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mmcfadden · 10-04-2009, 12:30 AM

What would you give it?

http://www.thirdpartyporn.com/conten...ustler3-7.html

Agent 488 · 10-04-2009, 12:31 AM

reads like it was written by some east indian.

mmcfadden · 10-04-2009, 12:33 AM

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Originally Posted by Agent 488

reads like it was written by some east indian.

ah... cmon... you didn't even read it you homo.

ProG · 10-04-2009, 12:36 AM

sorry I don't read pages with white text on a black background

mmcfadden · 10-04-2009, 12:40 AM

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Originally Posted by ProG

sorry I don't read pages with white text on a black background

in your professional opinion then... is black writing not as good as white writing?

mmcfadden · 10-04-2009, 12:41 AM

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Originally Posted by mmcfadden

in your professional opinion then... is black writing not as good as white writing?

hold da phone... reverse... white writing not as good as black writing

'mo · 10-04-2009, 12:42 AM

I wouldn't call that an article.

mmcfadden · 10-04-2009, 12:47 AM

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Originally Posted by 'mo

I wouldn't call that an article.

would ya give it an "A" for effort though?

mmcfadden · 10-04-2009, 12:47 AM

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Originally Posted by 'mo

I wouldn't call that an article.

btw... great new avatar

'mo · 10-04-2009, 12:56 AM

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Originally Posted by mmcfadden

would ya give it an "A" for effort though?

Sorry to be harsh here, but not really. What are you trying to do with it, or what is the purpose of it? Maybe that will help out a bit with judging it. I would call it more of a 'snippet' than an article. It was hard to read, and was rather boring.

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She's all spaced out and ready for good fucking and sucking.

To me spaced out implies fucked up, incoherent, and to me, the last thing an incoherent person can do is give a decent blow job. It doesn't sound sexy at all.

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Watch how Codi slowly realizes that even in space she can suck cock and get spunked by space cock in her cooter. This is actually one great set of Codi... one that I have never seen before.

Space cock? After seeing the picture, I kinda got it, but still, WTF is a space cock?

Cooter? Do people even use that word anymore aside from 12 year olds who say it then run and snicker?

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Codi has become a real superstar of Hot Porn Stars and it is my pleasure to write this little article about her.

A superstar of hot porn stars? What is that? Why not just call her a porn superstar, that would have sounded much better.

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I watched her grow and when I'm at an adult dvd store I see her face on covers like "the office... a XXX parody". To just think of her smoking hot body and now blonde hair and big tits making it this far... well gives me a willy.

A willy? That goes back to 12 year olds saying it and then snickering about it.

I dunno, again, sorry to be harsh, and I hope I help you a bit, and this wasn't some kind of GFY joke to get stupid responses. If you want to make it an article, make it one, include some facts about her, her measurements, what her favorite positions are, what her first porn gig was, what her last one was. Make it sound a little more sexy, and make it easier to read and something that people will want to read.

CunningStunt · 10-04-2009, 02:20 AM

It makes my eyes bleed. Please sack.

mmcfadden · 10-04-2009, 04:44 PM

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Originally Posted by 'mo

I dunno, again, sorry to be harsh, and I hope I help you a bit, and this wasn't some kind of GFY joke to get stupid responses. If you want to make it an article, make it one, include some facts about her, her measurements, what her favorite positions are, what her first porn gig was, what her last one was. Make it sound a little more sexy, and make it easier to read and something that people will want to read.

It's not harsh man... I'm not a writer and never intend to be one ;)

It's just my new site still in design and looking for comments... others will be writing the articles

mmcfadden · 10-04-2009, 04:45 PM

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It makes my eyes bleed. Please sack.

That will be passed on... thanks for the

J. Falcon · 10-04-2009, 07:41 PM

First of all that can hardly be called an article. It's a blog post at best.
Second, it's piratically unreadable. I agree with the guy who said it reads like it was written by an Indian.

On a scale of 1 - 10 I give it a 2

mmcfadden · 10-04-2009, 07:50 PM

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Originally Posted by J. Falcon

First of all that can hardly be called an article. It's a blog post at best.
Second, it's piratically unreadable. I agree with the guy who said it reads like it was written by an Indian.

On a scale of 1 - 10 I give it a 2

what does piratically unreadable mean?

also, please read the couple responses immediately above yours

katharos · 10-04-2009, 07:50 PM

i thought you are the sexy poker guy

congrats on the blog!

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