My First Design -- PLEASE CRITIQUE
 

Need your help. I did my first design and need some feedback re design/layout whatever. Im trying to design my own byots and avs sites. Any help would be GREATLY appreciated.

here's the url:

http://gothsexworld.com/sample1/

there's only 1 page, I'll redo the whole tour architecture based on your feedback.

u need ALOT of font work and ALOT of everything else.

Please explain. Where do I get font packs?

The fonts with the rough edges hurt my eyes a little, try making them more cleaner

how do I smooth them out? Like I said, this is my first design, im kinda rusty with photoshop but am building pages for my own purposes.

Any help?

Besides fixing fonts:
#1 - Correct brightness / light
#2 - Do not split the page into so many images
#3 - Put something clickable at the bottom
#4 - Use fireworks

Maybe he can work better with photoshop, who knows :D

photoshop eats fireworks alive.

try to explore photoshop's help option... lots of tutorials there that will help you improve your site.

gudluck :thumbsup

The main guy your using is by no means a twink to start. Also the fonts, colors, etc are all just not that good. Sorry man but this needs a ot of work.

that design sucks badly

ever heard of anti-alias?

Yeah, definitely NOT a twink. Here's a twink.

http://www.studiocontent.com/sample/images/IMG_6565.jpg

not very good.. I need to throw up now..

the background's pretty dodgy too!

For a first design its not that bad at all - you have chosen a model that has nice eye contact and your text is clear and to the point. However, overall the design is too dull in colour and contrast. The pure red does not seem to work with the browns; and the green/red gradient on the button text is doesn't work well either. (Text that small should only have a very sublte gradient if any at all).

Same here..

Like I said, this is my first design, im kinda rusty with photoshop

--> Fireworks is more user friendly for a noob.

but seriously man, rethink all of your colour choices, choose a twink looking guy, as hamlet said, the eye contact's a good idea... but the colours are very dull!

Keep trying man, it takes a while.

Practice study, practice more study. If its your first, congratualtions you have arrived to a much bigger road ahead.

Study design and understand principals of commercial design. There is alot to it all and on the net every pixel counts.

Keep practicing though, you will get better. 1/4 the battle to becomming a designer is deciding to pick up a design environment and actually begin somthing.

anti-alias is your friend!

and try to find more matching colors in your color scheme. The red and green and yellow combo isn't that easy to the eye.

the images are WAY, WAY too chopped up. don't use that many at all.

thanks for the tips guys, I appreciate it. Im still learning.

this thread should have a disclaimer on it... you've ruined my dinner.

this thread is gay, im just fucking waking up bastards

the background is terrible.. change it to a "single color" and not those "raster bars"..

For a first effort, it's not bad at all. You need to read the positive critiques in this post and throw out the harsh criticism. Then just bear down and work hard at it...you'll do great.

:2 cents:

Thanks, Zayne. I appreciate it.

For those who posted positive feedback, thanks.

Here's what I have so far:

1) choose differing colors

2) choose a twink model

3) antialias the lettering

4) fine/high quality compression

5) buy a font pack with more diverse fonts

anyone else?

NOt bad for your first design.

as stated earlier, don't cut up the page so much. makes the page load very slow and looks funny. :2 cents:

Not bad at all for your first design, Lynkd!

But it will take a lot of work and study to make a good design. Don´t give up, and you will get there. :thumbsup

But if you don´t, check out www.dickmansdesign.com. We can make you a terrific design! :1orglaugh

Kisses!

Milena

hehehe thanks but I'll keep learning.

just keep surfing sites you will get more of an idea as you go.