Rip on my first gallery please.

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  • jmarzlak
    Confirmed User
    • Jan 2004
    • 632
    #1

    Rip on my first gallery please.

    Ok so this is my first attempt at a gallery. Help me out by making fun of it, I know you guys are good at it.

    http://www.jmporn.com/teenkelly/01/

    And for the braces thing I am always reading that niches work and a couple of my friends love girls with braces, its sick I know. Leave that at the top or change it to some teen kelly something or other?

    ps. its off center I a little I know, I did it late last night and kinda threw it together as you can tell. Let the flames begin.
    Promote Nikki and Teen Kelly
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    • AlienQ - BANNED FOR LIFE
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      • Mar 2003
      • 30307
      #2
      No.

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        • BMI Lace
          Too lazy to set a custom title
          • Mar 2004
          • 16116
          #3
          Need a different top logo.
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            • -=HOAX=-
              Confirmed User
              • Dec 2001
              • 4365
              #4
              Well if your niche is braces, then your content should be....err....braces.

              There is one clear pic of her braces. One.

              Match the content to the niche, the message to the content, and the sponsor to the message.

              The only thing that even mentions braces is the header. The ad text(message) is all teen, the content is teen. And, sure shit...the sponsor is teen. The braces crap simply confuses the surfer, but its not designed well enough to grab attention anyway.

              Never distract your surfer from the "Task at Hand".

              Back the drawing board pissnozzle.
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                • TheSenator
                  Too lazy to set a custom title
                  • Feb 2003
                  • 13330
                  #5
                  not bad....not great....but will convert....

                  You should try different sponsors too....diversify your portfolio...
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                    • jhauser
                      Confirmed User
                      • Dec 2002
                      • 2924
                      #6
                      The instant access is huge.. Honestly I was thinking more close ups with braces around a large penis... Just my 2 cents.
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                        • jmarzlak
                          Confirmed User
                          • Jan 2004
                          • 632
                          #7
                          ok I think I'm gonna change the top part to "teen kelly"
                          Promote Nikki and Teen Kelly

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                            • Babagirls
                              Text Writer
                              • Feb 2001
                              • 18812
                              #8
                              too much text in the middle (write a sentence, not a life story.)

                              get other teaser pics-lookin a girl by the pool in the bikini doesnt make me wanna see more. you can see that on a beach.


                              also, change "INSTANT ACCESS" to something more attractive, like "SEE HER NAKED NOW!" or something.

                              "INSTANT ACCESS" to surfers mean "click her to pay me"





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                                • jmarzlak
                                  Confirmed User
                                  • Jan 2004
                                  • 632
                                  #9
                                  Originally posted by Babagirls
                                  too much text in the middle (write a sentence, not a life story.)

                                  get other teaser pics-lookin a girl by the pool in the bikini doesnt make me wanna see more. you can see that on a beach.


                                  also, change "INSTANT ACCESS" to something more attractive, like "SEE HER NAKED NOW!" or something.

                                  "INSTANT ACCESS" to surfers mean "click her to pay me"
                                  ok makes thanks
                                  Promote Nikki and Teen Kelly

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