Here's a rough draft of the new rap track I'm making.. cop it - GoFuckYourself.com

Pad · 11-28-2003, 12:49 PM

lemme know what you think

http://facedeath.port5.com/pad%20-%20ill%20rhymes.mp3

pad - ill rhymes.mp3 <- download

JSA Matt · 11-28-2003, 01:05 PM

Give up now...

Dirty F · 11-28-2003, 01:10 PM

Dude, i fall asleep if i listen to that.

Get some anger and energy in there.

Pad · 11-28-2003, 01:27 PM

rough draft means rough draft scumbags

Dirty F · 11-28-2003, 01:28 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Pad
rough draft means rough draft scumbags

You ask for comments but if they are negative you get pissed off?

Wrong board to post this shit dude if you cant handle comments.

okny · 11-28-2003, 01:30 PM

And where you from again? You should go back into the studio

axelcat · 11-28-2003, 01:31 PM

It was ok

Hindsight · 11-28-2003, 01:41 PM

Dude, i wouldnt worry about all the hatin you're gonna get here. I think I know what I'm talkin' about and I'd say you got some nice skillz there. At a guess I'd say this is your first audio and you've been spending more time writing. Your lyrics are quite slick, good use of multies for sure, but if you're gonna go with this style you need to aim for more funny shit..

My suggestion would be to drop the pen and paper for 3 months and go hit up some clubs on open mic, get used to freestyle battling and work hard on ur delivery - which to be blunt currently fucking sucks - try spitting whilst high , it'll help you come with a more 'i dont gve a fuck' vibe. You need a fuckload more enthusiasm and I think it sounds like you need to learn your lyrics better.. it sounds like you're straining to spit them properly, too much concentration. Just go over and over and over it again, learning when to breathe, when to use 'rubber bouncy lips' and when to come from further back your throat.

I also think the beat sucks for your rhyme, it's way too Slim Shady of 3 years ago.. stop being a wannabe and work on your own style.

You def got writing skillz, just put a fuckload of effort into yor delievery. Freestyle battlin will really elevate ur aggression.

Keep goin' though dude, it's about wanting it bad enough.

tranza · 11-28-2003, 02:10 PM

I can't understand half of what you're saying because your voice is just to low! Try making it louder and speeding up the beat a little and you might have something...

I liked it after all!

ThePornPusher · 11-28-2003, 02:16 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by Pad
lemme know what you think

http://facedeath.port5.com/pad%20-%20ill%20rhymes.mp3

pad - ill rhymes.mp3 <- download

I think you should make some money and buy some hosting, instead of rapping.

Hue G. Pness · 11-28-2003, 02:17 PM

Quote:

Originally posted by ThePornPusher

I think you should make some money and buy some hosting, instead of rapping.

LOL

11-28-2003, 12:49 PM	#1
Pad elephants dont swat flies Industry Role: Join Date: Aug 2003 Posts: 1,262	Here's a rough draft of the new rap track I'm making.. cop it lemme know what you think http://facedeath.port5.com/pad%20-%20ill%20rhymes.mp3 pad - ill rhymes.mp3 <- download __________________

11-28-2003, 01:27 PM	#4
Pad elephants dont swat flies Industry Role: Join Date: Aug 2003 Posts: 1,262	rough draft means rough draft scumbags __________________

11-28-2003, 01:30 PM	#6
okny Confirmed User Join Date: Aug 2002 Location: The Vault Posts: 5,761	And where you from again? You should go back into the studio __________________ Aim: okny Icq: 306232 Skype: OlegKrasBT

11-28-2003, 02:10 PM	#9
tranza ICQ: 197-556-237 Join Date: Jun 2003 Location: BRASIL !!! Posts: 57,559	I can't understand half of what you're saying because your voice is just to low! Try making it louder and speeding up the beat a little and you might have something... I liked it after all! __________________ I'm just a newbie.

11-28-2003, 01:05 PM	#2
JSA Matt So Fucking Banned Join Date: Aug 2003 Location: San Diego, CA Posts: 5,464	Give up now...

11-28-2003, 01:10 PM	#3
Dirty F Too lazy to set a custom title Industry Role: Join Date: Jul 2001 Posts: 59,204	Dude, i fall asleep if i listen to that. Get some anger and energy in there.

11-28-2003, 01:31 PM	#7
axelcat Adult Locals Join Date: Jun 2002 Location: West Coast Posts: 25,450	It was ok

11-28-2003, 01:41 PM	#8
Hindsight Confirmed User Join Date: Oct 2003 Location: Perugia, Italy - Often in Exeter, England Posts: 815	Dude, i wouldnt worry about all the hatin you're gonna get here. I think I know what I'm talkin' about and I'd say you got some nice skillz there. At a guess I'd say this is your first audio and you've been spending more time writing. Your lyrics are quite slick, good use of multies for sure, but if you're gonna go with this style you need to aim for more funny shit.. My suggestion would be to drop the pen and paper for 3 months and go hit up some clubs on open mic, get used to freestyle battling and work hard on ur delivery - which to be blunt currently fucking sucks - try spitting whilst high , it'll help you come with a more 'i dont gve a fuck' vibe. You need a fuckload more enthusiasm and I think it sounds like you need to learn your lyrics better.. it sounds like you're straining to spit them properly, too much concentration. Just go over and over and over it again, learning when to breathe, when to use 'rubber bouncy lips' and when to come from further back your throat. I also think the beat sucks for your rhyme, it's way too Slim Shady of 3 years ago.. stop being a wannabe and work on your own style. You def got writing skillz, just put a fuckload of effort into yor delievery. Freestyle battlin will really elevate ur aggression. Keep goin' though dude, it's about wanting it bad enough.