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Looks good, but u might want to make the text on
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a bit easier to read. Not Like This, It Makes it very Hard To read.
Vary the text sizes a bit, try colors on some words you want to emphasize etc, it might sell better.Comment
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ok over 100 people read this but very few feedbacks
i need your input here people
thanks
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Your text is full of misspellings, ungrammatical English, sentence fragments, run-on sentences and improper capitalization. The sentences should have two spaces after them, not one. All of this is distracting and some of it is not even comprehensible. For example, the sentence that says "Well Hun!" At first I thought it was a misspelling of "Well Hung." Then I realized you probably meant "Well, Hon!" Here's a rewrite of your main selling text:
"Tired of looking for a true 100% amateur site? Disappointed after clicking banner after banner? Are you ready for something new? Something different? Well then, you're in the right place! My website and cam are definitely different and exciting. I feature all my own content. You won't see these pictures or videos anywhere else but right here! I'm a true slutty amateur housewife! This site gives you the woman next door you wish you could fuck until her husband comes home. This is not one of those so-called amateur sites that's run by some Big Cyber Sex Company and features a model who has absolutely no involvement with the site. This is a totally interactive amateur site which I run myself. So sit and take a look around. I'm sure you'll love what I have to offer."
Hope that's helpful. The rest of the site needs a thorough proofreading by a native speaker of English. There are many, many other mistakes and hard-to-understand passages.Last edited by neewwman; 10-25-2002, 08:56 PM.
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Sorry, I'd need some money. Reading through the whole site would make my eyes bug out.

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I'd have to agree with this comment. It was so hard to read through it all that I wound up closing it out before I even finished your tour. That's not good. You definately don't want your surfers to react that way. Getting this corrected should be your FIRST PRIORITY. The rest of the site isn't bad at all, but this is a real bite in the ass.Originally posted by neewwman
Your text is full of misspellings, ungrammatical English, sentence fragments, run-on sentences and improper capitalization. The sentences should have two spaces after them, not one. All of this is distracting and some of it is not even comprehensible.
Hope that's helpful. The rest of the site needs a thorough proofreading by a native speaker of English. There are many, many other mistakes and hard-to-understand passages.Comment
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thanks made some changes and cut the wording down a lot.
did anyone look at my join page to see what you think of that
thanks again for the input
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You've still got the same misspellings, ungrammatical English, sentence fragments, run-on sentences and improper capitalization going on. Since you're obviously not capable of handling this yourself, spend the money and hire someone to take care of that for you. It will be money well spent.Originally posted by gypsi
thanks made some changes and cut the wording down a lot.
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