My First Design -- PLEASE CRITIQUE - GoFuckYourself.com

optikalz · 10-20-2003, 01:30 AM

Need your help. I did my first design and need some feedback re design/layout whatever. Im trying to design my own byots and avs sites. Any help would be GREATLY appreciated.

here's the url:

http://gothsexworld.com/sample1/

there's only 1 page, I'll redo the whole tour architecture based on your feedback.

MetaMan · 10-20-2003, 01:31 AM

u need ALOT of font work and ALOT of everything else.

optikalz · 10-20-2003, 01:32 AM

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Originally posted by MetaMan
u need ALOT of font work and ALOT of everything else.

Please explain. Where do I get font packs?

Fonz · 10-20-2003, 01:34 AM

The fonts with the rough edges hurt my eyes a little, try making them more cleaner

optikalz · 10-20-2003, 01:36 AM

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Originally posted by Fonz
The fonts with the rough edges hurt my eyes a little, try making them more cleaner

how do I smooth them out? Like I said, this is my first design, im kinda rusty with photoshop but am building pages for my own purposes.

optikalz · 10-20-2003, 01:45 AM

Any help?

jovigirl · 10-20-2003, 01:57 AM

Besides fixing fonts:
#1 - Correct brightness / light
#2 - Do not split the page into so many images
#3 - Put something clickable at the bottom
#4 - Use fireworks

TheViper · 10-20-2003, 02:00 AM

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Originally posted by jovigirl
#4 - Use fireworks

Maybe he can work better with photoshop, who knows :D

Why · 10-20-2003, 02:02 AM

photoshop eats fireworks alive.

theS2O · 10-20-2003, 02:03 AM

try to explore photoshop's help option... lots of tutorials there that will help you improve your site.

gudluck

vapewiz · 10-20-2003, 02:04 AM

The main guy your using is by no means a twink to start. Also the fonts, colors, etc are all just not that good. Sorry man but this needs a ot of work.

JamesK · 10-20-2003, 02:07 AM

that design sucks badly

ever heard of anti-alias?

xenigo · 10-20-2003, 02:10 AM

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Originally posted by cutetwink
The main guy your using is by no means a twink to start. Also the fonts, colors, etc are all just not that good. Sorry man but this needs a ot of work.

Yeah, definitely NOT a twink. Here's a twink.

DatingGold · 10-20-2003, 02:11 AM

not very good.. I need to throw up now..

Krusty · 10-20-2003, 02:13 AM

the background's pretty dodgy too!

Hamlet · 10-20-2003, 02:14 AM

For a first design its not that bad at all - you have chosen a model that has nice eye contact and your text is clear and to the point. However, overall the design is too dull in colour and contrast. The pure red does not seem to work with the browns; and the green/red gradient on the button text is doesn't work well either. (Text that small should only have a very sublte gradient if any at all).

Poo-Chee · 10-20-2003, 02:14 AM

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Originally posted by DatingGold
not very good.. I need to throw up now..

Same here..

jovigirl · 10-20-2003, 02:16 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by TheViper

Maybe he can work better with photoshop, who knows :D

Like I said, this is my first design, im kinda rusty with photoshop

--> Fireworks is more user friendly for a noob.

Krusty · 10-20-2003, 02:16 AM

but seriously man, rethink all of your colour choices, choose a twink looking guy, as hamlet said, the eye contact's a good idea... but the colours are very dull!

AlienQ - BANNED FOR LIFE · 10-20-2003, 02:26 AM

Keep trying man, it takes a while.

Practice study, practice more study. If its your first, congratualtions you have arrived to a much bigger road ahead.

Study design and understand principals of commercial design. There is alot to it all and on the net every pixel counts.

Keep practicing though, you will get better. 1/4 the battle to becomming a designer is deciding to pick up a design environment and actually begin somthing.

Seb From Holland · 10-20-2003, 03:15 AM

anti-alias is your friend!

Seb From Holland · 10-20-2003, 03:16 AM

and try to find more matching colors in your color scheme. The red and green and yellow combo isn't that easy to the eye.

iroc409 · 10-20-2003, 03:28 AM

the images are WAY, WAY too chopped up. don't use that many at all.

optikalz · 10-20-2003, 03:33 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Seb From Holland
anti-alias is your friend!

thanks for the tips guys, I appreciate it. Im still learning.

cheekycherry · 10-20-2003, 03:44 AM

this thread should have a disclaimer on it... you've ruined my dinner.

skillfull · 10-20-2003, 03:52 AM

this thread is gay, im just fucking waking up bastards

Peacemaker · 10-20-2003, 03:53 AM

the background is terrible.. change it to a "single color" and not those "raster bars"..

Zayne E. · 10-20-2003, 04:46 AM

For a first effort, it's not bad at all. You need to read the positive critiques in this post and throw out the harsh criticism. Then just bear down and work hard at it...you'll do great.

optikalz · 10-20-2003, 05:25 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Zayne E.
For a first effort, it's not bad at all. You need to read the positive critiques in this post and throw out the harsh criticism. Then just bear down and work hard at it...you'll do great.

