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Va2k · 04-08-2002, 04:06 PM

http://www.givenhead.com/test/

Let me know if ya see any fuck ups etc..... My spelling as ya all know sucks donkey nutz

04-08-2002, 04:08 PM

as i said before, the site looks as amateur as your models.

Va2k · 04-08-2002, 04:10 PM

W00H00 great thats what I was shooting for THANK MATE ya made my night

jimmyf · 04-08-2002, 04:20 PM

Looks good to me....But what do I know about design... Maybe 1 of the experts will give a look..

Va2k · 04-08-2002, 04:31 PM

Yea That is what Im hoping I have a guy that has HELPED me so much he has help with everything accecpt the design it self. He is the type of person That im asking for their help with. Also with newbies as well. As for rude comments Hell It don't bother me shit it use to when I first started a year ago But then I soon relized That if anyone had a life other then putting someone down then it would be a wonder. Thank you for your input bro And to anyone else that is willing to help GOOD OR BAD I personaly Like my amateurish look and amateurish modles as it has made me alot of money in the past. Right now Im redesinging all my sites and trying better ways instead of using tgp traffic. IM so burnt out on tgp it is sad Do you all think the colors are a good match? what about the short little stories?? Etc... and YES SPELLING since I know some of you are going to prolly down me for my grammer and spelling with this post hehe

THanks
TOM

Joe Blow · 04-08-2002, 04:34 PM

This board is very light on constructive criticism I've gotta say... too many mean spirited cunts.

"Instant Karma's gonna get ya"

Va2k · 04-08-2002, 04:36 PM

Now THAT right there made my nite Thank joe

Allison · 04-08-2002, 04:42 PM

I think there's a few nasty lookin' chicks that look like they're from the 80's that you might want to replace... just my

Gemini · 04-08-2002, 04:52 PM

Eq must have gotten lucky and his GF let him hold her hand again. He always gets this way when that happens.

Va2k · 04-08-2002, 04:53 PM

EEEK!!! Allison REALLY where Does anyone know where to get better plug in's Thats where im getting the thumbs from is one of my plugins I bought FUCK THAT if ya really think they are from the 80's I need to get a new plugin thanks

wannabeapornstar · 04-08-2002, 04:55 PM

I wouldnt sign up for this

bhutocracy · 04-08-2002, 04:56 PM

if i were you i wouldn't use that heading font.. but thats just me.. not a fan of capital serifs..
the main problem however is with your large blocks of text.. the text on the top left should probably be the second thig you read on the page as it's your positioning statement.. take it to the left hand side and pick the important words "exstacy" "cum swallowing" etc and make them a few point sizes larger than the reast of it.. just imagine you are telling somone and the size of the text is the emphasis you place on each word.. you're not giving the surfer a chance to scan something they like and read on.. they don't like reading blocks of text like that.. it makes them look at your images..

your main block in the middle needs to be broken apart.. and probably shortened a little... it's your call to action make it inviting.. make the first sentence larger than the rest and try to format it so it's not just a square of text...

chodadog · 04-08-2002, 04:57 PM

Hey man.. the design ain't great, but it's not that bad either. But the models.. i think you gotta do something about that.. They really do look amateurish. I'm not saying that in a mean way either. But i really do think you'd be better off with some higher quality content.

By the way, this just scares me..

Demonic cock sucker?

bhutocracy · 04-08-2002, 05:00 PM

heading should probably be italicised and a chunkier sans serif to give it the impression that GIVENHEAD isn't a past tense term.. as in he was given head.. more a verb - GIVEN'HEAD

bhutocracy · 04-08-2002, 05:01 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by chodadog
Hey man.. the design ain't great, but it's not that bad either. But the models.. i think you gotta do something about that.. They really do look amateurish. I'm not saying that in a mean way either. But i really do think you'd be better off with some higher quality content.

By the way, this just scares me..

Demonic cock sucker?

hehehe i wouldn't let that thing in the same state as my cock!

