critique my first paysite design
 

ok, this was just a test, and will not go live...none of the links work, but from a designers standpoint...please give me your opinions. I know there are a few spelling errors, and a text out of place, but over all, just your opinions on the look and design
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suggestions and comments are welcome. I am no professional. I usually stick to gallery design. This is my first site design. Took me 3 hours.
thanks,
rosey

good job :thumbsup

Looks clean for sure...
But it looks a little like any other paysite...
How will you pormote it?
If you gonna promote it yourselfe using freesites and shit you will do fine I think :)

looks sweet! Maybe think about fonts that are a little more readable.. make your main selling text (in white center screen) bolder font... :2 cents:

Oh where it says 'teens from heaven' - put some lil pics in a strip behind that text.. make the text stand out.. that should balance it up nicely. :2 cents: :2 cents:

Tis a winner:thumbsup

very nice

colors are bad, purple and turquoise?
no bro. :2 cents:

nice for avs site