Can some check this that is good seeing errors.
 

I re-did this today and it's important to be exact since it's on the front page, thanks for any help:

Everyday, DWHS works on ways to improve web hosting. We are constantly upgrading our system with the latest technology. It's our main focus to be able to give your website visitors the best possible experience. It is also our focus to keep the system easy for most everyone to operate. All of our servers have redundant tier one bandwidth connections, so if one goes down, or even slows down, the connection instantly rolls over to the next for true network reliability. Our industry leading support staff is available everyday of the year, and they are happy to help you every step of the way. Also enjoy our easy to use "" control panel with free website tools to help your website's online presence be it's best. On top of all of this we have a custom made advanced security system that blocks password sharing and brute force password attempts. We care about your business and we will go the extra step to exceed your expectations.

Sure here ya go...

Revise to...

Could someone check this that is good with finding errors.

Regards,

Lee

Everyday, DWHS works on ways to improve web hosting.

We are constantly upgrading our system with the latest technology, our main focus is to be able to give your website visitors the best possible experience and to keep our system easy for everyone to operate.

All of our servers have redundant tier one bandwidth connections so, if one goes down, or even slows down, the connection instantly rolls over to the next one for true network reliability.

Our industry leading support staff are available everyday of the year, and they are happy to help you every step of the way.

You will also enjoy our easy to use control panel and free website tools to help your online presence excel.

On top of all of this we have a custom made advanced security system that blocks password sharing and brute force password attempts.

We care about your business and we will go the extra step to exceed your expectations.

Regards,

Lee

Every day DWHS works on ways to improve web hosting and we are constantly upgrading our system with the latest technology.

It is our main focus to be able to give your website visitors the best experience possible, and to keep the system easy for most everyone to operate.

All of our servers have redundant tier one bandwidth connections so that if one goes down, or even slows down, the connection instantly rolls over to the next in line for true network reliability.

Our industry leading support staff is available every day of the year, and they are happy to help you every step of the way.

Make use of our easy to use control panel with free website tools to help your website's online presence be the best it can be.

In addition to this, we have a custom made advanced security system that blocks password sharing and brute force password attempts.

We care about you and your business, and we will go the extra mile to exceed your expectations.

Nice, those are both very good, thank you very much.

I Just have to decide wich one to go with.

No commas right before "and" you illiterate yokels. This is more grammatically correct.


Every day DWHS works on ways to improve web hosting and we are constantly upgrading our system with the latest technology. It is our main focus to be able to give your website visitors the best experience possible and to keep the system easy for most everyone to operate.

All of our servers have redundant tier one bandwidth connections so that if one goes down or even slows down; the connection instantly rolls over to the next in line for true network reliability.

Make use of our easy to use control panel with free website tools to help your website's online presence be the best it can be. In addition to this, we have a custom made advanced security system that blocks password sharing and brute force password attempts.

Our industry leading support staff is available every day of the year and they are happy to help you every step of the way.

We care about you and your business and we will go the extra mile to exceed your expectations.

The semi-colon should be a comma...

and a serial coma is fine before, "and" ..

Easy on the, "Illiterate yokel thing" ..

So defiant's is cool? That's the one I used. Just because it was a little smoother for me to read.