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Neriah Davis · 10-12-2003, 02:21 AM

Please critique my new tour. I need your advice...how does it look?

We just launched it. I am all ears

Abyss_Vee · 10-12-2003, 02:23 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Neriah Davis
Please critique my new tour. I need your advice...how does it look? We just launched it. I am all ears

NEW TOUR

very nice

RedBumper · 10-12-2003, 02:24 AM

IMHO there isn's much on the first page why a surfer would click on the "take free tour" link. I would add more pics, etc... and put those website screenshots on the last tour page.

Abyss_Vee · 10-12-2003, 02:26 AM

i clicked on the tour,,, neriah,, u gotta get in contact with me for my content site

icq 201636447

Neriah Davis · 10-12-2003, 02:26 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by RedBumper
IMHO there isn's much on the first page why a surfer would click on the "take free tour" link. I would add more pics, etc... and put those website screenshots on the last tour page.

those are previews into the members side...you think save em for the last page?

maxjohan · 10-12-2003, 02:26 AM

I like the tour..black is the color of sex

RedBumper · 10-12-2003, 02:27 AM

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Originally posted by Neriah Davis

those are previews into the members side...you think save em for the last page?

I would, more pics on your main page would get you more qualified visitors i think (qualified as in visitors who click the tour link). But that's just my opinion...... i'm sure other people have other opinions

RedShoe · 10-12-2003, 02:32 AM

First, it looks good because I have a feeling I know how you did this. It's a good start, but I think it needs a little more spice. You've got the goods, now use 'em. Make me want more, the 2nd and third pages look sgood as well, but I'd shift a few things around.

There is a little bit of dead space in the upper right hand area of the main page. I'd clean up the images a little more. The playboy image is kinda jaggy. Also... how does it look on an 800x600 monitor? Is the 'sale' made above the fold?

Did I mention I was also a designer? I don't generally do design work for anyone except for a few select people. I don't advertise it, I don't hardly mention it but I will help you.

You know me. You know how to reach me.

WiredGuy · 10-12-2003, 02:36 AM

Looks good, I never saw the old design so I don't have much basis to compare with though...

WG

Neriah Davis · 10-12-2003, 02:41 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by RedShoe
First, it looks good because I have a feeling I know how you did this. It's a good start, but I think it needs a little more spice. You've got the goods, now use 'em. Make me want more, the 2nd and third pages look sgood as well, but I'd shift a few things around.

There is a little bit of dead space in the upper right hand area of the main page. I'd clean up the images a little more. The playboy image is kinda jaggy. Also... how does it look on an 800x600 monitor? Is the 'sale' made above the fold?

Did I mention I was also a designer? I don't generally do design work for anyone except for a few select people. I don't advertise it, I don't hardly mention it but I will help you.

You know me. You know how to reach me.

Thanks RedShoe...I'd l will ICQ you...I appreciate your generosity

Slinx · 10-12-2003, 02:49 AM

WOW, you are a beautiful woman, I have never noticed it before.

The tour looks fine.
Ok, I would put a small webmaster link on the bottom of the site.
And the "Get Instant Access | Members Entrance | Take the tour>>" text should be more in the middle of the page. I've scrolled the site down and didn't saw the buttons at the top anymore. (And I use a 18" flat screen monitor!)

I never saw your old site, but the design looks

I have already bookmarked your site.

media · 10-12-2003, 02:53 AM

I would ditch the playboy logo, you are allowed to use the term "Playboy Playmate" if you were in fact one, but I dont think you have the legal right to use their servicemarked logo...

So I would look into the legalities of that...

Looks cool otherwise..

Media

Neriah Davis · 10-12-2003, 02:59 AM

Thanks, you guys...I will tweak some stuff and add the webmaster link.

prostock · 10-12-2003, 03:19 AM

i am just asking , does playboy know you have that there , hate to see a nice site get into some shit over that , you never know with those big boys , reather you worked there or not at one time i think i damn sure have it in writting that you can have that there ! just my

RedShoe · 10-12-2003, 03:34 AM

She IS indeed a playmate.
http://www.playboy.com/playmates/per...s/mystory.html

prostock · 10-12-2003, 03:37 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by RedShoe
She IS indeed a playmate.
http://www.playboy.com/playmates/per...s/mystory.html

RedShoe , that is all cool and all , if it was me all i am saying i would make damn sure on the use of that on the site , and not want any shit from it and if they said yes i would ask can you please give it to me in writting ,
The way things have been here latly, these companys that see a person making a good cash flow seem to want to try and come back and fuck them and take it in some way , that is all i am getting at

BlueDesignStudios · 10-12-2003, 04:19 AM

It loads a bit slow for me - though I think that has more to do with your hosting than your design, my guess is

chemicaleyes · 10-12-2003, 04:24 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by RedBumper
IMHO there isn's much on the first page why a surfer would click on the "take free tour" link. I would add more pics, etc... and put those website screenshots on the last tour page.

