Critic This New Site Please

[fear]

I like it.... in a http://www.geocities.com/webtekrocks/ kinda way

[stocktrader23]

Originally posted by fear
I like it.... in a http://www.geocities.com/webtekrocks/ kinda way

Man before I clicked on a couple of links I thought they were for real.

[lustbin]

Okay.. I'm a newbie here still so i've been trying really hard not to talk smack .. and while I do appreciate you taking my galleries NJ, this site needs some more work.

Option 1: Trash it, start over.

Option 2:

Lose the hellfire red marbling. As-is it is built for 1024x768 and honestly it is very "geocities" or "tripod" looking. Maybe tripod is a better answer. Anyway,

Maybe this is petty, but those hilighting buttons remind me of something you could cut and paste out of some "Elite HTML Here" page. Maybe put together a new menu?

Make your sponsor links bigger on the top. Maybe a heading "Recommended Pay Sites" for them..?

Center that banner for "Amateur PayPerView" if you are going to have it there at all, though I'd replace that with a decent logo.

Red on black is hard to read.

The menu frame on the left is wasting space -- once you have this built for an 800x600 browser you won't have much real-estate left over for what you are actually offering. Try and find a better solution for that.

Fix your proportions for your links table.... It is only taking up pro-rata about 2/3rds of the frame it lives in- why not stretch it out a little if you are going to use frames at all?

Really NastyJack.. I'd trash it. I'm not a "designer" but I've done a little here and there. Shitcan it and start over.

I was just looking at orchid design's portfolio last night and they have some fantastic examples.....no i'm not affiliate in any way with them, I just liked what I saw. Go look there for some ideas.

Sorry, I don't like it. At all.

I'm not claiming to be the next TGP Picasso, so if you want to critique my site, have at it: http://www.thelustbin.com/

I'm going to just use it for now as a 404 landing page. Wrote some scripts that generates the whole mess daily out of a random bank of galleries I have.

Good luck NJ.

[MuleScrote]

Originally posted by lustbin


Red on black is hard to read.

Then why do you use it?

[lustbin]

It makes me horny!

[kmanrox]

http://www.knocked-up.com/

had this done for $350, you got ripped bro

[SwingersDiary]

Originally posted by kmanrox
http://www.knocked-up.com/

had this done for $350, you got ripped bro

Not bad at all for $350.. who's the designer?

[Sassyass]

Man,
you got it made....
$150.00 for 10 minutes worth of work.

Where do I sign up for that gig...

[Interlude]

Originally posted by Tipsy
If you really can't see what's wrong with it you shouldn't be charging anyone anything to build sites.

[NastyJack]

Well I listened to what you said and made the proper changes.
I still have to work on the link page and a few other things but I hope you'll find it a little better then what you did since you last had a look at it.

Thanks for your help - it's greatly appreciated!

http://www.adultxplus.com/blackvelvet/index.html

Regards
NastyJack

[CumSensei]

Still sucks....

[Tipsy]

Ugh

[rogerbo]

You still do the same shit as allways. Why do you copy your shity site and sell it including your refcodes to a poor newbie ??
You'r realy one of the bigest idiots i met in my live.
Don't you have a little honor in you ??
I would be a shamed if i would sell someone something like that for $150.
Here is a free Tip. Buy a site for $100 so you still can make $50.
But then atleast the poor guy gets something which is worth $100 bucks.

NJ how comes that you now do accept any critiques ? when we tryd to help you before the only thing you could do was Drinking and then come back and spamm us and tell us that we'r all Idiots.

But you know I'm happy you'r here so at least i had some fun Today

[Heineken]

Did you say u paid 15 $. cause it's a lot!

[Juggernaut]

Isn't this the same style of design you posted a week or so ago? - any level headed designer knows that in order for you to allow anyone else to see your work, *you* of all people should be happy with it... clearly you yourself think it's crap on some level.

The one thing that bothers me most about this, is that it seems you're selling a crappy design to a person that is obviously new to the adult web industry, even more so, to design. Thus giving them the impression that this is how it is; when, it isn't.

It does not suprise me if this is what you do all the time, get someone to buy a design off of you for a price and with the design comes some kind of advice on "making money" on the internet? every site you've posted so far, has been technically under developed and look as if they're a scam of some kind.

Maybe you should look at selling insurance, that seems to be a boom industry every time war happens.

[Roald]

Originally posted by SwingersDiary



Not bad at all for $350.. who's the designer?

That would be me

[thequeen]

Originally posted by NastyJack


I also checked out the site that MetaformX is selling for $200.00
http://www.everclearproductions.com/clients/open2/ and I didn't see anything special about it.

No offense dude but that site looks 100 times better then that 1996 looking shit you made.

[evildick]

I would get rid of the frames altogether. They are a pain for surfers who like to surf by right clicking and opening in a new window, and from what I understand, they can also hurt you in the search engines.

[fear]

Wonder if this will work:

delete http://www.adultxplus.com/blackvelvet/index.html*.*

[CumSensei]

Originally posted by fear
Wonder if this will work:

delete http://www.adultxplus.com/blackvelvet/index.html*.*

Naa its still there.

[Rip]

Here....

[Burtman]

You said you sold this site design for $150 but then you are posting on the traffic trading board:
http://bbs.gofuckyourself.com/showth...hreadid=108596
Hi Guys,

I just started this new site and I need some small trades so if you have a new site and would like to exchange links with
http://www.adultxplus.com/blackvelvet/index.html please take a sec and click on the "contact me" link so we can start some trades.

Regards
NastyJack


I think you should gather all of your multiple personalities together and get their shit together.


Burtman

[NastyJack]

Originally posted by Burtman
I think you should gather all of your multiple personalities together and get their shit together.

Burtman

I didn't charge $150.00 just to slap the site on the net dude.
I'm also going to drive traffic to it and keep updating it for as long as he wants me to.

The guy knows I'm no pro but just the same his pleased with it.

I also would like to add that if he doesn't make his money back that I'll give him his $150.00 back.

Anyway, I changed a few things on it as it was suggested so you may want to have another look at it.

www.adultxplus.com/blackvelvet/index.html

I'll be updating it today so if anyone has anymore suggestions I would appreciate hearing them.

Regards
NastyJack

[TDF]

my eyes...my beautiful eyes!!

[rogerbo]

Originally posted by NastyJack


I didn't charge $150.00 just to slap the site on the net dude.
I'm also going to drive traffic to it and keep updating it for as long as he wants me to.

That's about the bigest Joke you made sofar You want to drive traffic to it ?? HOW if you'r not jet able to drive traffc to your own site.

Remeber just 20 hits a month aint no traffic