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Originally Posted by mmcfadden
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would ya give it an "A" for effort though?
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Sorry to be harsh here, but not really. What are you trying to do with it, or what is the purpose of it? Maybe that will help out a bit with judging it. I would call it more of a 'snippet' than an article. It was hard to read, and was rather boring.
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She's all spaced out and ready for good fucking and sucking.
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To me spaced out implies fucked up, incoherent, and to me, the last thing an incoherent person can do is give a decent blow job. It doesn't sound sexy at all.
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Watch how Codi slowly realizes that even in space she can suck cock and get spunked by space cock in her cooter. This is actually one great set of Codi... one that I have never seen before.
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Space cock? After seeing the picture, I kinda got it, but still, WTF is a space cock?
Cooter? Do people even use that word anymore aside from 12 year olds who say it then run and snicker?
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Codi has become a real superstar of Hot Porn Stars and it is my pleasure to write this little article about her.
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A superstar of hot porn stars? What is that? Why not just call her a porn superstar, that would have sounded much better.
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I watched her grow and when I'm at an adult dvd store I see her face on covers like "the office... a XXX parody". To just think of her smoking hot body and now blonde hair and big tits making it this far... well gives me a willy.
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A willy? That goes back to 12 year olds saying it and then snickering about it.
I dunno, again, sorry to be harsh, and I hope I help you a bit, and this wasn't some kind of GFY joke to get stupid responses. If you want to make it an article, make it one, include some facts about her, her measurements, what her favorite positions are, what her first porn gig was, what her last one was. Make it sound a little more sexy, and make it easier to read and something that people will want to read. :thumbsup |
