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Originally posted by dennisthemenace
It's good.
2 quick things:
The phrasing of "declarations of love" especially on the word declarations is weird for me.
Also, the transition to the chorus at that point doesn't fit right (again, for me) like blunt, hurried... needs something to smooth it.
2nd transition to chorus hits better, I don't know if it's the preparation from the first doing that or just the flow at that point.
I'm very sensitive to music, so maybe it won't hit others the same.
Good otherwise, I could easily picture that on the radio or on mtv in the 80's which would make it more than socially acceptable nowadays.
I like the voice too, it's haunting and memorable. Good luck with your music - was my first dream that I've strayed way off course from.
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yea, this is essentially still a demo - I recorded this at my home studio not at like a world-class multimillion dollar recording studio.
I just want to start shopping it around at this point - I used to work in radio so I have a lot of contacts still in the biz.
The transitions would be smoothed out if I was working with a good producer but I think the basic idea of the song is pretty fleshed out.
Also, I want to get a good guitarist and emphasize the heavier side of the song more - make it more Linkin Park and less 80's. Thanks for the critiques - good stuff to think about.