- Jesus Christ - · 10-12-2003, 04:29 AM

Dizyaum...

KRL · 10-12-2003, 04:49 AM

Neriah,

Your site is gorgeous just like you!

goBigtime · 10-12-2003, 05:12 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by RedShoe

I'd clean up the images a little more. The playboy image is kinda jaggy.

Yeah I noticed that right away... it's not just the playboy bunny logo either. It's like whoever was doing the image masks had about a few too many cups of coffee

KRL · 10-12-2003, 05:18 AM

PS-

Trent Edison · 10-12-2003, 05:43 AM

STYLY!

millionaire · 10-12-2003, 06:10 AM

SWEET

lightswitch · 10-12-2003, 08:37 AM

How come i have to search for pictures of you? Free content is the hook, & you dont have one.
HIt me up if you need a web design guy.

Rochard · 10-12-2003, 10:06 AM

Your site is great and you are stunning.

However..... I checked out your link and was hard pressed for a link to your tour. I think you need to make that stand out a bit more.

Mutt · 10-12-2003, 10:30 AM

who did the Photoshop work on the big image of you on the main page and join pages? You're a stunning woman, this pic looks like it was cut out of a magazine by a 10 year old with a pair of scissors.

are you on a webcam? should be, not a big deal, once a week - there is a webcam ring for Playmates and other softcore glamour babes - your members will get free access to all the other girls' shows. should help alot with retention.

not trying to hurt anybody's feelings who did that design but it's not great, i can see what they were going for and parts of it are nice but it needs some work.

KCat · 10-12-2003, 11:34 AM

Prostock - You're right. I remember reading about a former playmate getting sued for using the Playboy logo on her site. They didn't like the idea of her personal site competing with their own.

Aside from that, Neriah is stunning! I'm sure any tour with a pic of her on it would do fantastic.

webair · 10-12-2003, 11:36 AM

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Originally posted by BlueDesignStudios
It loads a bit slow for me - though I think that has more to do with your hosting than your design, my guess is

loads fine for me...the pages are a bit lacking though, could definitely flash it up a bit, the cropping of your images could be a bit smoother as well...my

infectd · 10-12-2003, 11:37 AM

Fix the bunny head, Do some rollovers, Cut the body out right so it doesnt have lumps etc. Also add more content to the upper part of the page.

Fabuleux · 10-12-2003, 11:39 AM

WTF, I pressed the link and all I get is the Light Speed Cash site.

Ice · 10-12-2003, 11:41 AM

10-12-2003, 11:45 AM

You're a gorgous woman. I would really suggest that you find yourself a professional designer that can clean up the site and the webmaster area. Looks a little too amateurish for a professional playmate like you are.

Yum yum!

RockDaddy · 10-12-2003, 11:47 AM

On page two, every thumb is linked to your join page. I have not yet decided to join but am still looking to see what all I will get inside (as a surfer). Link the thumbs to a larger pic and tell me what I'm going to find of that girl after joining.

Nice design, work more on the salesmanship.

pornguy · 10-12-2003, 01:55 PM

Babe if that is you, you are not all ears. More like almost all tits!

Heheheh

Very nice!

Feline · 10-12-2003, 02:14 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Mutt
who did the Photoshop work on the big image of you on the main page and join pages? You're a stunning woman, this pic looks like it was cut out of a magazine by a 10 year old with a pair of scissors.

are you on a webcam? should be, not a big deal, once a week - there is a webcam ring for Playmates and other softcore glamour babes - your members will get free access to all the other girls' shows. should help alot with retention.

not trying to hurt anybody's feelings who did that design but it's not great, i can see what they were going for and parts of it are nice but it needs some work.

Penthouse_mike · 10-12-2003, 02:19 PM

Looks great!

I would make a couple of minor changes.
1> The email collector should be much larger, and above all the other links at the bottom.

