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I used to have an amateur site..different niche and all, but I definitely think your text could use some help...how bout something like this:
"Hi! My name is Julia Blue, and I'm so excited to be sharing my naughty little secret with you! I've always been the "good girl" and when I turned 18, I decided I needed a change! I started just doing what I wanted, because, hey, I'm only young once, right? Every girl dreams of being a model, and I jumped at the chance to show off my sexy tight body! But don't tell anyone, ok? My parents would freak out if they knew I was taking such sexy pics, so let's keep it just between you and me, ok?"
Jeez, I dunno, that sucked, too, but the point I was trying to make is that your text should sound young, and excited, and bubbly, like your average 18 year old seems. Her personality or persona should jump out at you. It is a personality driven site..if your surfer wanted to just look at random naked chicks, he could look anywhere...you have to reel him in and your hook is your girl, but it's not JUST her looks..it's just as much the personality that is conveyed. Otherwise he'll just find a 10-15 dollar mega site and look at young tight-bodied brunettes there, right?
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