Va2k · 04-08-2002, 05:03 PM

hehe uh that pic is from the old gv site the one I asked was http://www.givenhead.com/test/ But thanks for looking thats all I ask and for pointing out bad spots:
bhutocracy if ya can hit me up on icq mate 128154888 If ya good with text and shit I'll make it worth ya time $$ wise THanks

TOM

spacedog · 04-08-2002, 05:04 PM

@ http://www.givenhead.com/test/tour.htm
you have infront.. should be in front

suggestion..

there's inconsistency with your title logo.. the 1st & 2nd page match each other, but then the 3rd & 4th are thrown off & a bit more transparent & don't match each other..
also.. same applies to the tour splash borders & the text.. make them consistent & uniform throughout the tour so that they all match.. make them all match the first page..

the flashing text over the pictures on this page http://www.givenhead.com/test/tour1.htm
match the other text.. My suggestion is to make it a different color to avoid blending & make it more attention grabbing..

also.. the join button is a animated gif on 1st & last page.. might want to use that on all pages...

overall, it looks ok & decent.. but your server don't load so fast.. I am on cable connection & the splash logos don't load so quick & I see the individual slices loading.. perhaps you may want to shrink down the file sizes to speed up loading or look into better hosting..

Good luck with it Tom..

jojojo · 04-08-2002, 05:07 PM

Perhaps you should use LIVE models (I mean alive)

That chicks eyes are rolled back in her head...

NoCarrier · 04-08-2002, 06:20 PM

The thing is, what do you want to achieve with your site? It looks amateur but it's a cumshot site. Is it supposed to be an amateur cumshots site? LOL.

Seriously, If you've done the design yourself, you're better than me. I suck at designing

but I will be honest with you. With all the competition out there with professional cumshots site, I wouldn't join yours. It looks too "amateurish".

If I was a surfer, i'd look elsewhere.. Well, at least fix the text in the buttons, they are not centered

Also, the text at http://www.givenhead.com/test/tour2.htm is really bad. Really bad. You should take a look at another site to give you ideas. Think of something really nasty and exciting. This text made me want to visit my grandma and have a cup of tea with her instead of joining your site.

Oh, well, good luck with your site.

My

sinmaster · 04-08-2002, 09:25 PM

I'd be up for some of the exit traffic myself

Let me know.

Va2k · 04-08-2002, 10:42 PM

ok ok ok thats why i asked hehe im redoing it http://www.givenhead.com/true/

<shrugs> Try to take my time this time hehe

FATPad · 04-08-2002, 10:45 PM

hehe. I feel for ya, man. I gotta do my own tours, too.

Va2k · 04-08-2002, 10:46 PM

hehe it's a bitch aint it hehe If It wasnt for my kids I would hire someone to do it and just push more traffic

04-08-2002, 04:06 PM	#1
Va2k I’m still alive barley. Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Va Posts: 10,060	What you think about givenhead http://www.givenhead.com/test/ Let me know if ya see any fuck ups etc..... My spelling as ya all know sucks donkey nutz __________________

04-08-2002, 04:10 PM	#3
Va2k I’m still alive barley. Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Va Posts: 10,060	W00H00 great thats what I was shooting for THANK MATE ya made my night __________________

04-08-2002, 04:20 PM	#4
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04-08-2002, 04:31 PM	#5
Va2k I’m still alive barley. Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Va Posts: 10,060	Yea That is what Im hoping I have a guy that has HELPED me so much he has help with everything accecpt the design it self. He is the type of person That im asking for their help with. Also with newbies as well. As for rude comments Hell It don't bother me shit it use to when I first started a year ago But then I soon relized That if anyone had a life other then putting someone down then it would be a wonder. Thank you for your input bro And to anyone else that is willing to help GOOD OR BAD I personaly Like my amateurish look and amateurish modles as it has made me alot of money in the past. Right now Im redesinging all my sites and trying better ways instead of using tgp traffic. IM so burnt out on tgp it is sad Do you all think the colors are a good match? what about the short little stories?? Etc... and YES SPELLING since I know some of you are going to prolly down me for my grammer and spelling with this post hehe THanks TOM __________________

04-08-2002, 04:34 PM	#6
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04-08-2002, 04:08 PM	#2
X37375787 Guest Posts: n/a	as i said before, the site looks as amateur as your models.

04-08-2002, 04:36 PM	#7
Va2k I’m still alive barley. Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Va Posts: 10,060	Now THAT right there made my nite Thank joe __________________

04-08-2002, 04:42 PM	#8
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04-08-2002, 04:52 PM	#9
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04-08-2002, 04:53 PM	#10
Va2k I’m still alive barley. Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Va Posts: 10,060	EEEK!!! Allison REALLY where Does anyone know where to get better plug in's Thats where im getting the thumbs from is one of my plugins I bought FUCK THAT if ya really think they are from the 80's I need to get a new plugin thanks __________________

04-08-2002, 04:55 PM	#11
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04-08-2002, 04:56 PM	#12
bhutocracy Not making A Comeback Industry Role: Join Date: Dec 2001 Posts: 10,218	if i were you i wouldn't use that heading font.. but thats just me.. not a fan of capital serifs.. the main problem however is with your large blocks of text.. the text on the top left should probably be the second thig you read on the page as it's your positioning statement.. take it to the left hand side and pick the important words "exstacy" "cum swallowing" etc and make them a few point sizes larger than the reast of it.. just imagine you are telling somone and the size of the text is the emphasis you place on each word.. you're not giving the surfer a chance to scan something they like and read on.. they don't like reading blocks of text like that.. it makes them look at your images.. your main block in the middle needs to be broken apart.. and probably shortened a little... it's your call to action make it inviting.. make the first sentence larger than the rest and try to format it so it's not just a square of text...