2> There is some dead space on the front page and the join page. Some good text would work there. List features of your site and show more pics of yourself in different outfits and hightlighting different parts of you: eyes, legs, behind...

3> Most single model sites don't have enough video content. They make up for it with weekly webcams, but a video sample and some text would help address surfer concerns that you only have a dozen series pics and a bunch of 'friends' pics.

4> Personally address the surfer. He joins because he is your fan. You appear to take an active part in your site. surfers value that. Let it show.

5> pop a console on exit. (I have a popup blocker, so I can't tell if you are doing this already.)

oh... and happy Birthday!

Neriah Davis · 10-12-2003, 04:03 PM

Thanks you guys...and thanks for the birthday wishes too!
I forwarded this link to my designer so he can read all your tips and make the proper adjustments. I really appreciate all the feedback from my fellow webmasters

THANK YOU!!!

MrIzzz · 10-12-2003, 04:08 PM

nice site.............it would be better if you posted a pic on ur main page of you naked with a sign saying "I love MrIzzz"

then again, u may lose alot of traffic

lexr · 10-12-2003, 11:28 PM

Heh, a bit late, but Happy Birthday!

brand0n · 10-12-2003, 11:30 PM

more pics of you, less of all your friends, show some bush, or atleast hint around 2 it

Neriah Davis · 10-13-2003, 01:23 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Penthouse_mike
Looks great!

I would make a couple of minor changes.
1> The email collector should be much larger, and above all the other links at the bottom.

2> There is some dead space on the front page and the join page. Some good text would work there. List features of your site and show more pics of yourself in different outfits and hightlighting different parts of you: eyes, legs, behind...

3> Most single model sites don't have enough video content. They make up for it with weekly webcams, but a video sample and some text would help address surfer concerns that you only have a dozen series pics and a bunch of 'friends' pics.

4> Personally address the surfer. He joins because he is your fan. You appear to take an active part in your site. surfers value that. Let it show.

5> pop a console on exit. (I have a popup blocker, so I can't tell if you are doing this already.)

oh... and happy Birthday!

Thanks Penthouse Mike....great advice! I am defnitely going to add the video invite back up there

Amputate Your Head · 10-13-2003, 01:48 AM

sorry to be the bringer of bad news, but the composition of that site is horrible. There are so many things wrong with it, I don't even know where to begin.... but let's try

1. It doesn't entice me to do anything except close the window. Without that, nothing else listed below matters, because no one will get that far.

2. Would definately check into the legality of using Playboy's gear. And if you do have the okay, I'm sure it probably doesn't include the mangled display of their emblem.

3. the code is sloppy and your exits don't work.

4. the site warning down at the bottom (that is copied directly from adult.com sites btw... ) is missing the 18 U.S.C. 2257 statement

5. the graphic work... the cutouts, the comp, the text work, the navigation, all of it... is just completely lacking any semblance of what would be considered "good" work.

6. the images in the thumbs on the tour pages are positively atrocious.

My recommendation is, start completely over.

footsex · 10-13-2003, 01:50 AM

damn, you are HOT!

Neriah Davis · 10-13-2003, 02:00 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Amputate Your Head
sorry to be the bringer of bad news, but the composition of that site is horrible. There are so many things wrong with it, I don't even know where to begin.... but let's try

1. It doesn't entice me to do anything except close the window. Without that, nothing else listed below matters, because no one will get that far.

2. Would definately check into the legality of using Playboy's gear. And if you do have the okay, I'm sure it probably doesn't include the mangled display of their emblem.

3. the code is sloppy and your exits don't work.

4. the site warning down at the bottom (that is copied directly from adult.com sites btw... ) is missing the 18 U.S.C. 2257 statement

5. the graphic work... the cutouts, the comp, the text work, the navigation, all of it... is just completely lacking any semblance of what would be considered "good" work.

6. the images in the thumbs on the tour pages are positively atrocious.

My recommendation is, start completely over.

Thanks for your honesty Amp. Hopefully your post will get us going in the right direction. If you know of anyone who can design a gorgeous, converting tour, I am open to recommendations!

EvilDan · 10-13-2003, 02:02 AM

1) Your tour looks great

2) The versign link didnt pop up on your join page for me for some reason???

