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smashits · 07-17-2014, 01:01 AM

Hi All,

This is my first erotic story. Please give review of it. Do you find it hot or not? Please comment.

Slept with my boss
I am Rishabh joined as Multinational IT Company as a software programmer on entry level. My office schedule remains tight due to my strict boss who remains always on toe to finish project on time. She is the strictest person, I have ever encountered in my life. She doesn?t allow men to smoke, girls to chat long on their phone and expects everyone to arrive on time. Overall, all my colleagues remain in terror due to her strict disciplinarian behaviour.
By, God grace, I have always remained in Good books in her eyes. I always complete my work on time, solve complex problems in quick span and always talk to her with due respect, unlike other senior colleagues who see her with roving eyes.
My boss is quite a stunner. She is 5 feet, 8 inches tall, fair, has knee length hair, slender figure and looks really hot in skirt and office shirt. Most people have tried to hit on her, but have never been successful in dating her or sleeping with her. She is known for no- nonsense attitude throughout in office; in fact, one senior manager got a tight slap in front of whole office when he tried to be over-friendly with her. From that day, no men in our company dared to approach her for date. Girls considered her as arrogant bitch and men were really scared of her. There were rumours that she is in a relationship with a boy working in defence since 9 years, but it has never been confirmed.
Quite strangely, she has always been nice to me. One day, I forgot to bring my lunch, she offered me hers, which was a rare gesture from her side. Also, she always reply to me with a smile, even sometimes put a hand on my shoulders. No matter what the whole office say, what I can say about her is that she is tough from outside, but soft from inside.
One day, I stayed late in office, since I have to finish a project on deadline. Almost, everyone had left and there was hardly anyone in office. Almost, everyone had left and there was hardly anyone in office. I finished my work by 2: am and was surprised to listen to a woman sobbing in my office. I went straight there from where voice was coming and found my boss crying a lot.
I asked ?What happened??
She didn?t reply.
I put my bag, brought a glass of water and put a pat on her shoulder. She took glass of water like an obedient child and told me her story. She told me, she was engaged to a guy for nine years, but he was not committing to marriage. Whenever, she prompt up a marriage question, he told her, he needs some time to concentrate on his career and can?t commit in a relationship till he is settled down, even though he was earning handsomely. Recently, he told her that his parents have found a sweet, innocent looking girl for him and he is marrying her. She was shocked that guy with whom she dreams of spending her whole life could walk away just like that. She told me she had given everything to him, her body, her money; in-fact had gone for abortion once, still he is deserting her. She was shaken completely.
I felt really sympathetic towards her. To console her, I took her face and give her a kiss on her sweet red lips. She didn?t complain mind. To stop her crying, I again kissed her on lips and this time I kept my tongue rolling in her mouth. Now, she was aroused, taking deep breath. She smiled at me and taking advantage of fact that she didn?t mind, I move towards her neck and start kissing her, while kissing her neck, my hands move inside her shirt and fondled her breast. I continued doing so for five minutes.
Now, she was completely excited, in fact she was blushing, couldn?t make an eye contact with me. Now, she was in total control of me, I started unbuttoning her shirt and took her off within a second, then my hands move towards button of her skirt, within few moments, I removed her skirt too. Now, she was really looking gorgeous in lingerie.
I made her stand up and started kissing her navel, while my hands were fondling her breasts. From navel, I move to her neck again and give passionate kisses on her neck. Holding her tight, I opened hook of her bra, she was shocked, but couldn?t do anything.
She put her hands on small breasts in shyness; I took away her hands to see her beautiful breasts. Her breasts were round and firm, I put my mouth in her breasts and start sucking them like a hungry child. I keep on sucking them till her nipples become completely red. After that, I move towards her lips and starts kissing them again, I move again to her neck, this time, I gave her a love byte, she gave a soft cry, but I didn?t stop.
Soon, I lay her down on table, with me on top of her; I removed her panties and within a few moments, my penis was inside her vagina. Soon, she spread her legs to welcome me inside her body. I keep on thrusting my organ inside her while lying on top of her. Looking directly into her eyes while fucking her, I asked her, ?Marry me?, she said, ?what??, again I told her to marry me, if she refuses, I will keep on inserting my organ till she said yes. She laughed and said yes. With that, I gave a passionate kiss on her lips and release a large amount of cum inside her body.
After this, emotional sexual encounter, both of us went back home. Soon, I met her parents and with hers as well as mine parents blessings, we got married within a month. Now, both of us are parents of 2 year old son and still laugh at passionate sexual encounter that took place in office.

baddog · 07-17-2014, 01:19 AM

Try using grammar check; you had errors in the first two sentences, so I stopped reading. Educate yourself about paragraphs while you are at it.

