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Did you mean to potray these guys as first funny and somewhat likeable one second....to cold blooded killers the next? Because the 180 the script takes in the first 5min when that guy is killed with the knife is going to set the tone for the whole movie. Little jokes aren't going to go over so smoothly.
Maybe leaving that guys fate open until the end of the movie would be better way of going about it. Or maybe later.....it is brought up in conversation.
If your attempting to make these guys look cold blooded for the next 100 pages than mission accomplished.
If not....then don't show the killling on screen. Refer to it later in the script.
Something like...
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"So what did you guys do with that runner"
responds by:
motions towards his neck with cutting motion while laughing.
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oh and excellent work.
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