3) You have AMEX on your billing system, and that worries me a little - AMEX doesnt accept porn last time I looked

4) YOu shoud offer a customer support link on your front page and join page

5) I live overseas, so on your webmaster page, make the video load after everything else has loaded - it made your page load very slowly

6) and when the codec did installl, it wouldnt play properly. You must consider overseas webmasters - so let them download the movie instead of streaming it (IMO)

Hope that helped

Evil Dan

stevecore · 10-13-2003, 02:12 AM

bad cutout on the first page... didn't go any further. as a graphic designer, yeah... i'd ask for them to spend more time on it or get my money back

Amputate Your Head · 10-13-2003, 02:13 AM

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Originally posted by Neriah Davis

Thanks for your honesty Amp. Hopefully your post will get us going in the right direction. If you know of anyone who can design a gorgeous, converting tour, I am open to recommendations!

i don't really recommend designers anymore... there are alot of really good ones, and I've chosen not to favor any of them in particular over another. Someone always ends up getting pissed off at me.

and I just wanna say, I'm not knocking the model on that site, she truly is beautiful. But in a nutshell, I think if the strategy is a "Playmate" model's site, the tactics need to be representative of the style that Playboy projects... the rough cuts and everything I mentioned above may work for other styles, but it's not favorable to this style. All the compliments from everyone in threads like this are nice, but in the end the only thing that ever truly matters is conversion.

Victor-E · 10-13-2003, 02:33 AM

It's not a bad start but it looks more like a rough layout BEFORE a final design. Here is what I would do first:

-If you are going to use cut out photos, make sure the outline is smooth and flawless. If your graphic artist is too lazy to spend the extra time manually cuting the outline, take some photos against a blue screen and have him do an auto crop in the computer. Avoid pics that cut off your hair on the side (page 2) I also think a subtle touch of lens flare on the photos/graphics would greatly improve the look. Don't let the photos "float" around the site. Anchor them to a graphic base.

-You have three pages of tour with about 4-5 links that appear to take you to a sample section but it goes to a sign up page instead. That's a dirty trick and big turn off. Place a nice, visible join button on each page and link the rest of the graphics to either the next tour page or sample pages.

You are very beautiful and the design of the site must reflect that.

Good luck

RedShoe · 10-13-2003, 02:51 AM

f...o...r...t...y - n...i...i...i...i...i...n...e

10-12-2003, 02:21 AM	#1
Neriah Davis Confirmed User Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Westsiiiiiiiide! Posts: 578	Help a girl out! Please critique my new tour. I need your advice...how does it look? We just launched it. I am all ears NEW TOUR __________________ First Class Playmate Content! Watch my Video!

10-12-2003, 02:24 AM	#3
RedBumper Confirmed User Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Icq: 216037845 Posts: 1,137	IMHO there isn's much on the first page why a surfer would click on the "take free tour" link. I would add more pics, etc... and put those website screenshots on the last tour page. __________________ Quality hosting at Phatservers Have something to sell? Do it on ADULTNETSALES for free! Want to make an extra us$ 100 a month for free? Click here!

10-12-2003, 02:26 AM	#6
maxjohan Confirmed User Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Sweden Posts: 7,219	I like the tour..black is the color of sex __________________ I went from 100 to 313,000 satoshis in 2 days! Lots of daily freerolls...

10-12-2003, 02:32 AM	#8
RedShoe 赤い靴 call me 202-456-1111 Industry Role: Join Date: Feb 2001 Location: The Valley Posts: 14,831	First, it looks good because I have a feeling I know how you did this. It's a good start, but I think it needs a little more spice. You've got the goods, now use 'em. Make me want more, the 2nd and third pages look sgood as well, but I'd shift a few things around. There is a little bit of dead space in the upper right hand area of the main page. I'd clean up the images a little more. The playboy image is kinda jaggy. Also... how does it look on an 800x600 monitor? Is the 'sale' made above the fold? Did I mention I was also a designer? I don't generally do design work for anyone except for a few select people. I don't advertise it, I don't hardly mention it but I will help you. You know me. You know how to reach me. __________________ SPECIALTY COSTUMES • PROPS • FX Superheroes • Monsters • Robots PM for details For any manufacturing needs. Adult or otherwise. aka BonsHigh on Insta Bonsai weed plants

10-12-2003, 02:36 AM	#9
WiredGuy Pounding Googlebot Industry Role: Join Date: Aug 2002 Location: Canada Posts: 34,482	Looks good, I never saw the old design so I don't have much basis to compare with though... WG __________________ I play with Google.

