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Old 02-15-2006, 05:25 PM  
lulu36
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Critique our Tour? (Pinkgasm baby steps)

hey H & T,

looks awesome! seems to me you know what you're doing!! lol. good work.

so u don't know me from a whole in the ground. but i've worked on both your ambushes. i love your work. here's my honest opinion for whatever its worth. i can be a little analytical about these things. can't help it. u can tell me to bug off though. i can deal with that. lol

http://www.pinkgasm.com/tour2/
love it. love it. love it. i'm partial to the superheroes. strictly look wise - the only thing i'd move is the top box to the right a bit so that its more centered with the others. so that introducing sexual superheroes... is centered underneath it. that's it.


i like this page: http://www.pinktribe.com/ love the pink "tribe" concept
feels inclusive. good feeling for webmasters

i dig your join page. really well done. http://join.pinkgasm.com/signup/sign...MDowOjE&step=2
only critique (and i'm just picky for words, marketing could mean crap to you: this is what you have right now. "join us
Help us inject the world with a jolt of positive sex energy" very good.

a suggestion: "Join us.
Inject the world with a jolt of postive sex (or sexual) energy.

my reasoning: Join us, help us kinda the same thing.

Inject the world with a jolt of positive sex energy"
- this is more of an action statement that. again making them feel as though they are part of something. contributing to greater sexual good. with the superheros. reinforcing the super hero theme. plus, its shorter and prhaps will be catchier.

hope i'll still get a hug from you both in Phoenix!!

Pink Cheers abound to you both

Lulu

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