hi...the girl looks nice and the lightning is okay for the internet....try to experiment a little with the light, there is so many ways when you shoot digital.
For posing, cropping and angles....check out my site, you can get a lot of ideas there.
Not that I'm bragging,and saying that I'm the best, but I have shot girls for top magazines for more than 25 years, so I must have done something right
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