CurrentlySober · 07-17-2014, 02:17 AM

I'm sat at the computer, busy doing my stuff... The odd email, surfing the net, looking up the odd detail from a movie thats playing in the background on IMDB, and... Enjoying GFY...

Then, suddenly, I felt the urge 'To Go'.... That strange feeling where you have a very slight stomach ache, and are fully aware you have a penis... But I ignore it...

After an hour or so, the tip of my penis is becoming very sensitive against my underwear, and my brain is telling me to visit the bathroom... I een look out the office door and can see the toilet across the hallway, but for some weird reason, I stay put...

I'm still sitting infront of the PC over 15 mins later, and that tingle in my penis tip, and the feeling in my stomach, are now more of an actual pain... My buttocks and sphincter are also tensing up, and I find myself involuntary raising myself up and down from my chair at 30 second intervals, without feeling fully in control of my actions... TBH, It feels rather nice.... In a kinda naughty, sexual, kinda way...

So, I glance again towards the toilet, and think enough is enough. Time to go, and go to raise myself out of my chair... BUT SOMETHING KEEPS ME SEATED ! Something primal - Something from the start of time - Something SO POWERFUL... I just cant resist... So I 'Relax...'

But... Nothing happens! I cant just piss into my own clothing, when I can see the toilet! I admit that I WANT TOO... I have a desire to do so.. But... I just CANT - Its not normal - Not clean - Not correct - and... TBH - Extremely difficult... So, my body takes control, and I feel the urge 'subside'...

But while the urge may have subsided, the desire has not... So I look from my desk towards the toilet, and back to my desk where there is a full pint glass of vodka and redbull... So, throwing caution to the wind, I pick up the glass, and begin to swallow the liquid nectar, as fast as i can... I dont wanna get 'Drunk' I wanna pee... So Bad ! So I swallow as quick as possible, and fill my belly ! Now... If I can only wait 30 mins or so, for it to 'pass through'... Then we will have a very naughty result...

Luckily... I dont have to wait that long...

So... I think to myself.. This is it... Self urination ! Lets go, and with one last loving glance towards the toilet, I sit back in my chair, relax and prepare for nature to take its course... But, just as I feel its about to spurt everywhere... Reality kicks in, and I 'Stop Myself' (Subconsciously) While I feel bad about stopping, I understand my body is just behaving itself, so I glance at the toilet, and push up on arms of my chair... THEN IT HAPPENS!

One quick 'guilty' squirt! Only a tablespoon or so, but its shot out into my fresh white underwear, and caused a noticeable colour change to the front of my jeans! Its warm, wet, and TBH, feels comforting as it trickles back, into the rear of my jeans and warms my balls up... So I sit back down... And examine my stained crotch... The urine is warm at my ass, creating a small puddle in my leather chair, so i absent mindidly rub at the front of my wet warm jeans, with my right hand... IT FEELS GOOD... I feel myself becoming aroused, and just think FUCK IT!!!

GAME OVER ! So much for not holding it in ! IT FLOODS OUT... ll into my trousers and underwear, creating a puddle under my ass, in my padded chair, which I find myself squishing up and down in ! Guiltily at first, but after a few moments, I am bouncing up and down in this puddle of my own hot piss, totally unashamed off myself ! Plus the bouncing is causing it to run down the inside of my jean legs, not only causing a glowing colour change, but filling up my socks and shoes ! FUCK ME I NEDED TO PISS ! IT WONT STOP... But I DONT CARE !

Suddenly, I feel I need a shit... Almost in the same way, as if I were sat on the toilet already... So... I relax and.... <SNIP!>

Shall I continue my erotic story?

DO I WIN?

EngineCash · 07-17-2014, 04:56 AM

Well, it is a nice story, not so hot, but nice...

If you need to write a hot sex story, you need more sexual stuff to describe, you know what I mean. But, generally it's ok...

CDSmith · 07-17-2014, 08:38 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by baddog

Try using grammar check; you had errors in the first two sentences, so I stopped reading. Educate yourself about paragraphs while you are at it.

From my head to your keyboard.

OP -- I get it that the narrator is foreign, with Engrish maybe not being his first language, but it doesn't have to be written that badly to convey that.

