English speaking people: Need some grammar help
 

My band has recorded a song, but we wonder if we have to change a sentence:

"the passport is in my trunk,
and as usual, my boss is almost drunk"

Is that a bad sentence that has to be changed?
Its hard to write lyrics in foreign laguages you know... :)

wtf? Noone who can help?

that's written perfectly man, no need for help

only thing i'd change is:

the passport is in my trunk

to

my passport is in the trunk

Ok thanks alot man!

What if it's not his passport? ;)

Looks good by me

"and as usual, my boss is fucking drunk"

where is the rest of the song? :upsidedow :pimp

you could cut this "and as usual, my boss is almost drunk" down to
"and my boss is always drunk"

this is cool :thumbsup

I think that I have the next verse for you. Let me know what you think and feel free to use it.

"My love for you is like a truck, Beserker!
Would you like to make some fuck, Beserker!
My love for you is ticking clock, Beserker!
Would you like to suck my cock, Beserker!"

good point

this place is fuckin' great!!

Post the mp3 for your song when you're done dude...

"the" passport is in my trunk
"the" is poetic artistic as "my" is direct deliverance

passport's in the trunk,
and yea, my boss is still drunk.

Where "still" can be "always", "almost", "fucked", "fucken'", or just...
and yea, my boss is stoned.

how about the passport is in my trunk
as well as my boss whos almost drunk...