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  • gypsi
    Confirmed User
    • Jun 2001
    • 234

    #1

    can i have feedback on my site

    can anyone shoot me some feed back on my site..

    http://www.webcam-pleasures.com/

    thanks
  • jscott
    jscizzle
    • Feb 2001
    • 25704

    #2
    nice & simple
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    • Pornkings
      Confirmed User
      • Oct 2002
      • 5334

      #3
      Looks good but I think your first page should be more clear and have more photos that get you hard if you know what I mean. Its a little to soft.
      you don't want to loose them on the first page
      Pornkings.com

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      • gypsi
        Confirmed User
        • Jun 2001
        • 234

        #4
        photos yep agree 100% more clear? not sure what you mean

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        • KingK7
          Confirmed User
          • Jun 2002
          • 6372

          #5
          Looks good, but u might want to make the text on
          http://www.webcam-pleasures.com/hot3/
          a bit easier to read. Not Like This, It Makes it very Hard To read.

          Vary the text sizes a bit, try colors on some words you want to emphasize etc, it might sell better.

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          • gypsi
            Confirmed User
            • Jun 2001
            • 234

            #6
            thanks made some changes

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            • gypsi
              Confirmed User
              • Jun 2001
              • 234

              #7
              ok over 100 people read this but very few feedbacks
              i need your input here people
              thanks
              http://www.webcam-pleasures.com

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              • neewwman
                Confirmed User
                • Jan 2002
                • 1737

                #8
                Your text is full of misspellings, ungrammatical English, sentence fragments, run-on sentences and improper capitalization. The sentences should have two spaces after them, not one. All of this is distracting and some of it is not even comprehensible. For example, the sentence that says "Well Hun!" At first I thought it was a misspelling of "Well Hung." Then I realized you probably meant "Well, Hon!" Here's a rewrite of your main selling text:

                "Tired of looking for a true 100% amateur site? Disappointed after clicking banner after banner? Are you ready for something new? Something different? Well then, you're in the right place! My website and cam are definitely different and exciting. I feature all my own content. You won't see these pictures or videos anywhere else but right here! I'm a true slutty amateur housewife! This site gives you the woman next door you wish you could fuck until her husband comes home. This is not one of those so-called amateur sites that's run by some Big Cyber Sex Company and features a model who has absolutely no involvement with the site. This is a totally interactive amateur site which I run myself. So sit and take a look around. I'm sure you'll love what I have to offer."

                Hope that's helpful. The rest of the site needs a thorough proofreading by a native speaker of English. There are many, many other mistakes and hard-to-understand passages.
                Last edited by neewwman; 10-25-2002, 08:56 PM.

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                • gypsi
                  Confirmed User
                  • Jun 2001
                  • 234

                  #9
                  thanks i see what you mean..
                  LOL if you have any time on your hands mind doing any other pages

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                  • neewwman
                    Confirmed User
                    • Jan 2002
                    • 1737

                    #10
                    Sorry, I'd need some money. Reading through the whole site would make my eyes bug out.

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                    • Va2k
                      I’m still alive barley.
                      • Oct 2001
                      • 10060

                      #11
                      Where you from? Oh your site looks nice.. Do you have an webmasters program? also are you paying the Fee's and if so great hook up a webmaster program and I will throw you some exit traffic


                      TOM

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                      • gypsi
                        Confirmed User
                        • Jun 2001
                        • 234

                        #12
                        nope sorry never tried a webmaster program
                        is it worth looking into?

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                        • foe
                          Confirmed User
                          • May 2002
                          • 5246

                          #13
                          no

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                          • Deb
                            Confirmed User
                            • Feb 2002
                            • 1237

                            #14
                            Originally posted by neewwman
                            Your text is full of misspellings, ungrammatical English, sentence fragments, run-on sentences and improper capitalization. The sentences should have two spaces after them, not one. All of this is distracting and some of it is not even comprehensible.
                            Hope that's helpful. The rest of the site needs a thorough proofreading by a native speaker of English. There are many, many other mistakes and hard-to-understand passages.
                            I'd have to agree with this comment. It was so hard to read through it all that I wound up closing it out before I even finished your tour. That's not good. You definately don't want your surfers to react that way. Getting this corrected should be your FIRST PRIORITY. The rest of the site isn't bad at all, but this is a real bite in the ass.

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                            • gypsi
                              Confirmed User
                              • Jun 2001
                              • 234

                              #15
                              thanks made some changes and cut the wording down a lot.
                              did anyone look at my join page to see what you think of that
                              thanks again for the input
                              http://www.webcam-pleasures.com/hot3/

                              http://www.webcam-pleasures.com/hot3/get.html

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                              • fear
                                Confirmed User
                                • May 2002
                                • 379

                                #16
                                I didn`t like it.... sorry

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                                • Funkito
                                  Registered User
                                  • Oct 2002
                                  • 92

                                  #17
                                  I closed it pretty quick. Didn't stand out. Too much going on. Simplify.

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                                  • Deb
                                    Confirmed User
                                    • Feb 2002
                                    • 1237

                                    #18
                                    Originally posted by gypsi
                                    thanks made some changes and cut the wording down a lot.
                                    You've still got the same misspellings, ungrammatical English, sentence fragments, run-on sentences and improper capitalization going on. Since you're obviously not capable of handling this yourself, spend the money and hire someone to take care of that for you. It will be money well spent.

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                                    • gypsi
                                      Confirmed User
                                      • Jun 2001
                                      • 234

                                      #19
                                      ok so what i got is layout is ok but the spelling sucks
                                      is this correct.
                                      thanks

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                                      • Deb
                                        Confirmed User
                                        • Feb 2002
                                        • 1237

                                        #20
                                        Originally posted by gypsi
                                        ok so what i got is layout is ok but the spelling sucks
                                        is this correct.
                                        thanks
                                        I take it that you didn't actually READ my last post, as it mentions MORE THAN SPELLING ERRORS. Perhaps you should re-read it.

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