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  • chaze
    Confirmed User
    • Aug 2002
    • 9776

    #1

    Can some check this that is good seeing errors.

    I re-did this today and it's important to be exact since it's on the front page, thanks for any help:

    Everyday, DWHS works on ways to improve web hosting. We are constantly upgrading our system with the latest technology. It's our main focus to be able to give your website visitors the best possible experience. It is also our focus to keep the system easy for most everyone to operate. All of our servers have redundant tier one bandwidth connections, so if one goes down, or even slows down, the connection instantly rolls over to the next for true network reliability. Our industry leading support staff is available everyday of the year, and they are happy to help you every step of the way. Also enjoy our easy to use "" control panel with free website tools to help your website's online presence be it's best. On top of all of this we have a custom made advanced security system that blocks password sharing and brute force password attempts. We care about your business and we will go the extra step to exceed your expectations.
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  • European Lee
    Confirmed User
    • Dec 2002
    • 7133

    #2
    Sure here ya go...

    Can some check this that is good seeing errors.
    Revise to...

    Could someone check this that is good with finding errors.

    Regards,

    Lee
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    • European Lee
      Confirmed User
      • Dec 2002
      • 7133

      #3
      Everyday, DWHS works on ways to improve web hosting.

      We are constantly upgrading our system with the latest technology, our main focus is to be able to give your website visitors the best possible experience and to keep our system easy for everyone to operate.

      All of our servers have redundant tier one bandwidth connections so, if one goes down, or even slows down, the connection instantly rolls over to the next one for true network reliability.

      Our industry leading support staff are available everyday of the year, and they are happy to help you every step of the way.

      You will also enjoy our easy to use control panel and free website tools to help your online presence excel.

      On top of all of this we have a custom made advanced security system that blocks password sharing and brute force password attempts.

      We care about your business and we will go the extra step to exceed your expectations.

      Regards,

      Lee
      YOUR TRAFFIC IS SAFE WITH US - CONDOM CASH
      PUTTING THE GAY ADULT INDUSTRY ON YOUR PC!!
      AFFORDABLE 2257 COMPLIANT GAY + BI CONTENT

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      • Defiant
        Registered User
        • May 2001
        • 78

        #4
        Every day DWHS works on ways to improve web hosting and we are constantly upgrading our system with the latest technology.

        It is our main focus to be able to give your website visitors the best experience possible, and to keep the system easy for most everyone to operate.

        All of our servers have redundant tier one bandwidth connections so that if one goes down, or even slows down, the connection instantly rolls over to the next in line for true network reliability.

        Our industry leading support staff is available every day of the year, and they are happy to help you every step of the way.

        Make use of our easy to use control panel with free website tools to help your website's online presence be the best it can be.

        In addition to this, we have a custom made advanced security system that blocks password sharing and brute force password attempts.

        We care about you and your business, and we will go the extra mile to exceed your expectations.
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        • chaze
          Confirmed User
          • Aug 2002
          • 9776

          #5
          Nice, those are both very good, thank you very much.

          I Just have to decide wich one to go with.
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          • jimthefiend
            So Fucking Banned
            • Oct 2003
            • 18889

            #6
            No commas right before "and" you illiterate yokels. This is more grammatically correct.


            Every day DWHS works on ways to improve web hosting and we are constantly upgrading our system with the latest technology. It is our main focus to be able to give your website visitors the best experience possible and to keep the system easy for most everyone to operate.

            All of our servers have redundant tier one bandwidth connections so that if one goes down or even slows down; the connection instantly rolls over to the next in line for true network reliability.

            Make use of our easy to use control panel with free website tools to help your website's online presence be the best it can be. In addition to this, we have a custom made advanced security system that blocks password sharing and brute force password attempts.

            Our industry leading support staff is available every day of the year and they are happy to help you every step of the way.

            We care about you and your business and we will go the extra mile to exceed your expectations.
            Last edited by jimthefiend; 03-02-2006, 03:55 PM.

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            • Scootermuze
              Confirmed User
              • Dec 2001
              • 4513

              #7
              Originally posted by jimthefiend
              No commas right before "and" you illiterate yokels. This is more grammatically correct.

              All of our servers have redundant tier one bandwidth connections so that if one goes down or even slows down; the connection instantly rolls over to the next in line for true network reliability.
              The semi-colon should be a comma...

              and a serial coma is fine before, "and" ..

              Easy on the, "Illiterate yokel thing" ..

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              • chaze
                Confirmed User
                • Aug 2002
                • 9776

                #8
                Originally posted by Scootermuze
                The semi-colon should be a comma...

                and a serial coma is fine before, "and" ..

                Easy on the, "Illiterate yokel thing" ..

                So defiant's is cool? That's the one I used. Just because it was a little smoother for me to read.
                Like the desert needs the rain
                We do fully manged WordPress, VPS, and Servers. Adult Host Pro https://adulthostpro.com/ Since 2001

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