I have made a new video for my website's tour. Can any native english speaker tell me if there are any spelling errors in the text that sometimes appears in the video?
Thanks!
http://www.18andbusty.com
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http://www.18andbusty.com
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"and personal secrets sharing" does not sound right... maybe something like "sharing their personal secrets"
and GOOD GAWD! that is a sexy video! -
"Sometimes shy, sometimes exhuberant, always hot and horny!"
That's not a sentence. It works, but why not just throw in "they're always hot and horny."
"Hot and horny" is redundant, but whatever.
Also, "exhuberant"- that's the kind of word a non-native English speaker uses- you also misspelled it too.
The sentance altogether needs to be reworked, because exuberance is not the antonym to shyness.Comment
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"We offer you only beautiful teens with breath taking natural big boobs. The kind of girl that you see on the street and never forget."
"girl" in this case should be "girls". In the first sentance you're talking about "teens", why in second have the singular?
Also, it's the "kind of girls WHO you see..."
"Exhibiting their perfect shaped body just for you guys"
That's not a sentence. Should be:
"You now have the chance to see them here, exhibiting their perfect shaped body just for you guys."
"perfect shaped body"-> "PERFECTLY shaped BODIES
"Feel the girlfriend experience, have a sneak peek into their personal lives."
AND have a sneak peek etc., or just make that two sentences.Comment
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There are other grammatical nitpiks, but more concerning to me is the music- too depressing.Comment
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Looking great man!Comment
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Wow !
I wasn't expecting that much help!
Thanks to all of you for your inputs
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The video is not playing smooth. I am under a 6MB connection.
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I liked the video so much I'm satisfied and see no need in paying for a subscription.
I'll just watch the video again.
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"Naturaly" should be "Naturally"
"Breath taking" should be one word: "Breathtaking"
Thanks for the boobs :D
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