Diary of a teenage pornstar
 

Hey... please take a quick look at this. None of the Nav is operational yet and it isnt all done, so if you see odvious things then ignore them. We are looking for ways to market our new Jules Jordon signed pornstar and have come up with this approuch. We wanted to stay with are amateur feel, but still use her "statis" as a marketing tool. Let me hear your thoughts.

Cris... Diary of a teenage pornstar

"I have wanted to be a porn star ever since I seen my first porno movie when I was sixteen. "

I dunno if i'd put that in there personally....

it's 'shelves', not 'selves' :thumbsup

I agree... Good call and thanks for reinforcing my thoughts.. Wheres that damn copy writer.. Opps.. hahaha! My bad

Hey Eq.. yeah cool! I caught that.. thanks man.

other than that man, looks like a solid idea :thumbsup

she's a sexy bitch, what's her number. send her my way.

Yes that girl is very cute.

Hook me up :Graucho

One big thing with that much text is you probably want to use BOLD, italics and different colors to make it stand out a bit more.

You'll want to play up her age, size, and the fact that its exclusive to her site a bit more too.

Nothing wrong with the copy, it could be a tad bit more aggressive I think.

You might also want to change the title of the page to use the name Cris instead of Dana...

Yeah.. its just housed on the server of the guy designing them for me. It picked up the name of one of other sites we are working on. Thanks for noticing :thumbsup

Too much text to read

First page should be broken down into 3 pages itself.

Give em' a tease paragraph with a tease picture - taking off a little more each time or a different pose...

Get em' clicking to see what she says or takes off next...
They'll be so used to clicking they'll be on that join page before they know it.

The offical website for Cris Taliana

typo... on official

i like the concept..good luck with it:thumbsup