| RedShoe |
10-14-2006 11:36 AM |
It's a good start. I think it's a bit too long. Leave them wanting more. Never leave them with a heartbeat that has peaked.
If you want to do the trailer in 2 parts, the slower sexier beginning and then a faster ending, then I would do this. (and this is just my opinion... you'll never truly know how well it will do until you add it to your tour) If the slow part is supposed to be sexy.. really slow it down. Maybe even add a subtle glow filter to it. Use slow motion. It looks like there is a forced zoom/twist on the kissing scene. Slow that down. Slow down the boot licking it's a fetish site. Cut out the walking so the slow bits don't add more time.
Then on the fast stuff don't leave a blank card up for so long. You don't want them to have to read too much in the dark. Put the 'now get ready for harder stuff' card over some slower sex stuff like the ass licking.
IF... IF you have the audio of the girls screaming in the 2nd half, TURN UP THE VOL. It's a fetish site not a headbangers ball. The opening shot of the hardcore footage doesn't really scream fetish. It just screams hardcore. Just regular fucking. The strap-on, and spanking and nipple clamps is what I want to see, the first shot sends a fast mixed message. Just enough for me to notice that it wasn't fetish. Use your fetish footage. That quick clip of the girl getting smacked in the pussy with the dildo is hot. The spanking is hot. IT'S A FETISH SITE I WANT TO SEE SOME KINKY SHIT! I don't want to see a regular cock going into a pussy I can see that anywhere. I wanna see RUBBER, I want to see VINYL, I want to see BRIGHT COLORS. I want to see NIPPLE CLAMPS...
And for the love of god.. CUT IT DOWN! It's too long.
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