2 sales on tgp traffic is good, but at 5000 hits to sponsor improvements are needed.
1) THis is just hardcore. Everyone has hardcore sites.
2) you used multiple girls. How can a guy fall in love with a girl if you only have one shot of her. He can't fall for her, then see her get fucked with "his own" cock.
3) "ENTER HERE" ... for what?
4) You totally forgot to even sell.