I listened to it a few times and I must say it's really nice. She defiantly has the potential
All she needs is the right people behind her and she will do well.
As for the song a few things stuck out for me. One is I liked the fact that the guy also sang and didn't rap his part. I didn't like the like in " you're like a ghost to me " and would maybe try " you're a ghost to me " instead. I like Stickey's idea about the song starting with her whispering something and the end seemed unfinished as if it were cutoff. Maybe finish it off with him whispering something too.
That's my initial reaction but what the hell do I know
I will say again that it's really good, very commercial ( sell well ) and worthy of doing an album.