Who wants to be a critic :)
 

So, what do you think of the new site?
I need feedback.. what's good, what's bad.. what needs help..

Do you think it'll sell?

it's version 2.

http://i3.photobucket.com/albums/y66...II/banner2.gif

This one could need some better photoshopping...

http://www.ripespringcherries.com/Jane-Transparent.jpg

thanks.. I'll probably pic a different image that's easier to cut out,.

Its simple, but I like it... Nice girls good design :) You should put more stuff to the tour though

I want to say that I expected more 'cherryness' if it makes sense. Other than that - looks normal. Good luck,. :)

Other than the fact that the last polaroid picture I saw didnt have a drop shadow, i HATE the sparkles over the nipples...but pretty decent simple-looking page overall

Good little page, but I'd use higher resolution photos if it were me.

Overall though...good work!

-alignment of images are off
-left thumbs are cropped wrong (warped pics)
-too many different fonts
-too many cherries on header
-gap between header and top url too thick
-home page: only one side has white border, left missing it
-too much flashing everywhere
-font/bevel/drop shadow are weak
-text on continue page difficult to read and too long.. break it up into short sections
-too many hearts in logo... maybe remove them and use a couple of cherries? (to matc theme/name)
-join page pic = bad crop

needs alot of work... hope this helps :thumbsup

harsh review but i agree with a good bit of it..
specifically too many fonts in use

Not professional look: Very nice, a little bit flashy and disturbing. But gamma is great.

is this for paysite??? if so - design really sucks... :(

I think everything you do is perfect.

Thanks for the constructive input..

I'm back to the drawing board. :)

ok.. I changed header font.. got rid of the hearts, dropped some cherries.. changed some font, & got rid of flashy click here.. & tightened gap at top.

I know about the other page, but that's left over from version 1.. I still havent worked on the rest of it, just main page.

getting better... keep going :thumbsup

try this format:

http://www.abyssent.com/abyss_al/layout1.jpg

hmmm...well it looks like you spent about 50 bucks on the design. surfers are a lot more discriminant these days. they know that if a site has a poor design on the tour, the member's area probably sucks ass.

there are no full sized sample pictures or videos that i could see and the "continue" button goes pretty much straight to the join page. don't expect many sales.

:2 cents:

I found some cherries http://www.sxc.hu/pic/m/s/sh/shibuya...ries_photo.jpg now you must have the skills to use them

that's because I haven't built the other pages yet... I am focusing on this page right now, because this page will be the template for the following tour pages... I linked it to what it is, because, well because it needed to be linked to something.

Also, there are no full sized samples because I did not link to them yet.. That will be the last thing I do, once I am done laying it out.


Perhaps I should've used the term page instead of site... However, I am considering adding more rows of thumbs & using a single page tour, or maybe just two pages


btw, this is my 2nd attempt.. the original version has splash, 5 tour pages + join,,


this is only the first page I've built on version #2.. just figured I'd ask for input so I can revise

alright.. I'll give that a shot & see .. thanks..

the girls look great! :thumbsup

hey all.. thanks everyone for all the great input.. I revised the one page & I fucking love it :) :)

Coming much better.. :)

I like the back color, very girly:)

looks much much better :thumbsup

Looks good, spacedog! I would work on the logo and the fonts you're using a little bit more...

Okay, here is my critical view of things:

1 - the colors of the logos, cherries, etc are all too muted and dull. Nothing stands out. The site isn't vibrant looking, it looks very washed out.

2 - the second girl you feature, the images are not very vibrant either. A blonde waifish girl with no tan wearing black on a black and white bed is dull city. Maybe a nice photoset, but it isn't exciting to look at.

3 - No tag line. What are you selling here? Right that the top, say something, anything... "First time net girls getting wild!" ... anything that gives you site an instant identity. Right now it is very wishy-washy, hard to determine exactly what you site is about - especially getting that message out "above the fold" ie: above where the screen would scroll for most people.

overall, the site is muted, the colors are washed out, the girls pictures are not "hot", and generally I can't say from looking at your site what it is really about, except "another site with naked girls".

Good lick with it.

Looks good. But I would swap out the top girl.