Critique Second Music Video ( Video ) - GoFuckYourself.com

Dugmor · 06-22-2003, 07:35 PM

We just finishing out second music video. It was for a band called " The Box " .

The Box Video

Here is the thread on our first Rock Video

PimpRoll · 06-22-2003, 08:54 PM

quality looks good

Caroline · 06-22-2003, 08:55 PM

i like it

The Click · 06-22-2003, 09:20 PM

did not care for the music. the video production is not bad. the beginning was the best, before he started singing, hope I did not offend anyone.

Mr Pheer · 06-22-2003, 09:25 PM

bagpipes make me close windows... i know its weird with my scottish heritage and all... but cant stand bagpipes...

Dugmor · 06-22-2003, 09:29 PM

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Originally posted by The Click
did not care for the music. the video production is not bad. the beginning was the best, before he started singing, hope I did not offend anyone.

NOT at all ........... I want people to critique the video and be honest !

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Originally posted by MrPheer
bagpipes make me close windows... i know its weird with my scottish heritage and all... but cant stand bagpipes...

We did not write or play the music ! We worked on the VIDEO !

crescentx · 06-22-2003, 09:36 PM

Very cool, just well, I kept expecting a porn angle. Notwithstanding, damn did you really produce this? Damn good if so. Impressed.

-doug

Dugmor · 06-23-2003, 10:36 AM

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Originally posted by crescentx
Very cool, just well, I kept expecting a porn angle. Notwithstanding, damn did you really produce this? Damn good if so. Impressed.

-doug

We have been starting to work with some mainsteam projects for fun and experience.

Buff · 06-23-2003, 12:23 PM

Video looks good to me, but l'm not a fan of the music (and I saw you say you're not involved in the music end of it).

Pipecrew · 06-23-2003, 12:49 PM

I like the song, its about stalking right?

SABAI · 06-23-2003, 05:42 PM

Dugmor,
first the video started good with the black and white of the girl working in the streets, but then the video lost all the rythm, the guy in the dark room scene is way too long as well as in the office, also the bagpipes would require a little more energy in the images, if the contradiction was intentional, well, sorry but it doesn't work. also a good music video (imho) should tell a story that anyone should be avble to understand even with sound off. here i must admit that even with sound on i did not dig it.

was that a funeral house they are at at the end?
well to be perfectly honnest i liked the first video you made but this one is not good, just a succession of images with a guy looking like a molested dog singing. no story, scenes are too long and not related to the music.

sorry you asked for honnesty and i'm being honnest.

by the way if you are looking for a director count me in, and call me this summer when / if you come to paris while on your european trip

cheers

sabai

Dugmor · 06-24-2003, 12:49 AM

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Originally posted by SABAI

by the way if you are looking for a director count me in

Thanks for your feed back. I really appreciate the honesty . That is exactly what I am looking for.

I am always looking for talented directors. Can you please post some of your work .

We are are making changes to this video and I will post the next cut for those interested

MarkTiarra · 06-24-2003, 12:54 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Dugmor

Thanks for your feed back. I really appreciate the honesty . That is exactly what I am looking for.

I am always looking for talented directors. Can you please post some of your work .

We are are making changes to this video and I will post the next cut for those interested

It's good work Dugmor. Are you looking to promote the act or just looking for feedback on the videography? I'm not used to seeing editing that is this devoid of schizophrenia which I like actually. Most videos in the last decade or so use such gatling gun editing that you can't process a scene before they move on to another visual.

Dugmor · 06-24-2003, 01:24 AM

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Originally posted by MarkTiarra

It's good work Dugmor. Are you looking to promote the act or just looking for feedback on the videography? I'm not used to seeing editing that is this devoid of schizophrenia which I like actually. Most videos in the last decade or so use such gatling gun editing that you can't process a scene before they move on to another visual.

Not trying to promote the act at all ........... in fact a few people ICQed me asking where they could buy the CD. In all honesty I have no clue.

We are always looking for new projects to distract us from porn. The first video was done as a goof to get out a video for a band we are friends with. The are beginning a European Tour and needed something for the European Music Television Stations.

The work we do is done with passion. We do not get paid to do these projects. We really enjoy working with other artists that feel the same way as we do. The amount of time spent and energy is not even counted as long as we feel confident that we have the best piece of work possible.

I am sure other artists will understand what I am talking about .

MarkTiarra · 06-24-2003, 01:40 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Dugmor

Not trying to promote the act at all ........... in fact a few people ICQed me asking where they could buy the CD. In all honesty I have no clue.

We are always looking for new projects to distract us from porn. The first video was done as a goof to get out a video for a band we are friends with. The are beginning a European Tour and needed something for the European Music Television Stations.

The work we do is done with passion. We do not get paid to do these projects. We really enjoy working with other artists that feel the same way as we do. The amount of time spent and energy is not even counted as long as we feel confident that we have the best piece of work possible.

I am sure other artists will understand what I am talking about .

Very cool senor. That's the same attitude I take with my recording studio. I stopped doing that for money quite a long time ago and now when I hear an act I like I just bring them in to record a few tracks for the joy of doing it and helping somoene else see their own vision through.

