02-27-2004, 03:20 AM
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Too lazy to set a custom title
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Join Date: Jan 2001
Posts: 51,692
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Originally posted by Tala
What shermsshack said, and if I may, (even if I may not  ):
compagny should be company, item should be items, ("In case you order multiple item"), and setup in this case should be two separate words. Matter of fact, I'd get rid of setup altogether and exchange it for "arrange".
"oustside" outside
"The coat actually look better in reality then in the pictures " "looks"
"avirex's" Capitalize the a.
"Don't miss that unique opportunity to make yourself a nice gift ." Try "Don't miss this unique opportunity to get yourself a nice gift." Or even better, "Don't miss this unique opportunity to pick up a great gift for yourself or your deserving lady." (Text sells, I swear it does!) The jacket has already been made.
"From experience filling forms can take up to 20 minutes for some countries ." Stick a comma between experience and filling, otherwise it's rather ocnfusing.
Capitalize Canada and Quebec.
"groth " growth
"compagnies" companies
Nice jacket! I'm sure it will sell fast!
<small>(Please do not be offended by the corrections. It's my job, I'm up late, and I'm really bored. You have such a professional looking setup that I wanted to help.)
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Thanx a LOT . [email protected] send me your paypal adress I'l ship you couple bucks ... best answer I ever got from here ;)
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Originally Posted by rayadp05
I rebooted, deleted temp files, history, cookies and everything...still cannot view the news clip. All I see is that fucking gay ass music video from "Rick Roll". Anyone else have a different link to the news clip?
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