Thanks, Zayne. I appreciate it.

optikalz · 10-20-2003, 05:26 AM

For those who posted positive feedback, thanks.

Here's what I have so far:

1) choose differing colors

2) choose a twink model

3) antialias the lettering

4) fine/high quality compression

5) buy a font pack with more diverse fonts

anyone else?

Swanks · 10-20-2003, 06:37 AM

NOt bad for your first design.

iroc409 · 10-20-2003, 06:54 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by linkyd
For those who posted positive feedback, thanks.

Here's what I have so far:

1) choose differing colors

2) choose a twink model

3) antialias the lettering

4) fine/high quality compression

5) buy a font pack with more diverse fonts

anyone else?

as stated earlier, don't cut up the page so much. makes the page load very slow and looks funny.

Milena Dickman · 10-20-2003, 07:02 AM

Not bad at all for your first design, Lynkd!

But it will take a lot of work and study to make a good design. Don´t give up, and you will get there.

But if you don´t, check out www.dickmansdesign.com. We can make you a terrific design!

Kisses!

Milena

optikalz · 10-20-2003, 07:05 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Milena Dickman
Not bad at all for your first design, Lynkd!

But it will take a lot of work and study to make a good design. Don´t give up, and you will get there.

But if you don´t, check out www.dickmansdesign.com. We can make you a terrific design!

Kisses!

Milena

hehehe thanks but I'll keep learning.

lock · 10-20-2003, 07:38 AM

just keep surfing sites you will get more of an idea as you go.

10-20-2003, 01:57 AM	#7
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Hamlet Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2002 Posts: 702	For a first design its not that bad at all - you have chosen a model that has nice eye contact and your text is clear and to the point. However, overall the design is too dull in colour and contrast. The pure red does not seem to work with the browns; and the green/red gradient on the button text is doesn't work well either. (Text that small should only have a very sublte gradient if any at all). __________________

10-20-2003, 01:30 AM	#1
optikalz Confirmed User Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: Lost Angelez Posts: 555	My First Design -- PLEASE CRITIQUE Need your help. I did my first design and need some feedback re design/layout whatever. Im trying to design my own byots and avs sites. Any help would be GREATLY appreciated. here's the url: http://gothsexworld.com/sample1/ there's only 1 page, I'll redo the whole tour architecture based on your feedback.

10-20-2003, 01:31 AM	#2
MetaMan I AM WEB 2.0 Industry Role: Join Date: Jan 2003 Posts: 28,682	u need ALOT of font work and ALOT of everything else.

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optikalz Confirmed User Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: Lost Angelez Posts: 555	Any help?

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Why MFBA Industry Role: Join Date: Mar 2003 Location: PNW Posts: 7,230	photoshop eats fireworks alive.

10-20-2003, 02:04 AM	#11
vapewiz Confirmed User Join Date: Nov 2002 Location: Michigan Posts: 1,530	The main guy your using is by no means a twink to start. Also the fonts, colors, etc are all just not that good. Sorry man but this needs a ot of work.

10-20-2003, 02:13 AM	#15
Krusty Registered User Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: New Zealand (Aussie living in NZ) Posts: 374	the background's pretty dodgy too!

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Krusty Registered User Join Date: Dec 2002 Location: New Zealand (Aussie living in NZ) Posts: 374	but seriously man, rethink all of your colour choices, choose a twink looking guy, as hamlet said, the eye contact's a good idea... but the colours are very dull!

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10-20-2003, 03:15 AM	#21
Seb From Holland Confirmed User Join Date: May 2002 Location: The Netherlands Posts: 2,747	anti-alias is your friend!

10-20-2003, 03:16 AM	#22
Seb From Holland Confirmed User Join Date: May 2002 Location: The Netherlands Posts: 2,747	and try to find more matching colors in your color scheme. The red and green and yellow combo isn't that easy to the eye.

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Zayne E. Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Apr 2002 Posts: 1,383	For a first effort, it's not bad at all. You need to read the positive critiques in this post and throw out the harsh criticism. Then just bear down and work hard at it...you'll do great.

10-20-2003, 05:26 AM	#30
optikalz Confirmed User Join Date: Dec 2001 Location: Lost Angelez Posts: 555	For those who posted positive feedback, thanks. Here's what I have so far: 1) choose differing colors 2) choose a twink model 3) antialias the lettering 4) fine/high quality compression 5) buy a font pack with more diverse fonts anyone else?

10-20-2003, 07:02 AM	#33
Milena Dickman Confirmed User Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Brazil Posts: 501	Not bad at all for your first design, Lynkd! But it will take a lot of work and study to make a good design. Don´t give up, and you will get there. But if you don´t, check out www.dickmansdesign.com. We can make you a terrific design! Kisses! Milena __________________ work hard. play hard. http://www.dickmansdesign.com MSN milenadickman at hotmail.com iCQ # 276820774

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