10-12-2003, 02:26 AM	#4
Abyss_Vee Confirmed User Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Los Angeles Posts: 5,208	i clicked on the tour,,, neriah,, u gotta get in contact with me for my content site icq 201636447

10-12-2003, 02:49 AM	#11
Slinx Confirmed User Join Date: May 2003 Posts: 823	WOW, you are a beautiful woman, I have never noticed it before. The tour looks fine. Ok, I would put a small webmaster link on the bottom of the site. And the "Get Instant Access \| Members Entrance \| Take the tour>>" text should be more in the middle of the page. I've scrolled the site down and didn't saw the buttons at the top anymore. (And I use a 18" flat screen monitor!) I never saw your old site, but the design looks I have already bookmarked your site.

10-12-2003, 02:53 AM	#12
media Confirmed Moneymaker Industry Role: Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Eugene, OR It's Like Jail, Only with Trees! Posts: 9,852	I would ditch the playboy logo, you are allowed to use the term "Playboy Playmate" if you were in fact one, but I dont think you have the legal right to use their servicemarked logo... So I would look into the legalities of that... Looks cool otherwise.. Media __________________ I'm here for the violence!

10-12-2003, 02:59 AM	#13
Neriah Davis Confirmed User Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Westsiiiiiiiide! Posts: 578	Thanks, you guys...I will tweak some stuff and add the webmaster link. __________________ First Class Playmate Content! Watch my Video!

10-12-2003, 03:19 AM	#14
prostock On probation Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: not telling you , the exwife might find me Posts: 4,160	i am just asking , does playboy know you have that there , hate to see a nice site get into some shit over that , you never know with those big boys , reather you worked there or not at one time i think i damn sure have it in writting that you can have that there ! just my __________________ ICQ # :158519717

10-12-2003, 03:34 AM	#15
RedShoe 赤い靴 call me 202-456-1111 Industry Role: Join Date: Feb 2001 Location: The Valley Posts: 14,831	She IS indeed a playmate. http://www.playboy.com/playmates/per...s/mystory.html __________________ SPECIALTY COSTUMES • PROPS • FX Superheroes • Monsters • Robots PM for details For any manufacturing needs. Adult or otherwise. aka BonsHigh on Insta Bonsai weed plants

10-12-2003, 04:19 AM	#17
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10-12-2003, 05:43 AM	#23
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10-12-2003, 06:10 AM	#24
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10-12-2003, 08:37 AM	#25
lightswitch Confirmed User Join Date: Feb 2001 Location: Butte, MT, USA Posts: 870	How come i have to search for pictures of you? Free content is the hook, & you dont have one. HIt me up if you need a web design guy.

10-12-2003, 10:06 AM	#26
Rochard Jägermeister Test Pilot Industry Role: Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: NORCAL Posts: 74,014	Your site is great and you are stunning. However..... I checked out your link and was hard pressed for a link to your tour. I think you need to make that stand out a bit more. __________________ “The choice is no longer between right or left. The choice is between normal and crazy.” - Sarah Huckabee Sanders YNOT MAIL \| THE BEST ADULT MAILING SOLUTION

10-12-2003, 10:30 AM	#27
Mutt Too lazy to set a custom title Industry Role: Join Date: Sep 2002 Posts: 34,431	who did the Photoshop work on the big image of you on the main page and join pages? You're a stunning woman, this pic looks like it was cut out of a magazine by a 10 year old with a pair of scissors. are you on a webcam? should be, not a big deal, once a week - there is a webcam ring for Playmates and other softcore glamour babes - your members will get free access to all the other girls' shows. should help alot with retention. not trying to hurt anybody's feelings who did that design but it's not great, i can see what they were going for and parts of it are nice but it needs some work. __________________ I moved my sites to Vacares Hosting. I've saved money, my hair is thicker, lost some weight too! Thanks Sly!

10-12-2003, 11:34 AM	#28
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10-12-2003, 11:37 AM	#30
infectd Confirmed User Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: Canerda Posts: 1,122	Fix the bunny head, Do some rollovers, Cut the body out right so it doesnt have lumps etc. Also add more content to the upper part of the page.

10-12-2003, 11:39 AM	#31
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10-12-2003, 11:41 AM	#32
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10-12-2003, 11:45 AM	#33
X37375787 Guest Posts: n/a	You're a gorgous woman. I would really suggest that you find yourself a professional designer that can clean up the site and the webmaster area. Looks a little too amateurish for a professional playmate like you are. Yum yum!

