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Old 02-08-2005, 01:31 PM  
.:St Ides:.
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Originally Posted by Tala
Not bad!

However: " her female master bounds her" "binds" not "bounds" and there's something inherently wrong with a "female master." But hey, whatever sells, I guess.

"clits" needs an apostrophe.

"frezy" you need an n in there.

Otherwise it looks good.
noted and will be changed thanks
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