04-08-2002, 04:57 PM	#13
chodadog Confirmed User Join Date: Apr 2002 Posts: 9,736	Hey man.. the design ain't great, but it's not that bad either. But the models.. i think you gotta do something about that.. They really do look amateurish. I'm not saying that in a mean way either. But i really do think you'd be better off with some higher quality content. By the way, this just scares me.. Demonic cock sucker?

04-08-2002, 05:00 PM	#14
bhutocracy Not making A Comeback Industry Role: Join Date: Dec 2001 Posts: 10,218	heading should probably be italicised and a chunkier sans serif to give it the impression that GIVENHEAD isn't a past tense term.. as in he was given head.. more a verb - GIVEN'HEAD

04-08-2002, 05:03 PM	#16
Va2k I’m still alive barley. Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Va Posts: 10,060	hehe uh that pic is from the old gv site the one I asked was http://www.givenhead.com/test/ But thanks for looking thats all I ask and for pointing out bad spots: bhutocracy if ya can hit me up on icq mate 128154888 If ya good with text and shit I'll make it worth ya time $$ wise THanks TOM __________________

04-08-2002, 05:04 PM	#17
spacedog Yes that IS me. Bitch. Industry Role: Join Date: Nov 2001 Posts: 14,149	@ http://www.givenhead.com/test/tour.htm you have infront.. should be in front suggestion.. there's inconsistency with your title logo.. the 1st & 2nd page match each other, but then the 3rd & 4th are thrown off & a bit more transparent & don't match each other.. also.. same applies to the tour splash borders & the text.. make them consistent & uniform throughout the tour so that they all match.. make them all match the first page.. the flashing text over the pictures on this page http://www.givenhead.com/test/tour1.htm match the other text.. My suggestion is to make it a different color to avoid blending & make it more attention grabbing.. also.. the join button is a animated gif on 1st & last page.. might want to use that on all pages... overall, it looks ok & decent.. but your server don't load so fast.. I am on cable connection & the splash logos don't load so quick & I see the individual slices loading.. perhaps you may want to shrink down the file sizes to speed up loading or look into better hosting.. Good luck with it Tom..

04-08-2002, 05:07 PM	#18
jojojo Too lazy to set a custom title Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Vancouver, BC Posts: 2,318	Perhaps you should use LIVE models (I mean alive) That chicks eyes are rolled back in her head...

04-08-2002, 06:20 PM	#19
NoCarrier We need more free porn Join Date: Mar 2002 Location: Montreal Posts: 16,356	The thing is, what do you want to achieve with your site? It looks amateur but it's a cumshot site. Is it supposed to be an amateur cumshots site? LOL. Seriously, If you've done the design yourself, you're better than me. I suck at designing but I will be honest with you. With all the competition out there with professional cumshots site, I wouldn't join yours. It looks too "amateurish". If I was a surfer, i'd look elsewhere.. Well, at least fix the text in the buttons, they are not centered Also, the text at http://www.givenhead.com/test/tour2.htm is really bad. Really bad. You should take a look at another site to give you ideas. Think of something really nasty and exciting. This text made me want to visit my grandma and have a cup of tea with her instead of joining your site. Oh, well, good luck with your site. My Last edited by NoCarrier; 04-08-2002 at 06:25 PM..

04-08-2002, 09:25 PM	#20
sinmaster Confirmed User Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: Oregon Posts: 376	I'd be up for some of the exit traffic myself Let me know. __________________

04-08-2002, 10:42 PM	#21
Va2k I’m still alive barley. Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Va Posts: 10,060	ok ok ok thats why i asked hehe im redoing it http://www.givenhead.com/true/ <shrugs> Try to take my time this time hehe __________________

04-08-2002, 10:45 PM	#22
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04-08-2002, 10:46 PM	#23
Va2k I’m still alive barley. Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: Va Posts: 10,060	hehe it's a bitch aint it hehe If It wasnt for my kids I would hire someone to do it and just push more traffic __________________