07-17-2014, 01:01 AM	#1
smashits Confirmed User Industry Role: Join Date: Dec 2010 Posts: 304	Please give review on this story Hi All, This is my first erotic story. Please give review of it. Do you find it hot or not? Please comment. Slept with my boss I am Rishabh joined as Multinational IT Company as a software programmer on entry level. My office schedule remains tight due to my strict boss who remains always on toe to finish project on time. She is the strictest person, I have ever encountered in my life. She doesn?t allow men to smoke, girls to chat long on their phone and expects everyone to arrive on time. Overall, all my colleagues remain in terror due to her strict disciplinarian behaviour. By, God grace, I have always remained in Good books in her eyes. I always complete my work on time, solve complex problems in quick span and always talk to her with due respect, unlike other senior colleagues who see her with roving eyes. My boss is quite a stunner. She is 5 feet, 8 inches tall, fair, has knee length hair, slender figure and looks really hot in skirt and office shirt. Most people have tried to hit on her, but have never been successful in dating her or sleeping with her. She is known for no- nonsense attitude throughout in office; in fact, one senior manager got a tight slap in front of whole office when he tried to be over-friendly with her. From that day, no men in our company dared to approach her for date. Girls considered her as arrogant bitch and men were really scared of her. There were rumours that she is in a relationship with a boy working in defence since 9 years, but it has never been confirmed. Quite strangely, she has always been nice to me. One day, I forgot to bring my lunch, she offered me hers, which was a rare gesture from her side. Also, she always reply to me with a smile, even sometimes put a hand on my shoulders. No matter what the whole office say, what I can say about her is that she is tough from outside, but soft from inside. One day, I stayed late in office, since I have to finish a project on deadline. Almost, everyone had left and there was hardly anyone in office. Almost, everyone had left and there was hardly anyone in office. I finished my work by 2: am and was surprised to listen to a woman sobbing in my office. I went straight there from where voice was coming and found my boss crying a lot. I asked ?What happened?? She didn?t reply. I put my bag, brought a glass of water and put a pat on her shoulder. She took glass of water like an obedient child and told me her story. She told me, she was engaged to a guy for nine years, but he was not committing to marriage. Whenever, she prompt up a marriage question, he told her, he needs some time to concentrate on his career and can?t commit in a relationship till he is settled down, even though he was earning handsomely. Recently, he told her that his parents have found a sweet, innocent looking girl for him and he is marrying her. She was shocked that guy with whom she dreams of spending her whole life could walk away just like that. She told me she had given everything to him, her body, her money; in-fact had gone for abortion once, still he is deserting her. She was shaken completely. I felt really sympathetic towards her. To console her, I took her face and give her a kiss on her sweet red lips. She didn?t complain mind. To stop her crying, I again kissed her on lips and this time I kept my tongue rolling in her mouth. Now, she was aroused, taking deep breath. She smiled at me and taking advantage of fact that she didn?t mind, I move towards her neck and start kissing her, while kissing her neck, my hands move inside her shirt and fondled her breast. I continued doing so for five minutes. Now, she was completely excited, in fact she was blushing, couldn?t make an eye contact with me. Now, she was in total control of me, I started unbuttoning her shirt and took her off within a second, then my hands move towards button of her skirt, within few moments, I removed her skirt too. Now, she was really looking gorgeous in lingerie. I made her stand up and started kissing her navel, while my hands were fondling her breasts. From navel, I move to her neck again and give passionate kisses on her neck. Holding her tight, I opened hook of her bra, she was shocked, but couldn?t do anything. She put her hands on small breasts in shyness; I took away her hands to see her beautiful breasts. Her breasts were round and firm, I put my mouth in her breasts and start sucking them like a hungry child. I keep on sucking them till her nipples become completely red. After that, I move towards her lips and starts kissing them again, I move again to her neck, this time, I gave her a love byte, she gave a soft cry, but I didn?t stop. Soon, I lay her down on table, with me on top of her; I removed her panties and within a few moments, my penis was inside her vagina. Soon, she spread her legs to welcome me inside her body. I keep on thrusting my organ inside her while lying on top of her. Looking directly into her eyes while fucking her, I asked her, ?Marry me?, she said, ?what??, again I told her to marry me, if she refuses, I will keep on inserting my organ till she said yes. She laughed and said yes. With that, I gave a passionate kiss on her lips and release a large amount of cum inside her body. After this, emotional sexual encounter, both of us went back home. Soon, I met her parents and with hers as well as mine parents blessings, we got married within a month. Now, both of us are parents of 2 year old son and still laugh at passionate sexual encounter that took place in office. __________________ Adult Article Writing \| Adult Directory Submission \|