10-12-2003, 11:47 AM	#34
RockDaddy Confirmed User Join Date: Jul 2001 Posts: 750	On page two, every thumb is linked to your join page. I have not yet decided to join but am still looking to see what all I will get inside (as a surfer). Link the thumbs to a larger pic and tell me what I'm going to find of that girl after joining. Nice design, work more on the salesmanship.

10-12-2003, 01:55 PM	#35
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10-12-2003, 02:19 PM	#37
Penthouse_mike Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: Silicon Valley Posts: 317	Looks great! I would make a couple of minor changes. 1> The email collector should be much larger, and above all the other links at the bottom. 2> There is some dead space on the front page and the join page. Some good text would work there. List features of your site and show more pics of yourself in different outfits and hightlighting different parts of you: eyes, legs, behind... 3> Most single model sites don't have enough video content. They make up for it with weekly webcams, but a video sample and some text would help address surfer concerns that you only have a dozen series pics and a bunch of 'friends' pics. 4> Personally address the surfer. He joins because he is your fan. You appear to take an active part in your site. surfers value that. Let it show. 5> pop a console on exit. (I have a popup blocker, so I can't tell if you are doing this already.) oh... and happy Birthday!

10-12-2003, 04:03 PM	#38
Neriah Davis Confirmed User Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Westsiiiiiiiide! Posts: 578	Thanks you guys...and thanks for the birthday wishes too! I forwarded this link to my designer so he can read all your tips and make the proper adjustments. I really appreciate all the feedback from my fellow webmasters THANK YOU!!! __________________ First Class Playmate Content! Watch my Video!

10-12-2003, 04:08 PM	#39
MrIzzz If u touch it, I will cum Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: long island Posts: 22,923	nice site.............it would be better if you posted a pic on ur main page of you naked with a sign saying "I love MrIzzz" then again, u may lose alot of traffic __________________ WHO WANTS TO PLAY GRAB-ASS?

10-12-2003, 11:28 PM	#40
lexr Confirmed User Join Date: Jul 2003 Location: Tempe, AZ Posts: 428	Heh, a bit late, but Happy Birthday! __________________ Amateur content producer. Professional complainer. Sig space for rent!

10-12-2003, 11:30 PM	#41
brand0n been very busy Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: the queen city Posts: 26,983	more pics of you, less of all your friends, show some bush, or atleast hint around 2 it __________________ want to buy this spot for cheap? it is of course for sale. long term deals are always the best bet. brand0n/ at/ a o l dot commies.

10-13-2003, 01:48 AM	#43
Amputate Your Head There can be only one Industry Role: Join Date: Aug 2001 Location: Somewhere else Posts: 39,075	sorry to be the bringer of bad news, but the composition of that site is horrible. There are so many things wrong with it, I don't even know where to begin.... but let's try 1. It doesn't entice me to do anything except close the window. Without that, nothing else listed below matters, because no one will get that far. 2. Would definately check into the legality of using Playboy's gear. And if you do have the okay, I'm sure it probably doesn't include the mangled display of their emblem. 3. the code is sloppy and your exits don't work. 4. the site warning down at the bottom (that is copied directly from adult.com sites btw... ) is missing the 18 U.S.C. 2257 statement 5. the graphic work... the cutouts, the comp, the text work, the navigation, all of it... is just completely lacking any semblance of what would be considered "good" work. 6. the images in the thumbs on the tour pages are positively atrocious. My recommendation is, start completely over. __________________ SIG TOO BIG

10-13-2003, 01:50 AM	#44
footsex Confirmed User Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: NY Posts: 803	damn, you are HOT!

10-13-2003, 02:02 AM	#46
EvilDan So Fucking Banned Join Date: Sep 2001 Location: I like being Down Under Posts: 179	1) Your tour looks great 2) The versign link didnt pop up on your join page for me for some reason??? 3) You have AMEX on your billing system, and that worries me a little - AMEX doesnt accept porn last time I looked 4) YOu shoud offer a customer support link on your front page and join page 5) I live overseas, so on your webmaster page, make the video load after everything else has loaded - it made your page load very slowly 6) and when the codec did installl, it wouldnt play properly. You must consider overseas webmasters - so let them download the movie instead of streaming it (IMO) Hope that helped Evil Dan