucket...

myjah · 01-08-2004, 09:30 PM

put alot of thought into that, huh?

sheldonjuan · 01-08-2004, 09:30 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by The Truth Hurts
you are disturbed.
seek help.

why am i disturbed?

Jamdin · 01-08-2004, 09:31 PM

Blood Mistress

The night belongs to many creatures that hunt by the moonlight
But there is one who is holds fear even among those creatures.
Her true name is never spoken by those who are bright
And those who whisper of this woman call her the Blood Mistress.

Her hair is the color of a midnight and her eyes are crimson
But her skin is without color and is cold to the touch.
Her voice is but a whisper speaking of unspeakable sin
And with a kiss, she can steal your very soul.

I have seen this Blood Mistress but once in my short life
For she chose me to be her mate so very long ago.
When I refused her advances saying that I did not want a wife,
She left her mark upon the side of my neck and never returned.

Now I lay dying in a room of white and all I want is her
For I know that nothing awaits save an empty void.
She has taken my blood, my soul, and her I no longer fear
And I await the grim reaper with closed arms.

maxdaname · 01-09-2004, 12:01 AM

very... deep!

GonePhishing · 01-09-2004, 01:41 AM

Very nice. I would have liked to see a haiku version too!

johnbosh · 01-09-2004, 01:43 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by xxxoutsourcing
Talented

- AFN - · 01-09-2004, 02:54 AM

holes should be the subject of your poem

01-08-2004, 09:15 PM	#1
sheldonjuan Confirmed User Join Date: Sep 2003 Posts: 875	please review my poem women have holes and they getfilled women have holes and we want to fill them If women had no holes we would want to dig them we still try women drool out of their holes sometimes its runny sometimes its thick sometimes its red so they go to walmart to buy a new pair of underwear Some women get fucked in the ass they get paid money to do it guys like it because its degrading these women do it because they like enemas filled with cash and the cocaine In japan they like to be shit on in russia the pony cock is fine in germany there is piss and fists but all over the world there are rumours of the snuff filmed with 8mm film some rich American pays the satanist promises are made to an innercity youth rape her face is hooded and her neck is cut This is said to happen in L.A yet no one has ever really seen the tapes __________________ fuck it, I dont need a sig!

01-08-2004, 09:18 PM	#2
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01-08-2004, 09:20 PM	#3
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01-08-2004, 09:23 PM	#5
MrIzzz If u touch it, I will cum Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: long island Posts: 22,923	keats has nothing compared to you __________________ WHO WANTS TO PLAY GRAB-ASS?

01-08-2004, 09:25 PM	#8
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01-08-2004, 09:23 PM	#4
The Truth Hurts Zph7YXfjMhg Industry Role: Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: In Your Skull Posts: 15,308	you are disturbed. seek help.

01-08-2004, 09:24 PM	#6
Rorschach So Fucking Banned Join Date: Aug 2002 Posts: 5,579	Wow that changed my life. For the worse.

01-08-2004, 09:30 PM	#9
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01-08-2004, 09:31 PM	#11
Jamdin Registered User Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: Kansas Posts: 3,560	Blood Mistress The night belongs to many creatures that hunt by the moonlight But there is one who is holds fear even among those creatures. Her true name is never spoken by those who are bright And those who whisper of this woman call her the Blood Mistress. Her hair is the color of a midnight and her eyes are crimson But her skin is without color and is cold to the touch. Her voice is but a whisper speaking of unspeakable sin And with a kiss, she can steal your very soul. I have seen this Blood Mistress but once in my short life For she chose me to be her mate so very long ago. When I refused her advances saying that I did not want a wife, She left her mark upon the side of my neck and never returned. Now I lay dying in a room of white and all I want is her For I know that nothing awaits save an empty void. She has taken my blood, my soul, and her I no longer fear And I await the grim reaper with closed arms.

01-09-2004, 12:01 AM	#12
maxdaname Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2003 Posts: 5,193	very... deep!

01-09-2004, 01:41 AM	#13
GonePhishing Confirmed User Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Blah Posts: 2,474	Very nice. I would have liked to see a haiku version too! __________________ If Biff Fucks My Mom... I Might Never Be Born...

01-09-2004, 02:54 AM	#15
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