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Old 11-10-2005, 08:50 PM  
Elli
Reach for those stars!
 
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Join Date: Apr 2003
Location: Vancouver, BC
Posts: 17,991
ok, feedback as I go through:

page 2:
it's not a surprise update if it's listed in your weekly calendar
You don't say what the pictures and videos are OF
a link to the personal diary would be nice, or a sample

page 3:
all of your quick list is "about me". But you haven't told them why you're so great yet.
Contests and giveaways should be linked to info about the contests

page 4:
what do you do in your webcams?
very nice vid quality! Talk about it!

page 5:
NICE pics! How many per shoot? How hardcore do you get? We don't know

page 6:
I'm assuming the total number of pics will change with each update?
You say "can't wait to see you inside" but you haven't established a rapport with the surfer yet. You're assuming he read through all the text on page 1?

Nice quality, I'm just not sure if it would result in a sale. That's my two cents, take it or leave it.
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