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Originally Posted by ottopottomouse
more thoughts:
logo is trying too hard
think you need a box around the in one serving to highlight it
The important stuff breaks up in quite bad places being centred I think it needs some work. I also think there is too much there as if you have had a lot of ideas what you wanted to say and just said all of them.
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hey, thanks for the thoughtful input and time taken to do this. points noted.
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Originally Posted by bm bradley
this almost reads like it was written by someone not native to the English language
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it wasn't.
it's brainstormed text written by a college grad- me. as mentioned, the back panel is not finished, i included it here since someone mentioned the nutritional info was missing.
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Originally Posted by grumpy
give the whole job to amp and be surprised ( dont know if he still does this type of work )
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my intent was to do that after getting this initial batch of 100 out to those who've already expressed an interest in trying it.