07-17-2014, 02:17 AM	#3
CurrentlySober Too lazy to wipe my ass Industry Role: Join Date: Aug 2002 Location: A Public Bathroom Posts: 38,549	My Attempt - Posted B4 - But???? I'm sat at the computer, busy doing my stuff... The odd email, surfing the net, looking up the odd detail from a movie thats playing in the background on IMDB, and... Enjoying GFY... Then, suddenly, I felt the urge 'To Go'.... That strange feeling where you have a very slight stomach ache, and are fully aware you have a penis... But I ignore it... After an hour or so, the tip of my penis is becoming very sensitive against my underwear, and my brain is telling me to visit the bathroom... I een look out the office door and can see the toilet across the hallway, but for some weird reason, I stay put... I'm still sitting infront of the PC over 15 mins later, and that tingle in my penis tip, and the feeling in my stomach, are now more of an actual pain... My buttocks and sphincter are also tensing up, and I find myself involuntary raising myself up and down from my chair at 30 second intervals, without feeling fully in control of my actions... TBH, It feels rather nice.... In a kinda naughty, sexual, kinda way... So, I glance again towards the toilet, and think enough is enough. Time to go, and go to raise myself out of my chair... BUT SOMETHING KEEPS ME SEATED ! Something primal - Something from the start of time - Something SO POWERFUL... I just cant resist... So I 'Relax...' But... Nothing happens! I cant just piss into my own clothing, when I can see the toilet! I admit that I WANT TOO... I have a desire to do so.. But... I just CANT - Its not normal - Not clean - Not correct - and... TBH - Extremely difficult... So, my body takes control, and I feel the urge 'subside'... But while the urge may have subsided, the desire has not... So I look from my desk towards the toilet, and back to my desk where there is a full pint glass of vodka and redbull... So, throwing caution to the wind, I pick up the glass, and begin to swallow the liquid nectar, as fast as i can... I dont wanna get 'Drunk' I wanna pee... So Bad ! So I swallow as quick as possible, and fill my belly ! Now... If I can only wait 30 mins or so, for it to 'pass through'... Then we will have a very naughty result... Luckily... I dont have to wait that long... So... I think to myself.. This is it... Self urination ! Lets go, and with one last loving glance towards the toilet, I sit back in my chair, relax and prepare for nature to take its course... But, just as I feel its about to spurt everywhere... Reality kicks in, and I 'Stop Myself' (Subconsciously) While I feel bad about stopping, I understand my body is just behaving itself, so I glance at the toilet, and push up on arms of my chair... THEN IT HAPPENS! One quick 'guilty' squirt! Only a tablespoon or so, but its shot out into my fresh white underwear, and caused a noticeable colour change to the front of my jeans! Its warm, wet, and TBH, feels comforting as it trickles back, into the rear of my jeans and warms my balls up... So I sit back down... And examine my stained crotch... The urine is warm at my ass, creating a small puddle in my leather chair, so i absent mindidly rub at the front of my wet warm jeans, with my right hand... IT FEELS GOOD... I feel myself becoming aroused, and just think FUCK IT!!! GAME OVER ! So much for not holding it in ! IT FLOODS OUT... ll into my trousers and underwear, creating a puddle under my ass, in my padded chair, which I find myself squishing up and down in ! Guiltily at first, but after a few moments, I am bouncing up and down in this puddle of my own hot piss, totally unashamed off myself ! Plus the bouncing is causing it to run down the inside of my jean legs, not only causing a glowing colour change, but filling up my socks and shoes ! FUCK ME I NEDED TO PISS ! IT WONT STOP... But I DONT CARE ! Suddenly, I feel I need a shit... Almost in the same way, as if I were sat on the toilet already... So... I relax and.... <SNIP!> Shall I continue my erotic story? *DO I WIN?* __________________ My AI Handywork... My Dream Gal... XXX 👁️ 👍️ 💩

07-17-2014, 04:56 AM	#4
EngineCash Confirmed User Join Date: Aug 2006 Posts: 2,816	Well, it is a nice story, not so hot, but nice... If you need to write a hot sex story, you need more sexual stuff to describe, you know what I mean. But, generally it's ok... __________________ support(@)enginecash.com

07-17-2014, 01:19 AM	#2
baddog So Fucking Banned Industry Role: Join Date: Apr 2001 Location: the beach, SoCal Posts: 107,089	Try using grammar check; you had errors in the first two sentences, so I stopped reading. Educate yourself about paragraphs while you are at it.