I any case keep up the great work and post more. I for one would love to see it.

-=HUNGRYMAN=- · 06-24-2003, 02:00 AM

The video is cool from a technical POV ...

The Box is still around ???

They used to kick ass back when with SASS JORDAN ...

( yes ... I did say "USED TO" ....)

mastamindz · 06-24-2003, 02:13 AM

Quote:

Originally posted by Dugmor

I am always looking for talented directors. Can you please post some of your work .

We are are making changes to this video and I will post the next cut for those interested

You need to hire my brother lol
http://www.mullet-media.com

Carrie · 06-24-2003, 02:28 AM

Dugmor,
I like this one, I think the JRN filming/editing skills have grown a little since the last video. This one looked much more professional.

The video itself - I don't get it. Is he dead? Did they used to be lovers? Is it a funeral home at the end? Why is he keeping in touch with her?
Little things can add to the understanding of a video - like if they were lovers, you could show a picture of the two of them together on her desk at work (pan past her to the picture; even if it's "been so long" that there's a pile of papers in front of it or if it's just one of many papers/pictures pinned to her cubicle wall).

I agree that the scenes are a bit too long. You don't *always* have to be showing the singer when there are lyrics going. We've seen him sing "I will always, always keep in touch with you" 20 times by the time we're two minutes into the video (or so it seems)... you could use those chorus repeats to add in additional footage that would make the storyline a bit clearer.

I think you make GREAT use of lighting and color/bw in this one.

And I also *love* the song, too bad you don't know where to get the CD.

06-22-2003, 07:35 PM	#1
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06-22-2003, 09:20 PM	#4
The Click Confirmed User Join Date: Apr 2003 Location: Canada Posts: 1,685	did not care for the music. the video production is not bad. the beginning was the best, before he started singing, hope I did not offend anyone. __________________ ICQ: 31-30-30

06-22-2003, 09:25 PM	#5
Mr Pheer Retired Industry Role: Join Date: Dec 2002 Posts: 21,257	bagpipes make me close windows... i know its weird with my scottish heritage and all... but cant stand bagpipes... __________________ 2 lifeguards for Jessica

06-22-2003, 09:36 PM	#7
crescentx Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2003 Posts: 317	Very cool, just well, I kept expecting a porn angle. Notwithstanding, damn did you really produce this? Damn good if so. Impressed. -doug __________________ XYCash International Gay Affiliate Program

06-22-2003, 08:55 PM	#3
Caroline Confirmed User Join Date: Jul 2001 Location: 8 mile Posts: 405	i like it

06-23-2003, 12:23 PM	#9
Buff GFY Assassin Industry Role: Join Date: May 2003 Posts: 2,993	Video looks good to me, but l'm not a fan of the music (and I saw you say you're not involved in the music end of it).

06-23-2003, 12:49 PM	#10
Pipecrew Master of Gfy.com Industry Role: Join Date: Feb 2002 Posts: 14,887	I like the song, its about stalking right?

06-23-2003, 05:42 PM	#11
SABAI Confirmed User Join Date: Jan 2001 Location: footmaniac.com Posts: 2,880	Dugmor, first the video started good with the black and white of the girl working in the streets, but then the video lost all the rythm, the guy in the dark room scene is way too long as well as in the office, also the bagpipes would require a little more energy in the images, if the contradiction was intentional, well, sorry but it doesn't work. also a good music video (imho) should tell a story that anyone should be avble to understand even with sound off. here i must admit that even with sound on i did not dig it. was that a funeral house they are at at the end? well to be perfectly honnest i liked the first video you made but this one is not good, just a succession of images with a guy looking like a molested dog singing. no story, scenes are too long and not related to the music. sorry you asked for honnesty and i'm being honnest. by the way if you are looking for a director count me in, and call me this summer when / if you come to paris while on your european trip cheers sabai __________________

06-24-2003, 02:00 AM	#16
-=HUNGRYMAN=- Confirmed User Join Date: Jun 2001 Location: Between your mamma's legs Posts: 4,753	The video is cool from a technical POV ... The Box is still around ??? They used to kick ass back when with SASS JORDAN ... ( yes ... I did say "USED TO" ....) __________________

06-24-2003, 02:28 AM	#18
Carrie Confirmed User Join Date: Apr 2002 Location: Virgin - nee Posts: 3,162	Dugmor, I like this one, I think the JRN filming/editing skills have grown a little since the last video. This one looked much more professional. The video itself - I don't get it. Is he dead? Did they used to be lovers? Is it a funeral home at the end? Why is he keeping in touch with her? Little things can add to the understanding of a video - like if they were lovers, you could show a picture of the two of them together on her desk at work (pan past her to the picture; even if it's "been so long" that there's a pile of papers in front of it or if it's just one of many papers/pictures pinned to her cubicle wall). I agree that the scenes are a bit too long. You don't always have to be showing the singer when there are lyrics going. We've seen him sing "I will always, always keep in touch with you" 20 times by the time we're two minutes into the video (or so it seems)... you could use those chorus repeats to add in additional footage that would make the storyline a bit clearer. I think you make GREAT use of lighting and color/bw in this one. And I also love the song, too bad you don't know where to get the CD.