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I thought it was good. The only critique I'd offer is to watch the dialogue in terms of keeping the speaking style consistent.
There were a few times (mainly with 'Mickey') that he seemed to go from a more laid back, 'bahstan' kind of talk to more proper english.
Eg "There is an extra large sweatshirt" would probably be something like 'there's a extra large sweatshirt'. Or his 'blend in with the dark' statement.
Niggling little point, but it threw me off just a tiny bit each time I ran into it while reading.
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