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zdwebber · 08-31-2004, 03:34 AM

working on the design for http://www.jamiepeterson.com
I have come up with
http://www.hqbang.com/dm/jp/index.php

just the main page and tour page done for now.
still need to make a couple changes.

what do you think?

Shoehorn! · 08-31-2004, 03:39 AM

Looks pretty good.

r0nin · 08-31-2004, 03:45 AM

hey bro, i like the style, looks good for the kind of site

just a few points:

.less bevel on the fonts would make 'em "more readable" and more pleasant to the eye

.also white on that very light blue makes the text kinda hard to read

.the top picture of the girl, maybe sharpen it a bit, and it looks it has another layer overlayed or something like that, kinda saturated and with too much contrast

overall it looks quite good

zdwebber · 08-31-2004, 03:50 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by r0nin
hey bro, i like the style, looks good for the kind of site

just a few points:

.less bevel on the fonts would make 'em "more readable" and more pleasant to the eye

.also white on that very light blue makes the text kinda hard to read

.the top picture of the girl, maybe sharpen it a bit, and it looks it has another layer overlayed or something like that, kinda saturated and with too much contrast

overall it looks quite good

Thanks for the advice

I have noticed the ehite text is hard to read, but really no other text color looks good/is readable with that background, so I'm going to be changing the bg colors pretty soon.

The bevel on the logo looks ok I think, but I think because the same effects we're applied to a smaller font, the problem arose with it being over-beveled, so I will be chnaging that soon

I'm pretty knew to 'optimizing' i.e. 'glamourizing' photos so that is the best I could come up with for that girl. All I use is noise > median and blurred overlays and soft lights, so I need to work on that. I changed the pic already though

Let me upload it to see what you think of it..

Thanks again

zdwebber · 08-31-2004, 03:53 AM

what about
http://www.hqbang.com/dm/jp/images/top2.html
?

Shoehorn! · 08-31-2004, 03:55 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by zdwebber
what about
http://www.hqbang.com/dm/jp/images/top2.html
?

The picture on the left isn't all that flattering. She looked hotter on the first link.

Corleone · 08-31-2004, 03:56 AM

Looks cool mate!

r0nin · 08-31-2004, 04:03 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by TheSmutPeddlerDOTcom
The picture on the left isn't all that flattering. She looked hotter on the first link.

i agree with ya man

zdwebber,

check here bro: http://www.good-tutorials.com/tutori...list=1&view=50

zdwebber · 08-31-2004, 04:13 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by r0nin
i agree with ya man

zdwebber,

check here bro: http://www.good-tutorials.com/tutori...list=1&view=50

Thanks

Been there over and over again though, pretty much every site withen the first couple pages of the SERPS for "photoshop tutorials".

Appreciate the help though

blazi · 08-31-2004, 04:14 AM

very nice design, and loads quick - I like it!

abyss_al · 08-31-2004, 04:19 AM

very nice...only thing i dont like is the face on the top left side

h2ohjosh · 08-31-2004, 08:48 AM

Looks nice and clean. My only comment would again, be the text legibility. Reduce the bevel, and consider scratching the script font.

jawanda · 08-31-2004, 09:16 AM

Looks really nice, ZD. I will join the club who doesn't like that top left face pic though.

It's not the retouching, I think you just need to find a better pic of her to use in that spot .... she's a gorgeous girl, shouldn't be to difficult.

Besides that, underneath "take my free tour" on the right, you have "mebers" instead of "members".

Good work man.

-Phil

CyberBachelor · 08-31-2004, 09:20 AM

Really nice design... I like the colors, but they are right; that white text is hard to read... especially the non-bold letters...

Excellent overall though...

kmanrox · 08-31-2004, 09:24 AM

Good site... But instead of so many face shots you should showcase her other strong points... Show something to the ass lovers, the leg lovers, the boob lovers... Tempt them ALL and you'll be making good use of your real estate and see better conversions.

When you have an affiliate program and the site live, hit me up with access to your members area and a URL to the affiliate site and I'll have a professional reviewer critique it and post it on my paysite review site.

Send me an email with the pertinent info to reviews at smutrater.com

=)

zdwebber · 08-31-2004, 11:30 AM

this is great, really learning things here
thanks for all the critiques so far guys

johnbosh · 08-31-2004, 11:31 AM

hite text above the bold is a little difficult to read

zdwebber · 08-31-2004, 11:50 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by johnbosh
hite text above the bold is a little difficult to read

in the process of changing some bg colors now

thanks for the advice

08-31-2004, 03:34 AM	#1
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08-31-2004, 03:39 AM	#2
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08-31-2004, 04:14 AM	#10
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08-31-2004, 04:19 AM	#11
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08-31-2004, 08:48 AM	#12
h2ohjosh Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Delray Beach, FL Posts: 43	Looks nice and clean. My only comment would again, be the text legibility. Reduce the bevel, and consider scratching the script font. __________________ SIG TOO BIG! Maximum 120x60 button and no more than 3 text lines of DEFAULT SIZE and COLOR. Unless your sig is for a GFY top banner sponsor, then you may use a 624x80 instead of a 120x60.

08-31-2004, 03:45 AM	#3
r0nin Confirmed User Join Date: Mar 2004 Posts: 415	hey bro, i like the style, looks good for the kind of site just a few points: .less bevel on the fonts would make 'em "more readable" and more pleasant to the eye .also white on that very light blue makes the text kinda hard to read .the top picture of the girl, maybe sharpen it a bit, and it looks it has another layer overlayed or something like that, kinda saturated and with too much contrast overall it looks quite good

08-31-2004, 03:53 AM	#5
zdwebber So Fucking Banned Join Date: Feb 2004 Location: Hit me up @ 97400700 . If your looking for traffic trades, head over to HQBang.com. If your looking for a place to submit, head there as well. If you have a vaginal opening and are looking for insertion, please contact me asap. BANG!!! Posts: 768	what about http://www.hqbang.com/dm/jp/images/top2.html ?

08-31-2004, 03:56 AM	#7
Corleone C.R.E.A.M Industry Role: Join Date: Apr 2003 Posts: 15,262	Looks cool mate!

08-31-2004, 09:16 AM	#13
jawanda Confirmed User Join Date: Feb 2003 Posts: 6,040	Looks really nice, ZD. I will join the club who doesn't like that top left face pic though. It's not the retouching, I think you just need to find a better pic of her to use in that spot .... she's a gorgeous girl, shouldn't be to difficult. Besides that, underneath "take my free tour" on the right, you have "mebers" instead of "members". Good work man. -Phil

08-31-2004, 09:20 AM	#14
CyberBachelor Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 2,682	Really nice design... I like the colors, but they are right; that white text is hard to read... especially the non-bold letters... Excellent overall though... __________________ .....................................

08-31-2004, 09:24 AM	#15
kmanrox aka K-Man Industry Role: Join Date: Oct 2001 Location: The Gutter Posts: 29,292	Good site... But instead of so many face shots you should showcase her other strong points... Show something to the ass lovers, the leg lovers, the boob lovers... Tempt them ALL and you'll be making good use of your real estate and see better conversions. When you have an affiliate program and the site live, hit me up with access to your members area and a URL to the affiliate site and I'll have a professional reviewer critique it and post it on my paysite review site. Send me an email with the pertinent info to reviews at smutrater.com =) __________________ Crypto HODLr Crypto mining Angel investor

08-31-2004, 11:30 AM	#16
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08-31-2004, 11:31 AM	#17
johnbosh Confirmed User Join Date: Aug 2002 Location: The Netherlands, Rotterdam Posts: 8,965	hite text above the bold is a little difficult to read