looking for some critic's on my mainstream site

**The Apprentice** · 12-05-2004, 03:28 PM

Originally posted by chauncy tc
just loaded the first part of my modeling agency's site looking for some critic's on the look
www.treasurestalent.com

the design's alright, I don't know anything about your products and services, so I really can't write a full review.

Your opening line is "Treasure Talent is not a modeling agency "-That shouldn't be your opening line- according to Don Lapre, you should state WHAT your company does first, and what it does NOT as a conclusion, like a thesis.

**abyss_al** · 12-05-2004, 03:29 PM

looks good, but lags a bit

**alexg** · 12-05-2004, 03:30 PM

Originally posted by chauncy tc
just loaded the first part of my modeling agency's site looking for some critic's on the look
www.treasurestalent.com

i'd give it 7 out of 10

pretty nice design

**The Apprentice** · 12-05-2004, 03:30 PM

Originally posted by The Apprentice
the design's alright, I don't know anything about your products and services, so I really can't write a full review.

Your opening line is "Treasure Talent is not a modeling agency "-That shouldn't be your opening line- according to Don Lapre, you should state WHAT your company does first, and what it does NOT as a conclusion, like a thesis.

While you may be a fine wordsmith to your girlfreind, there is formula for repeatedly catching a fish.

**chauncy tc** · 12-05-2004, 03:37 PM

thanks I am rewriting all the copy right now for all the pages

**Dynamix** · 12-05-2004, 04:00 PM

Nice design, although I personally hate popup menus like you've used. Just my personal opinion though, everything else looks great. Some nice lookin models on the opening page

**Babagirls** · 12-05-2004, 04:00 PM

why is the title of your page "about.gif"?? lol

**Fatalspeed** · 12-05-2004, 04:00 PM

nice clean site, 7.5 / 10

**Dynamix** · 12-05-2004, 04:01 PM

Originally posted by Dynamix
Nice design, although I personally hate popup menus like you've used. Just my personal opinion though, everything else looks great. Some nice lookin models on the opening page

nice lookin photos*

just one model

**chauncy tc** · 12-05-2004, 04:10 PM

no we currently have 23 girls and 7 guys on contract I am just not finished building there profile pages

**Dynamix** · 12-05-2004, 04:12 PM

Originally posted by chauncy tc
no we currently have 23 girls and 7 guys on contract I am just not finished building there profile pages

well the one on the front page is definately some eye candy

**chauncy tc** · 12-05-2004, 04:17 PM

yeah she is definately easy on the eyes; she is also doing a site for my new affilate program which i will not shamelessy spam in my posts untill it is much closer to being finished

**pornguy** · 12-05-2004, 05:35 PM

Over all pretty nice looking. But hard to say with so many links not working.

**tony286** · 12-05-2004, 05:53 PM

Originally posted by The Apprentice
the design's alright, I don't know anything about your products and services, so I really can't write a full review.

Your opening line is "Treasure Talent is not a modeling agency "-That shouldn't be your opening line- according to Don Lapre, you should state WHAT your company does first, and what it does NOT as a conclusion, like a thesis.

I agree

**SureFire** · 12-05-2004, 05:55 PM

I get the about us page with poorly written copy and 404s clicking on the links.

The model is pretty on the page but the photos lack...the whites of her eyes, her teeth and shadows.

Would it not be better to show three different models instead one?

looking for some critic's on my mainstream site

looking for some critic's on my mainstream site

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