Critique my tour designs
 

I know this is a little spammy, but I was honestly hoping for a critique to my first few tour designs:

under construction
http://www.sexymojo.com/design/clien...st/tour01.html

http://www.sexymojo.com/design/clien...res/index.html

http://www.sexymojo.com/design/clien...gon/index.html

Ok rip'em apart, and if this is too spammy, someone let me know I'll be gentler next time =)

I like the first 2, the 3rd page a bunch of images weren't loading for me.

Excellent!

nice, clean, crisp and they give the surfer enough to look at before deciding to pull those cc's out!

I especially like This page... You've blocked out her pussy, but there's still a nice little butthole poking out! :1orglaugh

Thanks guys, I guess the customer put the tour up for the dragon site, faster http://www.xxxdragon.com/

Design looks great, and the models on the tour are attractive.

VERY NICE! :thumbsup

Very classy :thumbsup

I liked the site...good job. My only suggestion would be to put a couple more "teaser" photos on the tour pages. Otherwise... Nice Job! :thumbsup

I liked the teenie pleasures best..
so i'll point out what I saw..

globally:
the censoring is inconsistent from page to page..
the word "stink" is usually a turn off ; )
100s and 1000s tend to look better with apostrophes
the small blue text on the left, is maybe a bit too small..

the front page:
girl.. front and center.. gotta fix her color.
group sex is two words, or hyphenated.
not everyone knows what "DP" stands for.
elke-18 & rosa-18 coulda been cropped a bit better.
minor grammar issues.

page 2:
pics could use some color fixes.
minor grammar issues.

page3:
front and center pic, looks like her breast and arm were amputated..
front and center pic, scanlines if you must have them, are too intense.
front and center pic, color issues.
minor grammar issues.

join:
reused pics from earlier in tour..

Now THAT'S a critique =) Thanks for the feedback everyone

The third tour seems a little flat to me. All in all, good work.

:thumbsup

first two are real nice, much better than most I see.

the owner of the first site should contact me, looks like he's going after the teen amateur niche and the girls look too pro and magazine-ish for that target audience.

I think your 2nd page is pretty good

I don't really like the other ones, sorry

nice clean amateur look :thumbsup

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