Rip on my first gallery please. - GoFuckYourself.com

jmarzlak · 03-22-2004, 01:49 PM

Ok so this is my first attempt at a gallery. Help me out by making fun of it, I know you guys are good at it.

http://www.jmporn.com/teenkelly/01/

And for the braces thing I am always reading that niches work and a couple of my friends love girls with braces, its sick I know. Leave that at the top or change it to some teen kelly something or other?

ps. its off center I a little I know, I did it late last night and kinda threw it together as you can tell. Let the flames begin.

AlienQ - BANNED FOR LIFE · 03-22-2004, 01:53 PM

Lace · 03-22-2004, 01:54 PM

Need a different top logo.

-=HOAX=- · 03-22-2004, 01:55 PM

Well if your niche is braces, then your content should be....err....braces.

There is one clear pic of her braces. One.

Match the content to the niche, the message to the content, and the sponsor to the message.

The only thing that even mentions braces is the header. The ad text(message) is all teen, the content is teen. And, sure shit...the sponsor is teen. The braces crap simply confuses the surfer, but its not designed well enough to grab attention anyway.

Never distract your surfer from the "Task at Hand".

Back the drawing board pissnozzle.

TheSenator · 03-22-2004, 02:02 PM

not bad....not great....but will convert....

You should try different sponsors too....diversify your portfolio...

jhauser · 03-22-2004, 02:07 PM

The instant access is huge.. Honestly I was thinking more close ups with braces around a large penis... Just my 2 cents.

jmarzlak · 03-22-2004, 02:30 PM

ok I think I'm gonna change the top part to "teen kelly"

Babagirls · 03-22-2004, 02:33 PM

too much text in the middle (write a sentence, not a life story.)

get other teaser pics-lookin a girl by the pool in the bikini doesnt make me wanna see more. you can see that on a beach.

also, change "INSTANT ACCESS" to something more attractive, like "SEE HER NAKED NOW!" or something.

"INSTANT ACCESS" to surfers mean "click her to pay me"

jmarzlak · 03-22-2004, 02:46 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Babagirls
too much text in the middle (write a sentence, not a life story.)

get other teaser pics-lookin a girl by the pool in the bikini doesnt make me wanna see more. you can see that on a beach.

also, change "INSTANT ACCESS" to something more attractive, like "SEE HER NAKED NOW!" or something.

"INSTANT ACCESS" to surfers mean "click her to pay me"

ok makes

thanks

03-22-2004, 01:49 PM	#1
jmarzlak Confirmed User Join Date: Jan 2004 Posts: 632	Rip on my first gallery please. Ok so this is my first attempt at a gallery. Help me out by making fun of it, I know you guys are good at it. http://www.jmporn.com/teenkelly/01/ And for the braces thing I am always reading that niches work and a couple of my friends love girls with braces, its sick I know. Leave that at the top or change it to some teen kelly something or other? ps. its off center I a little I know, I did it late last night and kinda threw it together as you can tell. Let the flames begin. __________________ Promote Nikki and Teen Kelly

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-=HOAX=- Confirmed User Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: CrackYaMental Posts: 4,365	Well if your niche is braces, then your content should be....err....braces. There is one clear pic of her braces. One. Match the content to the niche, the message to the content, and the sponsor to the message. The only thing that even mentions braces is the header. The ad text(message) is all teen, the content is teen. And, sure shit...the sponsor is teen. The braces crap simply confuses the surfer, but its not designed well enough to grab attention anyway. Never distract your surfer from the "Task at Hand". Back the drawing board pissnozzle. __________________ Insert Value Here.

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Babagirls Text Writer Join Date: Feb 2001 Location: Wisconsin Posts: 18,812	too much text in the middle (write a sentence, not a life story.) get other teaser pics-lookin a girl by the pool in the bikini doesnt make me wanna see more. you can see that on a beach. also, change "INSTANT ACCESS" to something more attractive, like "SEE HER NAKED NOW!" or something. "INSTANT ACCESS" to surfers mean "click her to pay me" __________________ Need a Text Writer? Blogs\|Reviews\|Descriptions\|Paysites\|TGP's\|Stories ICQ: 397892500