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Xster · 05-02-2005, 06:48 PM

How would you rather see someone die in a Mob movie...

Plastic bag over the head?

or choked with a wire?

In my screenplay "TOWNIES" I use the wire for one of the mob hits, but now I'm thinking the plastic bag might be more ammusing. The victim could poke a hole with his finger, where his mouth is, as he is suffocating, to breath again (that's what I would do). Then the hitman gets frustrated and shoots the victim in the back of the head?

Here's what I have now with the wire.

INT. DOYLE?S CAR - NIGHT
Doyle slides in and sets his gun on the passenger seat. He sticks a key in the ignition and looks into the rear view mirror. Suddenly sees --

MICKEY staring back at him in the reflection.

DOYLE reaches for his gun. In the blink of an eye, Mickey wraps steel wire around Doyle's neck and tightens. Doyle gags and tries to pry his fingers under the wire. Mickey brings his head up against Doyle?s ear, teeth gritted.

MICKEY
Give Elvis my best.

The wire tears into Mickey?s latex gloves. Doyle?s eyes bulge out of his apple red face.

--------------- Im meeting with mgm monday so I'm just trying to polish this bitch up before hand. thanks.

05-02-2005, 06:48 PM
Xster Registered User Join Date: Sep 2003 Location: Boston Posts: 577	The better way to "whack" someone How would you rather see someone die in a Mob movie... Plastic bag over the head? or choked with a wire? In my screenplay "TOWNIES" I use the wire for one of the mob hits, but now I'm thinking the plastic bag might be more ammusing. The victim could poke a hole with his finger, where his mouth is, as he is suffocating, to breath again (that's what I would do). Then the hitman gets frustrated and shoots the victim in the back of the head? Here's what I have now with the wire. INT. DOYLE?S CAR - NIGHT Doyle slides in and sets his gun on the passenger seat. He sticks a key in the ignition and looks into the rear view mirror. Suddenly sees -- MICKEY staring back at him in the reflection. DOYLE reaches for his gun. In the blink of an eye, Mickey wraps steel wire around Doyle's neck and tightens. Doyle gags and tries to pry his fingers under the wire. Mickey brings his head up against Doyle?s ear, teeth gritted. MICKEY Give Elvis my best. The wire tears into Mickey?s latex gloves. Doyle?s eyes bulge out of his apple red face. --------------- Im meeting with mgm monday so I'm just trying to polish this bitch up before hand. thanks. Last edited by Xster; 05-02-2005 at 06:50 PM..